issue38 [加州阳光]第二次作业请拍砖

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issue38
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In the age of television, reading books is not as important as it once was. People can learn as much by watching television as they can by reading books.
电视时代的读书已经不像以前那么重要了。人们通过看电视学到的和他们读书所能学到的一样多。

提纲:
个人观点：不同意
（1）通过电视学习有很多优点：首先，形象生动易于理解；其次，更新快，覆盖范围广，可在短时间内获得最多最新的知识。但是，它也有缺点：由于电视本身已效益为目的，覆盖不到所有的知识，而且知识不够系统和深刻，同时没有重复性。
（2）读书可以克服上述电视的缺点，同时还有别的优点：读书不仅获得了知识同时锻炼了人的思考能力；其次书比电视方便。
（3）看电视和读书作为学习的两种方式有优缺点，它们是互补的，不能取代彼此。
结论：两者都不能忽视，使用哪种方法视情况而定。

正文（598）：

The speaker contends that reading books is not as important as it once was since people can learn as much from watching television as they can by reading books. I concede that we can learn a lot from television, but it is too limited. Reading books, as another means of learning, should not be substituted.

Incontestably, there are many advantages in learning from watching television. In the first place, television has sounds, colors, vivid pictures and real scene. What is abstract and difficult for us to understand becomes easy through the television, which has showed us the arcane of nature, the processes of experiments or surgery and so on. Without regard to television, we have to arduously understand or image the descriptions of the books. In the second place, the television's contents update rapidly and cover with almost all the fields, thus we can gain the newest and the maximum knowledge in a short time. In this respect, it is an effective and efficient way to learn and can helps us save much time. However, the television also has many defects that it cannot overcome due to its own property---television serves as entertainment primarily and its ultimate aim is to gain profits. What might attract fewer audiences is impossible to play in TV. In addition, if we want to learn something more deep and systemically, watching television cannot satisfy with our requirements because of its terseness, generalization and limited time. And furthermore, television lacks of repetition, usually we cannot review the knowledge learned from television if we want to.

Learning by reading books just can make up the defects of learning form television. In library, we can find out books in all fields no matter this field is popular or not. And a theory can be explained in one books, or even in several books so that we can understand the theory more deep and systemically. What's more, we can read a book repeatedly if we love the book or cannot understand completely. The advantages of learning by reading books are not just what I have said above. Reading books makes great contribution to explore the reader's thought rather than to gain information. It requires us to think independently since letters are abstract symbols and nobody explains to us, otherwise we cannot understand what the books describe. Hence, we not only acquire much knowledge but also learn how to think. In this regard, there is no substitute for reading books. Moreover, books are more portable than television sets. They can be brought to the place where you want to go, cannot break, and do not depend on electricity, batteries or access to airwaves or cable connections. Yet reading books does not possess the advantages of learning by watching television.

Form the discussion above, we know that both watching television and reading books have their own advantages and disadvantages, they are different but complementary. Books are planar while the television is three-dimensional; books are dull and abstruse while television is vivid and effortless; books are detailed, complex, precise and deep while television is terse, broad, direct and improvisational. They are two types of learning method and cannot substitute for each other.

In sum, it is unreasonable to learn only from watching television or reading books. Which kinds of ways can be used is depending on our needs: if we just would like to know something broadly, we can learn from television; if we want to acquire deeper and more systemic knowledge, we should read books, and can appeal to television in case that book are abstruse to understand.

水平有限，限时没成功，写的不好，大家多多拍砖。

[ 本帖最后由 lixiaomin046400 于 2006-6-8 17:03 编辑 ]

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The speaker contends that reading books is not as important as it once was since people can learn as much from watching television as they can by reading books. I concede that we can learn a lot from television, but it is too limited. Reading books, as another （a major/dominant another太弱了）means of learning, should not be substituted.

Incontestably, there are many advantages in learning from watching television. In the first place, television has sounds, colors, vivid pictures and real scene. What is abstract and difficult for us to understand becomes easy through the television, which has showed us the arcane of（去掉 of，arcane是形容词） nature, the processes of experiments or surgery and so on. Without regard to television, we have to arduously understand or image the descriptions of the books. In the second place, the television's contents update rapidly and cover with almost all the fields, thus we can gain the newest and the maximum knowledge in a short time. In this respect, it is an effective and efficient way to learn and can helps us save much time. However, the television also has many defects that it cannot overcome due to its own property---television serves as entertainment primarily and its ultimate aim is to gain profits. What might attract fewer audiences is impossible to play（be shown/broadcasted） in(on) TV. In addition, if we want to learn something more deep and systemically, watching television cannot satisfy with our requirements because of its terseness, generalization and limited time. And furthermore, television lacks of 去掉 repetition, since usually we cannot review the knowledge learned from television if we want to.

