回报寄托（AW5分心得+习作）

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我的AW分数虽然不能和大牛们相比，但是我深知这一路走过来的不易，希望自己的小小心得能让10G的朋友们少走弯路

      首先从我身上大家一定要看到信心。我去年5月考过旧托作文只有4分，可见英文写作能力之差，而且备考之前打字属于龟速。我报的是今年4月25的作文，但是直到3月底的时候我还处于毫无头绪的状态，根本不知道该怎么备战作文，心里很恐慌，手头只有一本北美范文，越看越觉得怎么可能写出这样的文章阿！后来从寄托上看到了很多前辈的经验贴，才恍然大悟，也就是说基本上是用30天的时间搞定的，每天4，5个小时吧！所以大家现在一定是有希望的！

      具体心得如下：

      （1）先看北美范文，对issue有一个大概的感觉，开始拟一个argu的粗略模版。同时背几篇issue范文，随便哪几篇都可以，学习范文语言，找感觉。这个过程大概需要5天。我是在3月底做完这些事情的。而且对于和我一样打字不行的朋友，建议用范文联系打字，既熟悉了范文又提高了打字速度，一举两得。

      （2）分类列issue提纲。我四月前之所以很抓狂，就是因为面对issue题目不知道该写什么。开窍后，我用了4天时间把高频前100的提纲全部列了一遍。这里我想说，对于时间不充裕的朋友，抓住高频比走马观花的看完所有issue题目更有效。这次6G作文，我认识的所有G友里面有80%的人是考到了高频前50的题目，100%是考到了前100的题目。我当时就果断的放弃了100之后的issue题目，看都没看完。事实证明还是可行的。另外小补充一点：这里高频是指全国总高频。

      列提纲的过程中，先自己想想，然后可以参考G友们的思路，而且最好分类列提纲（按网上通用的那11类分类法）。我当时参考的就是两位寄托前辈的提纲（很抱歉，考完作文之后被我删了，当时没想到我的作文成绩也可以上寄托分享心得）。请大家耐心翻翻以前的帖子，最好找两个不同的人写的提纲，这样可以启发思维。

      （3）列argu提纲。因为argu只能抽一道题目，所以高频概率比较小，我把所有的argu题目都过了三遍：第一遍，熟悉题目，认识生词。第二遍，把每一道题都列提纲，就是把逻辑错误简要用中文写出来。第三遍，背诵提纲，并且想具体的他因。比如，两个城市的错误类比，就想好a城和b城到底有什么差异：气候，劳动力资源，交通。。。这样做的好处是，在考试时节省大量时间，我后来看到题目5秒钟就能想起有哪几点逻辑错误，再过一会又能想起具体的理由。这样能腾出时间把语言写得更从容更好一些。

    （4）模考。我的所有习作几乎都是模考中写出来的，也就是限时练习。我感觉用模考软件限时练习比不限时写作更容易出状态，从四月中旬开始到考试前，我每天模考一次，issue一篇，argu一篇，题目是按照高频顺序从高到低选择的。模考一共进行了十几天，在这段时间里，我还会不断熟悉argu的提纲，完善模版，并且把issue高频前50的提纲更加完善，比如找更合适、更具体的例子。我觉得平时尽量把题材、例子的准备充分，因为考场上毕竟时间紧迫，最多只能发挥出正常水平，一般难以临场发挥。

总体而言，gre作文思路清晰是最重要的，有条理清楚的论点并且有合理的论据支撑，我估计自己能拿5分可能就是思路还算清楚吧。不过我的教训就是，没有找一个partner交流讨论，所以思维上可能有局限甚至步入误区自己都不知道。10g的朋友们有机会一定要找partner，或者至少把习作给其他人看看，会有意想不到的收获的。

      本来前几天知道分数之后就很想马上写心得发上来，因为明天就要去德国暑期交流，这几天太多事情要忙，所以耽搁到今天。向wangwei darwin和lastangel致歉阿（真对不起，早就答应你们说好要写心得和发习作了）~~另外下面也附了两篇平时的习作，希望对大家有帮助~~祝10G的朋友都考出理想的成绩哦！年底一起为申请08fall努力~~

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TOPIC: ISSUE43 - "To be an effective leader, a public official must maintain the highest ethical and moral standards."
WORDS: 552          TIME: 上午 12:45:00          DATE: 2007-4-19

Is it necessary for political leaders to maintain the highest ethical and moral standards, as the speaker asserts? I fundamentally agree with the speaker insofar as ethics and morality are valuable for leaders. Yet, strictly followed, there are many other qualities besides virtue that should be taken into consideration.

To begin with, one compelling argument in favor of the speaker has to do with the importance of ethnics and morality for effective leadership, given that a leader with high quality would pay attention more to the benefit of the general populace and the entire nation than individual interest. A telling illustration involves the first American president Washington. After the end of his second tenure of presidency, President Washington refused to continue a third term as he saw the outcome from many South American nations in which power controlled by one ruler for a long period of time led to extreme power and tyranny. His action set a good example for the following presidents and opened the door to democratic society for the United States.

