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Nowadays, food has become easier to prepare. Has this improved the way people live? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

At current age, indeed, food preparation becomes more and more easy not only to students, factory workers and governmental staffs but also to children. Thus, people are more concerned about the topic that whether this alters their life styles than ever before. As far as I am concerned, although easy to prepare food spare people much time, it does bring great benefits as some people consider.

Admittedly, we can cook our food within a few minutes when we use some high-tech equipments such as microwave oven and induction cooker, but people cost little time on food due to the fast living pace. People must work hard for the sake of sustaining their families; therefore, their time is so tight that preparing food by themselves is frequently not possible. The transport system in cities are so bad and traffic jams take place frequently, and so they are necessary to eat their breakfast in subway or bus in order to on duty on time. Moreover, the noon break time is really short; people absolutely have no time to get back homes not to mention preparing food by themselves. Hence, the improvement of cook and the time of food preparation is shortened make no sense at all to busy people. At the same time, these people are society's main body.

In the second place, for sure people will have leisure time, for example, the evening after their work time and holidays which arranged by states and nation, however, they are inclined to relax themselves at these times. Furthermore, people are obviously not wish to spend their leisure time on cooking and they choose to eat at restaurants. Eventually, they must invest much money on eating. Take my retired parents for example, when they work in factories, their factory was near to our home and this phenomenon was so common to other workers at their time. They didn't cost much on transport, had less work time and spent little money on restaurants, and so they spared much time which could be used in other aspects like supporting me to college, buying new furniture and so on. Therefore, nowadays, People cost so much money on eating which could be useful for future.

Last but not least, food preparation becoming easy is mostly based on the development of industrialization. Equipments of kitchen and well-supplied raw materials of food for examples, they are all the products of modern industry. Industrialization, of course, has changed our society not only in surface but also in depth. However, it brings about a great variety of disadvantages as well and declines the living level of people, such as polluting environment, interfering transport and decreasing the communication between man and man. Thus, the improvement of preparing food has various bad influences on the amelioration of our life.

To sum up, food becoming easy to prepare is not as good as many people thinks. Except some slight benefits, it has brought us many bad influences, such as huge working stress, polluted environment and a large amount of costs on restaurants. I a word, I maintain that preparing food becoming easy does not improve our life essentially.


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At current age, indeed, food preparation becomes more and more easy [easier and easier??? 这个不记得了]

not only to students, factory workers and governmental staffs but also to children. Thus, people are

more concerned about the topic that whether this alters their life styles than ever before. As far as I

am concerned, although easy to prepare food spare [saves] people much [delete "much"] time, it does

[not?] bring great benefits as some people consider.

Admittedly, we can cook our food within a few minutes when we use some high-tech equipments such as

microwave oven and induction cooker, but people cost little time on food due to the fast living pace.

People must work hard for the sake of sustaining their families; therefore, their time is so tight that

preparing food by themselves is frequently not possible. The transport [transportation] system in

cities are so bad and traffic jams take place frequently, and so they are necessary to eat their

breakfast in subway or bus in order to on duty on time. [直接改As in most of the big cities, the

transportation is so bad they have to sacrifice their breakfast time at home to be on time for work.] Moreover, the noon break time is really short; people absolutely have no time to get back

homes not to mention preparing food by themselves. [the lunch break is too short for most people to go back and eat at home, no mention preparing food by themselves.] Hence, the improvement of cook and the time of food

preparation is shortened make no sense at all to busy people. At the same time, these people are

society's main body.
[这个论点还蛮有新意的。建议把结论提到最前面去。Although seems it will save lots of time for busy people

on food preparation, it impacts less than someone expected, actually, since busy people have little

time to cook. They usually buy their meals. 然后开始说你关于早点和午饭的论证。]


In the second place, for sure people will have leisure time, for example, the evening after their work

time [after work] and holidays which arranged by states and nation [and national holidays/ mandatory

holidays], however, they are [more] inclined to relax themselves [rather than cooking??] at these times.

Furthermore, people are obviously not wish to spend their leisure time on cooking and they choose to

eat at restaurants. Eventually, they must invest much money on eating. Take my retired parents for

example, when they work in factories, their factory was near to our home and this phenomenon was so

common to other workers at their time. They didn't cost much on transport, had less work time and spent

little money on restaurants, and so they spared much time which could be used in other aspects like

supporting me to college, buying new furniture and so on. Therefore, nowadays, People cost so much

money on eating which could be useful for future.
[这一段我有点晕了。lz解释下是什么思路吧]


Last but not least, food preparation becoming easy [easier] is mostly based on the development of

industrialization. Equipments of kitchen and well-supplied raw materials of food for examples, they are

all the products of modern industry. Industrialization, of course, has changed our society not only in

surface but also in depth. However, it brings about a great variety of disadvantages as well and

declines the living level of people, such as polluting environment, interfering transport and

decreasing the communication between man and man. Thus, the improvement of preparing food has various

bad influences on the amelioration of our life.


To sum up, food becoming easy to prepare is not as good as many people thinks. Except some slight

benefits, it has brought us many bad influences, such as huge working stress, polluted environment and

a large amount of costs on restaurants. I a word, I maintain that preparing food becoming easy does not

improve our life essentially.

思路有些乱。
其实我觉得你的想法是挺好的。
比如第一个观点，很赞。
第二个后来再看大概了解了。但你在第一个中心句的时候写的太绕，把我绕晕了。因为你要表达的内容本来就比较复杂，建议在这种时候你直接，尽量简单的将中心句写出来。

第三段也是一样。你的第一句在说industrialization 之后应该点一下，而不是food easier to prepare 这个东东improve our life.可以用个什么rather than的句子。it is industrialization rather than easier food improves people's life.....然后你的理论就可以开始写了。

只是我的一点想法，仅供参考：）

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