Learning by reading books just can make up for the defects shortcomings of learning form television. In library, we can find out books in all fields no matter this field is 去掉popular or not. And a theory can be explained in one books, or even in several books so that we can understand the theory more deeply and systemically. What's more, we can read a book repeatedly if we love the book or cannot understand completely. The advantages of learning by reading books are not just what I have said above. Reading books makes great contribution to explore the reader's thought rather than to gain information. It requires us to think independently since letters are abstract symbols and nobody explains to us, otherwise we cannot understand what the books describe. Hence, we not only acquire much knowledge but also learn how to think. In this regard, there is no substitute for reading books. Moreover, books are more portable than television sets. They can be brought to the place where you want to go, cannot break, and do not depend on electricity, batteries or access to airwaves or cable connections（这么多意思压缩在一个句子中不容易，我读起来不通顺，特别是cannot break那里）. Yet reading books does not possess the advantages of learning by watching television.

Form the discussion above, we know that both watching television and reading books have their own advantages and disadvantages, they are different but complementary. Books are planar while the television is three-dimensional; books are dull and abstruse while television is vivid and effortless; books are detailed, complex, precise and deep while television is terse, broad, direct and improvisational(good comparison). They are two types of learning methods and cannot substitute for each other.

In sum, it is unreasonable to learn only from watching television or reading books. Which kinds of ways can be used is depending on our needs: if we just would like to know something broadly, we can learn from television; if we want to acquire deeper and more systemic knowledge, we should read books, and can appeal to television in case that book are abstruse to understand.

总体，最后升华的非常好啊，学习学习！~

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正文（598）：

The speaker contends that reading books is not as important as it once was since people can learn as much from watching television as they can by reading books. I concede that we can learn a lot from television, but it is too limited. Reading books, as another means of learning, should not be substituted.

Incontestably, there are many advantages in learning from watching television. In the first place, television has sounds, colors, vivid pictures and real scene. What is abstract and difficult for us to understand becomes easy through the television, which has showed us the arcane of nature, the processes of experiments or surgery and so on. Without regard to television, we have to arduously understand or image the descriptions of the books. In the second place, the television's contents update rapidly and cover with almost all the fields, thus we can gain the newest and the maximum knowledge in a short time. In this respect, it is an effective and efficient way to learn and can helps us save much time. However, the television also has many defects that it cannot overcome due to its own property---television serves as entertainment primarily and its ultimate aim is to gain profits. What might attract fewer audiences is impossible to play in TV. In addition, if we want to learn something more deep （deeply）and systemically, watching television cannot satisfy with our requirements because of its terseness, generalization and limited time. And furthermore, television lacks of repetition, usually we cannot review the knowledge learned from television if we want to.

Learning by reading books just can make up the defects of learning form television. In library, we can find out books in all fields no matter this field is popular or not. And a theory can be explained in one books, or even in several books so that we can understand the theory more deep（deeply） and systemically. What's (What is ) more, we can read a book repeatedly if we love the book or cannot understand completely. The advantages of learning by reading books are not just what I have said above. Reading books makes great contribution to explore the reader's thought rather than to ( 去掉to？) gain information. It requires us to think independently since letters are abstract symbols and nobody explains to us, otherwise we cannot understand what the books describe. Hence, we not only acquire much knowledge but also learn how to think. In this regard, there is no substitute for reading books. Moreover, books are more portable than television sets. They can be brought to the place where you want to go, cannot break, and do not depend on electricity, batteries or access to airwaves or cable connections. Yet reading books does not possess the advantages of learning by watching television.

Form the discussion above, we know that both watching television and reading books have their own advantages and disadvantages, they are different but complementary. Books are planar while the television is three-dimensional; books are dull and abstruse while television is vivid and effortless; books are detailed, complex, precise and deep while television is terse, broad, direct and improvisational. They are two types of learning method and cannot substitute for each other.（排比句用的很赞）

In sum, it is unreasonable to learn only from watching television or reading books. Which kinds of ways can be used is depending on our needs: if we just would like to know something broadly, we can learn from television; if we want to acquire deeper and more systemic knowledge, we should read books, and can appeal to television in case that book are abstruse to understand.（结尾不落窠臼）
我的这片issue写得不好，向你学习

mercurywaterUID: 2179090

The speaker contends that reading books is not as important as it once was since people can learn as much from watching television as they can by reading books. I concede that we can learn a lot from television, but it is too limited. Reading books, as another means of learning, should not be substituted.

