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雪羽酒UID: 2515193

时间总是把握不好，一写一小时。一限时就死，捶自己一棒……

2007年4月21日

Movies and televisions have more positive or more negative effects on young people's behaviors.

Since televisions and movies came into being as a new media, the discussion towards them has never been stopped. Some may argue that televisions and movies have colored the life for children in their childhood, making them more extroversive and straightforward. However, I hold the standpoint that it's more negative for young people to have movies and televisions.

Televisions and movies conveyed so much negative images to young people that theyre more likely to have a trend of violence. For example, 1 month ago there was a shocking news reported in a newspaper, saying that a middle school boy killed a girl he "loved" and dissected her body in order not to be discovered. What caused more anxiety to adults is that he "learned" this action from television series. The issue is not the only one, recent decades, we've witnessed so much young people injured someone having nothing to do with them, not to mention a growing number of shooting incidents happened in primary school. Explicitly, TVs and movies lead young people to express themselves in a distorted way, which I interpret as abnormal extroversion.

Besides, these two media, especially televisions, impress young people a wrong altitude towards consumer goods. By broadcasting advertisements all over the world, the businessmen make children have a positive impression about unhealthy food like KFC and McDonalds. Without a complete capability of judgment（“判断力”找不到更妥的词）, young people have a huge chance preferring eating junk food rather than vegetables. Consequently, we've seen more and more "little big guys" along the road. Some regions or countries have forbidden the ads of McDonalds in children's channel, the famous broadcast company BBC is the pioneer of them.

Finally, as a professor of mine said in the communication curriculum, television and movies have cultivated a generation who are good at innovation and fast thinking other than logical sense and practice. Although the former two, as the positive effect of these two media, benefit a lot when dealing with problems, logical sense and practice experience are the two more basic columns for accomplishing any subject, otherwise the whole system is just a castle in the air. That makes me believe that their negative effects are more serious than the positive ones.

Despite the advantages the televisions and movies could bring about, I tend to think that the weaknesses of the two media's influences towards young people's behaviors are more sever based on what I said above.

[ 本帖最后由 雪羽酒 于 2008-8-20 14:45 编辑 ]

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Movies and televisions have more positive or more negative effects on young people's behaviors.

Since televisions and movies came into being as a new media [new media不止一种了], the discussion towards them has never been stopped. Some may argue that televisions and movies have colored [colerized] the life for children in their childhood, making them more extroversive and straightforward. However, I hold the standpoint that it's more negative for young people to have [watch] movies and televisions.

Televisions and movies conveyed [convey] so much negative images to young people that theyre more likely to have a trend of violence. For example, 1 month ago there was a shocking news reported in a newspaper, saying that a middle school boy killed a girl he "loved" and dissected her body in order not to be discovered. What caused more anxiety to adults is that he "learned" this action from television series. The issue is not the only one, recent decades, we've witnessed so much [many] young people injured someone having nothing to do with them [by the influence of television], not to mention a growing number of shooting incidents happened in primary school. Explicitly, TVs and movies lead young people to express themselves in a distorted way, which I interpret as abnormal extroversion.

Besides, these two media, especially televisions, impress young people a wrong altitude towards consumer goods. By broadcasting advertisements all over the world, the businessmen make children have a positive impression about unhealthy food like KFC and McDonalds. Without a complete capability of judgment（“判断力”找不到更妥的词）[discerning ability], young people have a huge chance preferring eating junk food [to eat the junk food] rather than vegetables. Consequently, we've seen more and more "little big guys" along the road. Some regions or countries have forbidden the ads of McDonalds in children's channel, the famous broadcast company BBC is the pioneer of them.

Finally, as a professor of mine said in the communication curriculum, television and movies have cultivated a generation who are good at innovation and fast thinking other than logical sense and practice. Although the former two, as the positive effect of these two media, benefit a lot when dealing with problems, logical sense and practice experience are the two more basic columns for accomplishing any subject, otherwise the whole system is just a castle in the air. That makes me believe that their negative effects are more serious than the positive ones.

Despite the advantages the televisions and movies could bring about, I tend to think that the weaknesses of the two media's influences towards young people's behaviors are more sever based on what I said above.

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Since televisions and movies came into being as a new media, the discussion towards them has never been stopped. Some may argue that televisions and movies have colored the life for children in their childhood, making them more extroversive and straightforward. However, I hold the standpoint that it's more negative for young people to have movies and televisions.

Televisions and movies conveyed so much negative images to young people that theyre more likely to have a trend of violence. For example, 1 month ago there was a shocking news reported in a newspaper, saying that a middle school boy killed a girl he "loved" and dissected her body in order not to be discovered. What caused more anxiety to adults is that he "learned" this action from television series. The issue is not the only one, recent decades, we've witnessed so much young people injured someone having nothing to do with them, not to mention a growing number of shooting incidents happened in primary school. Explicitly, TVs and movies lead young people to express themselves in a distorted way, which I interpret as abnormal extroversion.

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Besides, these two media, especially televisions, impress young people a wrong altitude towards consumer goods. By broadcasting advertisements all over the world, the businessmen make children have a positive impression about unhealthy food like KFC and McDonalds. Without a complete capability of judgment（“判断力”找不到更妥的词）, young people have a huge chance preferring eating junk food rather than vegetables. Consequently, we've seen more and more "little big guys" along the road. Some regions or countries have forbidden the ads of McDonalds in children's channel, the famous broadcast company BBC is the pioneer of them.