Next, another compelling has to do with the fact that leaders without high morality standards, though smart and brave might bring huge disasters to the nation and even to the entire world. One need look no far than the dictator Adolf Hitler of Nazi Germany, who was actually a intelligent leader but unfortunately lacking virtue and ethnics. As a result, his initiated the World War II, conducted the policy of genocide, and invaded a large number of neighboring nations that cause hundreds of thousands of death. Thus, Hitler's lesson informs us leaders without virtues are ineffective, even terrible, to human beings.

However, though ethnics and moralities play a significant role on effectiveness of leading, there are many other factors that affect the leader's achievements. After all, leaders should be competent for his or her position while those with mere virtues do not deserve high evaluation. Consider, for instance, the 31st president of American Hoover was a kind gentleman with high morals and ethnics; however, he lacks the sufficient capability to regulate the government and lead the nation to get away from the economic depression. Hence, during his presidency, many citizens suffered from homelessness and unemployment and the whole economy was in poor condition. One can hardly regard him as a effective leader, though the populace give high assessment to his quality.

Besides, albeit high ethnics and morality are worthy qualities for the leaders, it is unnecessary to require extremely all the leaders to maintain the highest standards, since no individual is flawless that we should focus more heavily on the leaders' abilities than trivial fallacies. For example, the former president of America Bill Clinton, apart from the sexual scandal, indeed contributed greatly to his nation. Under his operations, the United States witness a gold era of national economy with rapid business and technology development and low unemployment and inflation rates. Accordingly, it is unfair to overlooks Clinton's great achievements and effective leadership just due to his mistake in the scandal.

In the final analysis, it is of great significance of the leaders to maintain high standards of ethnics and morality in order for serving the nations and populace effectively. Nevertheless, there is no necessity to require an extreme standard of the highest level since mere virtues are insufficient.


[ 本帖最后由 lastangel 于 2007-7-14 01:03 编辑 ]

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TOPIC: ARGUMENT17 - The following appeared in a letter to the editor of the Walnut Grove town newspaper.

"Walnut Grove's town council has advocated switching from EZ Disposal (which has had the contract for trash collection services in Walnut Grove for the past ten years) to ABC Waste, because EZ recently raised its monthly fee from $2,000 to $2,500 a month, whereas ABC's fee is still $2,000. But the town council is mistaken; we should continue using EZ. EZ collects trash twice a week, while ABC collects only once. Moreover, EZ-which, like ABC, currently has a fleet of 20 trucks-has ordered additional trucks. Finally, EZ provides exceptional service: 80 percent of respondents to last year's town survey agreed that they were 'satisfied' with EZ's performance."
WORDS: 393          TIME: 上午 12:30:00          DATE: 2007-4-14

In this argument, the author claims that the Walnut Grove's town council should continue using EZ instead of ABC, by citing the evidence that EZ collects trash more frequently and has ordered additional trucks, and a recent survey showing residents are satisfied about EZ. However, the argument suffers from several logic flaws that render it unconvincing.

First of all, the fact that EZ collects trash twice a week while ABC collects only once is scant evidence that the former provides better service than the latter. The author falsely equates the frequency of trash collection with quality of service. It is entirely possible that ABC is more proficient that it only takes half of time of EZ to collect trash. Without ruling out this possibility the author cannot rely on the mere fact of collection frequency to draw the conclusion that EZ is better.

In the second place, the argument rests on the assumption that EZ's order of additional trucks will result in its better service. However no evidence is offered to substantiate the assumption. Lacking information about ABC's equipments, it is just as possible that ABC’s current trucks own better performance than those of EZ do, that the former need not to order more trucks. Or perhaps EZ do not plan to put the newly ordered trucks into use immediately. Without eliminating these and other alternative explanations, the argument cannot convince me the conclusion that additional trucks will result in better service of EZ.   

Finally, by relying on the survey to support its conclusion the argument depends on the assumption that the result of the survey is statistically reliable. It is entirely possible that the respondents are not representative of the overall residents of the town. In addition, the argument lacks information about the size of the sample surveyed. The small the size, the less reliable the result of the survey. Absent information of the progress of the survey, the author cannot depend on it to draw any firm conclusion about the satisfaction of residents to EZ's service.

In sum, the argument is not persuasive as it stands. To strengthen it, the author must provide better evidence that the collection frequency is important factor in evaluating performance of trash disposal companies, and more trucks will ensure better service. To better assess the argument, I would need more information about the sample of the survey.   



[ 本帖最后由 lastangel 于 2007-7-14 01:03 编辑 ]

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赞 赞 赞~
谢谢分享哦~ 学习ing..

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哎呀！我不知道第二篇的字体怎么会变成这个样子？！斑竹请帮我删掉好吗？对不起阿！让我重新发上来吧

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帮你编辑下好了
有时候WORD文档贴进来字体就会抽风, 也不知道为什么

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呵呵这就好！谢谢斑竹！吓坏我了~~

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thanks

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要好好学习一下LZ的文章,算得上是范文了.

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顶一下

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感谢分享，，学习``````:)

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:handshake 谢谢分享~~~

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:loveliness:
有好几天没有上网，今天看到不少好的文章啊！

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