issue159 [0806G-desperado小组]第十五次作业by jenny

gaojiehahaUID: 2149729

Issue159:
The human mind will always be superior to machines because machines are only tools of human minds.

提纲:
在社会的高速发展中,人类利用探索精神创造了无数的机器去帮助人类完成大量人脑无法完成的工作,也帮助人类从枯燥无比的重复工作中解脱出来,去做更多有意义的事情.机器在某个个别的功能方面超过人类是完全有可能的,但要全面超过人脑,可以说是遥遥无期的.
1  电脑不如人脑的劣势之一不会思考.卡斯帕罗夫与“深蓝”之间的比赛.
2 不会学习.学习和掌握知识对一个人来说是一件十分自然的事，但要让机器也这样做就相当困难了。
3 机器没有情感.

During the process of gradually understanding of the universe, the human beings create a myriad of machines to help people dealing with various affairs, from simple and boring works to burdensome jobs. For the high development of machines, human beings are worried whether machines will supreme the human mind one day in the future. In my opinion, although in some certain aspect, machines will overpass the human beings, it is impossible for machines to win the human beings overall in the future.


First of all, machines cannot have the independent thinking ability in the long term run, which left them behind the human beings. Some senior machines, such as computers, could accomplish tasks independently, however, these machines works according to the certain procedures by human beings. Provided a fortuitous event happened when a senior machine is working, the senior machine obviously would be perplexed attribute to lack of thinking ability. Admittedly, a breaking news in the dawn of the last century is reported that a chess-playing computer called deep blue beat the Kasparov, the world champion in that period. Nevertheless, Kasparov is not beat by the wisdom of the chess-playing computer, but by many chess prodigies and computer experts. The chess-playing computer is merely a tool.

Secondly, machines do not have capability to acquire fresh things and new knowledge, whereas it is a natural thing for human beings to do such kind of things. For an example, when a person realized that knowledge he or she mastered now cannot settle the actual problem, the person would start to study the new knowledge to deal with the problem. Although machines could master uncountable knowledge after a connection between the machines and the encyclopedia, however, without update knowledge to them memory with people’s assistants, machines would out of fashion soon. Simply put, only the anticipation of human beings makes machines to do things effectively. Furthermore, due to the dominate position of human beings in instilling and selecting knowledge to machines, machines will left behind the human beings.

Thirdly, machines are emotionless things that the human mind will always be superior to machines in some fields such as art and literature. Take the literature realm as an example, despite beautiful words and the like, achievements in these kind of fields require rich life experience and cute feeling capability, for which could touch people's softness in deep heart and sensitiveness in emotions. And it is obvious that machines are hard to own these factors, so machines cannot achieve greatness works in these fields.

In whole, machines will not surpass the human mind in the long run for that it does not have the ability of independent thinking, learning and emotion which are the specific skills of human beings. And the human mind is so complicated that it is nearly impossible to comprehensive understand the principle of human brain, let alone manufacture a machine similar to, even supreme the human mind.

[ 本帖最后由 gaojiehaha 于 2008-1-10 08:21 编辑 ]

hongdanUID: 2228730

Issue159:
The human mind will always be superior to machines because machines are only tools of human minds.

提纲:
在社会的高速发展中,人类利用探索精神创造了无数的机器去帮助人类完成大量人脑无法完成的工作,也帮助人类从枯燥无比的重复工作中解脱出来,去做更多有意义的事情.机器在某个个别的功能方面超过人类是完全有可能的,但要全面超过人脑,可以说是遥遥无期的.
1  电脑不如人脑的劣势之一不会思考.卡斯帕罗夫与“深蓝”之间的比赛.
2 不会学习.学习和掌握知识对一个人来说是一件十分自然的事，但要让机器也这样做就相当困难了。
3 机器没有情感.