Finally, as a professor of mine said in the communication curriculum, television and movies have cultivated a generation who are good at innovation and fast thinking other than logical sense and practice(other than 是对两者的肯定，rather than？？). Although the former two, as the positive effect of these two media, benefit a lot when dealing with problems, logical sense and practice experience are the two more basic columns for accomplishing any subject, otherwise the whole system is just a castle in the air. That makes me believe that their negative effects are more serious than the positive ones.

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Despite the advantages the televisions and movies could bring about, I tend to think that the weaknesses of the two media's influences towards young people's behaviors are more sever based on what I said above.

写得很好。

努力。

什么时候考阿？/？

雪羽酒UID: 2515193

其实我中午就看见了，觉得你写得太好了:eek: ，我得慢慢体会一下再回你改好的文章……因为一下子都不知道怎么改

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10月18，:( 有点抓狂 。。。  请问“Some regions”标红是要怎么改呢？

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Since televisions and movies （has）came into being as a new media, the discussion towards them has never been stopped. Some may argue that televisions and movies have colored the life （为生活添色彩，有这样的表达方式吗？怀疑中哦）for children in their childhood, making them more extroversive and straightforward. However, I hold the standpoint that it's more negative for young people to have （？）movies and televisions.

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Televisions and movies conveyed so much negative images to young people that theyre more likely to have a trend of violence. For example, 1 month ago there was a shocking news reported in a newspaper, saying that a middle school boy killed a girl he "loved" and dissected her body in order not to be discovered. What caused more anxiety to adults is that he "learned" this action from television series. The issue is not the only one, recent decades, we've witnessed so much （many） young people injured someone having nothing to do with them(that influnced by media or action movies), not to mention a growing number of shooting incidents happened in primary school. Explicitly, TVs and movies lead young people to express themselves in a distorted way, which I interpret as abnormal extroversion.(感觉一棒子把TVs and movies打死了，建议细分，有些暴力的动作片和恐怖片导致。。。。 )



Besides, these two media, especially televisions, impress young people a wrong altitude towards consumer goods. By broadcasting advertisements all over the world, the businessmen make children have a positive impression about unhealthy food like KFC and McDonalds. Without a complete capability of judgment（“判断力”找不到更妥的词，我觉得这个词用的准）, young people have a huge （allure替代chance）chance preferring eating junk food rather than vegetables. Consequently, we've seen more and more "little big guys" along the road. Some regions or countries have forbidden the ads of McDonalds in children's channel, the famous broadcast company BBC is the pioneer of them.

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Finally, as a professor of mine said in the communication curriculum, television and movies have cultivated a generation who are good at innovation and fast thinking other than logical sense and practice（这句2者都捧了一下，建议修改rather than?）. Although the former two, as the positive effect of these two media, benefit a lot when dealing with problems, logical sense and practice experience are the two more basic columns for accomplishing any subject, otherwise the whole system is just a castle in the air. That makes me believe that their negative effects are more serious than the positive ones.（这段的论点找的很好，但论证不够有力,也许是时间太紧，感觉匆匆收尾了）

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Despite the advantages the televisions and movies could bring about, I tend to think that the weaknesses of the two media's influences towards young people's behaviors are more sever based on what I said above.

雪羽酒UID: 2515193

Since televisions and movies （has）came into being as a new media, the discussion towards them has never been stopped. Some may argue that televisions and movies have colored the life （为生活添色彩，有这样的表达方式吗？怀疑中哦 这个改成coluorized之后似乎没什么问题）for children in their childhood, making them more extroversive and straightforward. However, I hold the standpoint that it's more negative for young people to watch movies and televisions.

Televisions and movies conveyed so much negative images to young people that theyre more likely to have a trend of violence. For example, 1 month ago there was a shocking news reported in a newspaper, saying that a middle school boy killed a girl he "loved" and dissected her body in order not to be discovered. What caused more anxiety to adults is that he "learned" this action from television series. The issue is not the only one, recent decades, we've witnessed so much （many） young people injured someone having nothing to do with them(that influnced by media or action movies), not to mention a growing number of shooting incidents happened in primary school. Explicitly, TVs and movies lead young people to express themselves in a distorted way, which I interpret as abnormal extroversion.(感觉一棒子把TVs and movies打死了，建议细分，有些暴力的动作片和恐怖片导致。。。。 )

Besides, these two media, especially televisions, impress young people a wrong altitude towards consumer goods. By broadcasting advertisements all over the world, the businessmen make children have a positive impression about unhealthy food like KFC and McDonalds. Without a complete capability of judgment（“判断力”找不到更妥的词，我觉得这个词用的准）, young people have a huge （allure替代chance，那样句子主语也要改了吧。。）chance preferring eating junk food rather than vegetables. Consequently, we've seen more and more "little big guys" along the road. Some regions or countries have forbidden the ads of McDonalds in children's channel, the famous broadcast company BBC is the pioneer of them.

Finally, as a professor of mine said in the communication curriculum, television and movies have cultivated a generation who are good at innovation and fast thinking other than logical sense and practice（这句2者都捧了一下，建议修改rather than?嗯~用错了）. Although the former two, as the positive effect of these two media, benefit a lot when dealing with problems, logical sense and practice experience are the two more basic columns for accomplishing any subject, otherwise the whole system is just a castle in the air. That makes me believe that their negative effects are more serious than the positive ones.（这段的论点找的很好，但论证不够有力,也许是时间太紧，感觉匆匆收尾了 因为我实在找不到论据了，至于时间我总是严重来不及。。）

Despite the advantages the televisions and movies could bring about, I tend to think that the weaknesses of the two media's influences towards young people's behaviors are more sever based on what I said above.

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