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What kind of sense will societies or groups of people have without rituals and ceremonies, since they help to define a culture? The speaker asserts that societies or groups of people will have a diminished sense of their identity. However, the speaker seems to limit the definition of culture to a rather narrow range. I agree partly with the speaker's assertion but take exception when it comes to the reflect of people towards the absence of rituals and ceremonies.
To begin with, the author is on the correct philosophical side of the issue that we have to concede(admit前面说correct了,这里有是不情愿的承认就不如用点中性的词了). 段首主题句不够鲜明,而且意思太含糊After all, either philosophically or psychologically, it is true that every person need to retain a strong sense of identity, without which they will be confused with many problems even lose themselves in their life有点罗嗦,换成get lost就可以了吧. Similarly, a country or society even groups, consisting of different persons, also need to differentiate from other onesothers. Accordingly, such groups either big or small has their own identities----as a form of culture. This is especially obvious in minorities of a country. The members of dissimilar minority are similar to each other in many ways, since they live near to one another. Only on the different culture rely they to distinguish each other.
As a significant feature of a culture, rituals and ceremonies really help to enhance the self-identity of every person even a country. Almost all the countries have their own ceremonies: National Day. It is usually to commemorate the very day when their procedure established their country. According to this ceremony taken on去掉? every year, the memberscitizens更确切点吧 of a country can at least have a sense that who they are and where they belong to. 感觉这句和下一句比较牵强,没有给出足够的理由At that time, all the members as well will feel self-pride because of not only the triumph their ancestors made but also the different identities they have. In small tribes, there are kinds of small but grand rituals and ceremonies on which we will be heavily impress on the first glace. In this sense, turning to rituals and ceremonies for self-identity is really helpful.上2段的意思基本上也差不多,合成一段是不是比较好
However, rituals and ceremonies are not the only way to define a culture, so societies or groups of people with the absence of rituals and ceremonies will not have a diminished sense of who they are. The author seems a little extremely when he come to this point. 这句看着有点别扭,和上面的段首句合并一下会好一点吧Actually, many other factors also defines复数名词不加s a culture: languages, habits, costumes, values, psychological complex and even feature on face. As is concerned above, rituals and ceremonies of many tribes are impressive at the first glance, what is more, it is not the only way we define a culture. The languages they speak, habit they take accustomed to, costumes they wear, or the feature on their faces, can help us to differentiate a culture, so we may distinguish between them, at the same time, the members in different tribes have retain their strong sense of self-identity.
There is another important aspect that can not be neglected. Some rituals and ceremonies may have no sense for the members and sometimes so harmful to people that they should better abandon them. For example, some tribes have certain mysterious rituals which need to sacrifice several selected persons to demonstrate their worship towards the nature or else. This way of self-identity make a great cost that the self-identity itself already has no sense.
In sum, the author asserts the relationship between rituals and ceremonies with which I agree partly. In my opinion, rituals and ceremonies are a rather good way to retain a self-identity but not the only way. In addition, for that kind of old and fetish rituals, we need to treat carefully.
neo感觉你有些地方语句有些罗嗦重复,还有每段的中心句提出观点不够直接,也不太鲜明,还有后面内容论证的不太充分,有点重心偏移的感觉. |
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