托福作文是给世界看的

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发信人: mystar (山间流水，淡雅调琴), 信区: Abroad
标  题: 托福作文是给世界看的
发信站: 珞珈山水 ( 2003年04月21日10:16:05 星期一), 站内信件

今天，我反复研究了一篇ets托福的6分作文，给我最深的感受就是任何一篇ets打上了6分
的作文，应该都是可以传到世界上每一个考托福角落的考生手上的作文，"它"经得起时间
的考验，基本上经得起每一个托福考生的考验，基本上过得了每一个托福研究机构的眼睛
。它所要做到的，如果让我用两个字来概括它的内涵，让我想起的是“中庸”二字。

今天，ets要我写“音乐反应中国文化”的论题，我的心有点震撼.....因为在这么短的时
间，这么少的字，要表现这么一个深刻的主题，是不容易的。
我想把我今天写的这篇文章先交给我的母校--武汉大学的这块小小的论坛板块上的学友看
看，看看能否经得起同学们的眼睛。因为我想，我们gter在写托福作文的时候，ets是通过
我们来了解我们，不但我们的写作水平，还了解我们这个人，另外的，通过千千万万对于
这个论题写作的中国学生来看我们的民族，来了解我们的文化，同时增长ets本身的见识和
水平。另外，ets还可能要把你的6分作文传到世界上所有考托福的考生的手上，经起全球
gter的考验，你所反映的民族文化会影响看到所有看你作文的人。所以，我本人也不敢马
虎。在这里，我先拿出的是自己的作文。接着的是ets的参考6分作文。我想,这两篇作文的
距离到底有多远呢？
我的英语水平很差，能力也非常有限，请各位学兄，学姐，学弟，学妹倾情指教。

ets是这样平静而有深度的提问的“Music tells us something about a culture.What d
oes the music of your country reveal about of your country?Use reasons and spe
cific examples to support your answer. ”
答：
   It is very lucky for me to introduce the music of our motherland,china,to t
he friends who come from different parts of the world.The topic about the relationships between the music and our culture is so large for me to reveal its deep and gorgeous personality in such a short essay ,for that our motherland has such a long history ,has so many different areas,and so many  people.And different area has different styleof music in different stage of her history.But in our heart, one point is certain:we have a common motherland:China.
   In different stage of this ancient civilized country,she conceives differen
t musics,and these musics correspond to different cultures.Among all  of these
musicics,what I  would like to introduce to you is  
the classical music which is performanced by zheng,a Chinese zither with 25 st
rings，because in the ancient time ,the great thinker Confucius said 'music is
used to teach people of the country'And he supported that
music which is on the same way of nature fits everyone in every different stag
e of history.It traverses history and transcends boundaries between different  
countries .Zheng,for example,if you have opportunity to listen to its music,yo
u may hear nature.You may feel that you are talking to nature.You can hear the
blossoming of flowers,the flowing of rivulet,the rolling of tides to deep sea
.You can see the working of honest people and the love of nature that comes fr
om your deep heart.Listen hard,then you see the great heros living in history;
the splendor of this glebe;the smiles of the beauties....then you appreceive t
he grandness of the deep culture of this ancient country.This is the verve of  
these 25 strings :simple,plain,ordinary ,but its charm is vast,deep,gorgeous,a
nd distant.It is possible that every people who has once felt it would never f
orget it as you never forget the beauty of nature and the personality of yours
elf.
   The charm of the music ,just as you listen to it.When you feel it,you can t
ouch the heart of its deep
culture.I don't know if I could  change the topic a little"Music tells us much
about a  culture".To learn
its culture,you had better listen to its music first.
我本人对我的作文的评价是“内容不够简洁，用词不够精确，句势还不够恰当，写作速度
太慢，考试要吃亏的”其中，为了做到“赏心悦目”，让没有听到过的
古筝的人对它发生好奇，我没有把金山词霸上面对古筝的解释中“with 25 strings”去掉


下面是我看了许多遍，也抄了许多遍的ets范文，同时，也为这篇范文的魅力深深感染
In order to answer the question, "what does the music of your country reveal a
bout the culture of your country?" I would like to introduce myself. I am from
Spain, I was born in a region called Catalonia, concretely in a town near Bar
celona.

In my opinion, the music tells us a lot of a culture, and someone could learn  
a lot  from the spanish culture just listening to music in her room. But it is
not easy to collect a representative sample of the spanish music, because of  
the enormous variety, every region of Spain has its own music, that sounds com
pletely different from the rest, and even for some regions there are more than
one type of tipical music. This variety is very important because shows that  
Spain is a counry of countries, each one with a particular personality.

It is very interesting to discover the different personality of the spanish re
gions, just listening how their music sounds like. For example, in the south o
f Spain people are known for being very funny and for their good sense of humo
r. In this part of Spain you can find mainly two kinds of music: the Flamenco  
and the Sevillanas. Sevillas have completly the personality of andalusian peop
le, it is very cheerful. However, Flamenco sounds sad and deep. The reason is  
that although andalusian people have a good mood, they live in one of the poor
est part of Spain, and they express their pain through the flamenco music.

Finally, I would like to say that I personally agree with the statement that m
usic tells us something about a culture, and with my example example I wanted  
to illustrate, how much of the culture of a country it is possible to learn ju
st listening to its music.

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