Incontestably, there are many advantages in learning from watching television. In the first place, television has sounds, colors, vivid pictures and real scene. What is abstract and difficult for us to understand becomes easy through（through改为by watching） the（去掉the） television, which has showed us the arcane of nature, the processes of experiments or surgery and so on. Without regard to television, we have to arduously understand or image（image是名词改为 imagine） the descriptions of the books. In the second place, the television's contents update the television's contents改为the contents of television is updated)rapidly and cover with almost all the fields, thus we can gain the newest and the maximum （我觉得and 连接两个最高级 maximum->most 但又觉得 most放着不太合适）knowledge in a short time. In this respect, it is an effective and efficient way to learn and can helps us save much time. However, the television also has many defects that it cannot overcome（be overcomed） due to its own property---television serves as entertainment primarily and its ultimate aim is to gain profits. What might attract fewer audiences is impossible（前面fewer已经否定了，这是不是possible 就行了，我不确定阿） to play in TV. In addition, if we want to learn something more deep and systemically, watching television cannot satisfy with（去掉with） our requirements because of its terseness, generalization （你的词我没看懂，好像regular好一些）and limited time. And（去掉and） furthermore, television lacks of（去掉of） repetition, usually we cannot review the knowledge learned from television if we want to. （usually是adv，这两个分句缺个连词，也可以把前半句放后面+because/in that ）

Learning by（去掉learning by） reading books just（去掉just）can make up（加for）the defects（建议换一个 如disvantages  我也知道俗，但跟前面不重为好） of learning form（小笔误无所谓from） television. In （加the）, library, we can find out books in all fields no matter this field is popular or not. And a theory can be explained in one books（ a  book）, or even in several books so that we can understand the theory more deep and systemically. What's more, we can read a book repeatedly if we love the book or cannot understand completely. The advantages of learning by reading books are not just what I have said above. Reading books makes （加a）great contribution to explore（exploring） the reader's thought(thoughts) rather than（not just 我不确定但总觉得后面不应该否定掉）to gain information. It requires us to think independently since letters are abstract symbols and nobody explains to us, otherwise we cannot understand what the books describe. Hence, we not only acquire much knowledge but also learn how to think. In this regard, there is no substitute for reading books. Moreover, books are more portable than television sets. They can be brought to the place where you want to go, cannot break, and do not depend on electricity, batteries or access to airwaves or cable connections.（我觉得你学以致用的能力太强了，向你学习） Yet reading books does not possess the advantages of learning by watching television.

Form（小笔误无所谓from） the discussion above, we know that both watching television and reading books have their own advantages and disadvantages, they are different but complementary. Books are planar while the television is three-dimensional; books are dull and abstruse while television is vivid and effortless; books are detailed, complex, precise and deep while television is terse, broad, direct and improvisational. They are two types of learning method and cannot substitute for each other（向牛段致敬 ！）.

In sum, it is unreasonable to learn only from watching television or reading books. Which kinds of ways can be used is depending on our needs: if we just would like to know something broadly, we can learn from television; if we want to acquire deeper and more systemic knowledge, we should read books, and can appeal to television in case that book are abstruse to understand.（结尾我是菜鸟，我也不知道可不可以平衡，好像叶子说这样升华很好，那就应该没问题了，我只是不确定）

总评：这篇文章思路非常清晰，过渡也很自然。记得好像当年在xdf学T时，笑来也讲过这种论 证结构，可自己从来没用过，这次算是开眼了！

虽然从表面上看，我改了很多东西，但有时我也是鸡蛋是挑骨头，总是希望好的东西能更加完美。个别地方说实话我也不懂，还是希望lz 能再找高手问问  加油 ！

[ 本帖最后由 mercurywater 于 2006-6-12 22:23 编辑 ]

lixiaomin046400UID: 2207959

谢谢mercurywater的意见，我刚开始写没什么经验，只是按着自己的想法和思路写，遣词造句还很不到位，多给意见，一起学习，共同进步:D