During the process of gradually understanding of the universe, the human beings create a myriad of machines to help people dealing with various affairs, from simple and boring works to burdensome jobs. For the high development of machines, human beings are worried whether machines will supreme（可以直接当动词吗？） the human mind one day in the future. In my opinion, although in some certain aspect, machines will overpass the human beings, it is impossible for machines to win the human beings overall in the future.

First of all, machines cannot have the independent thinking ability in the long term run（term 和run是不重复）, which left them behind the human beings. Some senior machines, such as computers, could accomplish tasks independently, however, these machines works according to the certain procedures （加个动词，设定的程序）by human beings. Provided a fortuitous（学习！） event happened when a senior machine is working, the senior machine obviously would be perplexed attribute to lack of thinking ability. （以senior machines为例，感觉很宽泛，是不以某一具体的senior machine为例更好些。）（下一句用admittedly引出一个看似反例的例子似乎不当。看不出来“admittedly”的感觉，只是单纯地列了一个事例）Admittedly, a breaking news in the dawn of the last century（这个词组表示上世纪初还是末，看到希望回复一下） is reported that a chess-playing computer called deep blue beat the Kasparov, the world champion in that period. Nevertheless, Kasparov is not beat by the wisdom of the chess-playing computer, but by many chess prodigies and computer experts. The chess-playing computer is merely a tool. （这两句很连贯，最后一句简洁，看起来很舒服。）
Secondly, machines do not have capability to acquire fresh things and new knowledge, whereas it is a natural thing for human beings to do such kind of things. For an example, when a person realized that knowledge he or she mastered now cannot settle the actual problem, the person would start to study the new knowledge to deal with the problem. （我还以为会直接转到机器的弱点，没想到先说了优点，再说弱点。这样不知道好不好？）Although machines could master uncountable knowledge after a connection between the machines and the encyclopedia, however, without update knowledge to them memory with people’s assistants, machines would（加be）out of fashion soon. Simply put（这个词组是什么意思，我还以为是“仅仅想想”的意思，好像我一直以为错了。）, only the anticipation（人类的预料？） of human beings makes machines to（去掉“to”） do things effectively. Furthermore, due to the dominate position of human beings in instilling and selecting knowledge to machines, machines will （加be）left behind the human beings.

Thirdly, machines are emotionless things that the human mind will always be superior to machines in some fields such as art and literature. Take the literature realm as an example, despite beautiful words and the like, achievements in these kind of fields require rich life experience and cute feeling capability, for which could touch people's softness in deep heart and sensitiveness in emotions（学习下）. And it is obvious that machines are hard to own these factors, so machines cannot achieve greatness works in these fields.

In whole, machines will not surpass the human mind in the long run for that it does not have the ability of independent thinking, learning and emotion which are the specific skills of human beings. And the human mind is so complicated that it is nearly impossible to comprehensive（ly） understand the principle of human brain, let alone manufacture a machine similar to, even supreme the human mind.

我很喜欢这篇文章的连贯性，读起来很舒服。层次很清楚，主要从机器和人的三个不同方面来写，各成一段。首尾呼应得很好。学习学习。
不过一开始我读你的提纲，还以为你会先写“机器在某个个别的功能方面超过人类是完全有可能的”，然后再写“超越人脑“。我发现我写的文章中心是很模糊，既想写机器的好处，又想写机器的不足（跟你想表达的一样），最后想平衡两个说人类要致力于机器开发技术，也要多锻炼自己的”大脑“。越想平衡最后结果越模糊了。其实像你这样单纯写不足之处思路能更清晰一些。
还有一点，整篇读下来，我感觉你用的比较多的是”明显”一词，人类有某一能力，明显机器没有。这样单独一个“明显”就把机器的“不能”给表达了，不知道能行不？
以上是我的个人意见哦，有什么可以一起讨论。从这篇文章我学到了很多，层次性，语言的连贯性，还有一些词汇，呵呵。互相学习了，哈哈。

[ 本帖最后由 hongdan 于 2008-1-10 14:41 编辑 ]