Issue3 [~4而后生~]第三次作业，求拍

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issue3 第三次作业 写得感觉似乎不对，请多指教



The speaker assert that sloving immmedicate problem have much more value than on recearch of benifit to future. While I concern that whereas the problem we face right now is important, long-term recearch should not be ignoe, yet.

The statement the speaker asserted is based on two assumptions about human nature and the meaning of a good society. First, I agree with the speaker's board attitude toward human nature that human-being like other speices having the will of surveiving as one of the most important nature which leads human go though millions of years without dieing out, so it's not hard to understand that in most of the time citizens pay much more attention to their present living condition and surieve is always be their first need. Second assumption by the speaker is the meaning of a good society, and it is also approprate in some degree that a stable and order society is a good society that everyone want to live in and if a society is full of crime, violence, hungry, unemployment, and other social problems it must not be a good and welcomed one and such kind of situation is unstable and easy losing control.

On the other hand are two compelling arguments against the assertion that devoting more money and enegry to immediate social problems is much more better than to the research for uncertain  futuer. First, on a moral leval, we do have the native ability to let ourself to survie but the speaker ignore another important feature that most spices have, and that is the sense of reoponsibility  for the future generation which is also an important emotion for human and other speices to exist until now, such as male mantic devote itself to be eaten by the female mantic for the female can have a good  lunch and enough nutrion for their next generation. The human-being have the emotion of the same feature and raise it to moral leval that evrybody should take responsible not only for themselves and their childern but also for future gerantion of the whole socity and this is deep in everybody's heart, so we may concolude that people earn  many  satification during the process of taking response of future grentation sometimes exceed their own better condiction of life.

Second, as a socity not only need stable social environment and orderdly sequence but also other element to make the socity healthy, such as the socitey members' passion and love for the socity, and only this they can devote more enegry to the socity and so the socity can be more harmoniously. A good way to raise the passion and love of the citizens is to let  them to relaize and believe that their society or condiction is becoming or have the ability to be better, such as sever years ago,  when sheep Dolly was born the shakeing can be felt both in the scientific world and in common citizens' world, at that moment people talked about it and reading newspaper reported Dolly,  although it didn't take any change in their life of reality. Why people pay so much attention on a sheep far from theirselves? That is because Dolly make them to see a marvel only heart in story before, and according to this they see the development of science and society and belive the world they live is active and full of hope and chance, sometimes this far more importance than a rich and came society but have no activty and hope to share with its people.

In sum, both long-turn research and immediate social problem are important, and they have the same aim---to make the world better, for that aim niether part  can be igonre, and sick in each part can lead social losing balabce.

[ 本帖最后由 hezhifei2008 于 2007-3-14 01:13 编辑 ]

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The speaker assert that solving immediate problem have much more value than on research of benefit to future. While I concern that whereas the problem we face right now is important,(是不是有and) long-term research should not be ignore, yet.

The statement the speaker asserted is based on two assumptions about human nature and the meaning of a good society. First, I agree(不是平衡的，建议仿照second的句式改) with the speaker's board attitude toward human nature that human-being like other species having(have?) the will of surviving as one of the most important nature which leads(led) human go though millions of years without dieing out, so it's not hard to understand that in most of the time citizens pay much more attention to their present living condition and survive is always be(没有be) their first need. Second assumption by the speaker is the meaning of a good society, and it is also appropriate in some degree that a stable and order society is a good society that everyone want to live in and if a society is full of crime, violence, hungry, unemployment, and other social problems it must not be a good and welcomed one and such kind of situation is unstable and easy losing control(AND太多，分成几句把，这不是GRE阅读).

On the other hand are two compelling arguments against the assertion that devoting more money and energy to immediate social problems is much more better than to the research for uncertain future. First, on a moral level, we do have the native ability to let ourself to survive but the speaker ignore another important feature that most spices have, and that is the sense of responsibility  for the future generation which is also an important emotion for human and other species to exist until now, such as male mantic(什么意思) devote itself to be eaten by the female manic for the female can have a good  lunch and enough nutrition for their next generation(太长，理解费劲). The human-being have the emotion of the same feature and raise it to moral level that everybody should take responsible not only for themselves and their children but also for future generation of the whole society and this is deep in everybody's heart, so we may conclude that people earn  many  satification(什么意思) during the process of taking response of future grentation(什么意思) sometimes exceed their own better condition of life.

Second, as a society not only need stable social environment and orderly sequence but also other element to make the society healthy, such as the society members' passion and love for the society, and only this(少点什么) they can devote more energy to the society and so the society(改成代词)can be more harmoniously(harmonious). A good way to raise the passion and love of the citizens is to let  them to realize and believe that their society or condition is becoming or have the ability to be better, such as sever years ago,  when sheep Dolly was born the shaking can be felt both in the scientific world and in common citizens' world, at that moment people talked about it and reading newspaper reported Dolly,  although it didn't take any change in their life of reality. Why people pay so much attention on a sheep far from their selves? That is because Dolly make them to see a marvel only heart in story before, and according to this they see the development of science and society and believe the world they live is active and full of hope and chance, sometimes this far more importance than a rich and came society but have no activity and hope to share with its people(读着迷糊).

In sum, both long-turn research and immediate social problem are important(感觉是偏重long-term的), and they have the same aim---to make the world better, for that aim neither part  can be ignore, and sick in each part can lead social losing balance.

拼写错误多，我得用firefox一个一个的改，建议下次贴到word里然后再贴出来
常写错的单词都挑出来
感觉LZ最近看GRE阅读看多了，句子都是一层套一层
建议把第3第4段的主题句用某个词连接一下，变成2个递进的段落
稍加修改就是一个严密的文章

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呵呵。。强烈建议楼主附录此文的译文在此帮助阅读哈。。开个玩笑。。。

在nap的基础上提几点：

+ - - 的大结构是好的，但是第三段“On the other hand”这个词作为转折弱了些，它其实表示支持同一观点的另一方面，用however好些。

第三段说人应当对后代负责任，目的是为了说明应该进行长期研究。这跟其他生物也有这种责任没有任何关系，因为他们不需要做研究，你举的生物的雄性献身的例子，根本没有说明要进行长期研究的事情。应该说的是，做长期研究怎么是对后代负责任。

第四段我觉得跑题了。。。你说社会需要人们对其有热情有热爱，这跟要做长期研究有什么关系呢？

[ 本帖最后由 inside 于 2007-3-16 00:22 编辑 ]