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罐罐marsqUID: 2181382

166People recognize a difference between children and adults. What events (experiences or ceremonies) make a person an adult? Use specific reasons and examples to explain your answer   



As well known, there are a lot of differences between children and adults ,such as critical thinking, maturity, experience in dealing social activities. How could children become adults and what happen to them ?

There are several stages that make children becoming a adults. First step, when children are 18 years old , they are no longer recognized by the society as children anymore. Although at that age most children are also cared by their parents, they are legally citizens and should be responsible for what they have done. At this time , they have done the first step of becoming adults.
Second step, children must plan their future. Going to a college ,having their own business or some other things need to be decided at this moment. However, they are too young to make such decision, they need help from their parents who are adults, having enough social experience to judge.
Last step, when they graduate from the college ,they require to hunt a job or apply for a graduate school. This time ,they should make decision more independent than ever before. Because they are big enough to plan their own future, they should no longer depend on parents. Not far away, they must earn their own lives. Either physical aspects or mental aspects are all mature and we should call them adults from now on.
In summary ,it is a long way that children become adults, and so many variable factors lie on it. Every step mentioned before is very important and should be well studied in order to get right direction.

[ 本帖最后由 罐罐marsq 于 2006-5-8 18:31 编辑 ]

kofawpUID: 2115356

觉得提出TS后缺少从抽象到example的过渡
      但是总体还是well organized

罐罐marsqUID: 2181382

原帖由 kofawp 于 2006-5-8 18:45 发表
觉得提出TS后缺少从抽象到example的过渡
      但是总体还是well organized

我写完之后自己的感觉也是没的什么example   都是我自己再说道理  晕啊

shimeizangUID: 2213253

跑题吧,什么什么