作文小组作业10.20

goafterdreamUID: 2215745

There are many resources of news and information in the world。it's difficult to know whom to believe and what is truth.谈一下你的观点(2005 年12 月17 日)

Nowadays, as the development of the society and the technology, we went into an information time. Thousands of ways are available to get information. It has become difficult to separate the truth from the others. However, I insist that the varies resources of news and information just make us get more close to the truth.

Today, the society becomes more complex than any other time before. In the old days, it was the government that hold the media. People trust whatever the media—or other words the government says. The things they told us may be true, while may be not sometimes. However, things change a lot when the internet came out. It makes everyone have the opportunity to publish their opinions. What we need to do is find out the fact, judge it ourselves. For example, somebody says there is going to be a war between some two countries. We believe in it? Certainly not. We should check out what is going on between them; have they ever fight before in the history; how about the relationship between them; what the war will bring to both of them, and so on. And the “many resources of news and information” will bring us the answer to all these questions. After we know all these things, we judge it.

Everything has two sides. If you believe in whatever others told you without thing about it, you will sure get lost in the ocean of information. So the key point is your choice.

Consequently, we should never feel afraid of today’s boom of information, it helps us open our eyes to see the world clearly. It offers us a way to find out the truth instead of hiding it.

[ 本帖最后由 goafterdream 于 2008-10-21 04:09 编辑 ]

goafterdreamUID: 2215745

好像字数不太够，没数，看起来好像少点，呵呵

梦想在望2008UID: 2546295

Nowadays, as (with) the development of the society and the technology, we went into an information time. Thousands of ways are available to get information. It has become difficult to separate (identify) the truth from the others. However, I insist that the varies (various) resources of news and information just make us get more close to the truth.
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Today, the society becomes more complex than any other time before. In the old days, it was the government that hold (hold不太合适建议换个词。可以用control) the media. People trust whatever the media—or other words the government says. The things they told us may be true, while may be not sometimes. However, things change a lot when the internet came out. It makes everyone have the opportunity to publish (demonstrate) their opinions. What we need to do is find out the fact, judge it (在这里加个by) ourselves. For example, somebody says there is going to be a war between some two countries. We believe in it? Certainly not（太过口语化建议换种说法）. We should check out what is going on between them; have they ever fight before in the history; how about the relationship between them; what the war will bring to both of them, and so on. （个人认为这一连串的句型结构不规范，建议We should check out the following questions：。。。一连串一般疑问句） And the “many resources of news and information” will bring us the answer to all these questions. After we know all these things, we judge it. （这一段TS不明确，建议在段落第一句就写明支持你观点的理由）_i`uRE
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Everything has two sides. If you believe in whatever others told you without thing（thinking） about it, you will sure (surely) get lost in the ocean of information. So the key point is your choice. (此段内容上太简短了。建议添加些说理的句子或例子。)
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Consequently, we should never feel afraid of today’s boom of information, it helps us open our eyes to see the world clearly. It offers us a way to find out the truth instead of hiding it.
总体来看，文章中的例子能够支持论点。
建议：多考虑句型和词汇的变化；增加一两个理由段。尾段重申论点。

梦想在望2008UID: 2546295

Nowadays, as (with) the development of the society and the technology, we went into an information time. Thousands of ways are available to get information. It has become difficult to separate (identify) the truth from the others. However, I insist that the varies (various) resources of news and information just make us get more close to the truth.
留学,考试,TOEFL,GRE,GMAT,IELTS,SAT,VISA,文书,签证,论坛,出国,申请,美国,英国,欧洲,加拿大,USAeG]CSY0sbR
Today, the society becomes more complex than any other time before. In the old days, it was the government that hold (hold不太合适建议换个词。可以用control) the media. People trust whatever the media—or other words the government says. The things they told us may be true, while may be not sometimes. However, things change a lot when the internet came out. It makes everyone have the opportunity to publish (demonstrate) their opinions. What we need to do is find out the fact, judge it (在这里加个by) ourselves. For example, somebody says there is going to be a war between some two countries. We believe in it? Certainly not（太过口语化建议换种说法）. We should check out what is going on between them; have they ever fight before in the history; how about the relationship between them; what the war will bring to both of them, and so on. （个人认为这一连串的句型结构不规范，建议We should check out the following questions：。。。一连串一般疑问句） And the “many resources of news and information” will bring us the answer to all these questions. After we know all these things, we judge it. （这一段TS不明确，建议在段落第一句就写明支持你观点的理由）_i`uRE-Wx ^1}[1]b
Everything has two sides. If you believe in whatever others told you without thing（thinking） about it, you will sure (surely) get lost in the ocean of information. So the key point is your choice. (此段内容上太简短了。建议添加些说理的句子或例子。)

Consequently, we should never feel afraid of today’s boom of information, it helps us open our eyes to see the world clearly. It offers us a way to find out the truth instead of hiding it.
总体来看，文章中的例子能够支持论点。
建议：多考虑句型和词汇的变化；增加一两个理由段。尾段重申论点。