COMEON作文小组——Mer.11月29日作业

Mer.UID: 2532485

The ever-accelerating updating of science and technology brings about a multitude of changes to our daily lives. The computer, one of the most fascinating inventions in the twentieth century, is playing an increasingly signifiacant role. Yet at the meantime, controversial debate has arisen as to whether the mordern technology will ever replace the book. People have different attitudes towards this issue. Some hold the contention that the printed information will go out of existence as a consequence. However, I would not hesitate to side with this point of view.

First thing first, reading in the form of a book or newspaper is a unique experience, which offers the reader a special kind of enjoyment.
The touch on a thick volume gives one inexpressible pleasure and fun.
How delightful and cozy it is to read a book in an armchair in a fine day! In addition, you will not get bored to read a good book twice or even three times, but is it a pleasure to read the same book on the Internet for many times? What about reading a five-million-word novel? Would you choose to read it online or traditional book? Speaking for mayself, I would definitely choose the latter one.

In the second place, when we are reading online, we cannot take notes in the margins between the lines. What we can do are gazing at the cold flickering screen and using the mouse or clicking the keyborad. As a result, online reading becomes a considerably long, tiresome and uncomfortable experience. Moreover, the process is detrimental for our eyesight and the effect of radiation might also do harm to our physical health.

Last but not the least, the Internet has not yet gained as wild applications as we expect. There are still some technical limitations. For example, the children in the Western part of my country live in great destitution. It is already extremely difficult for them to get normal education. Then how is it possible for them to own a computer and have the access to the Internet?

In conclusion, printed books are a good form conveying information. In my opinion, it will not get crushed out of exsitence for the next 20 years.

[ 本帖最后由 Mer. 于 2008-11-30 15:59 编辑 ]

ammyanaUID: 2529083

The ever-accelerating updating of science and technology brings about a multitude of changes to our daily lives. The computer, one of the most fascinating inventions in the twentieth century, is playing an increasingly signifiacant role. Yet at the meantime, controversial debate has arisen as to whether the mordern technology will ever replace the book. People have different attitudes towards this issue. Some hold the contention that the printed information will go out of existence as a consequence. However, I would not hesitate to side with this point of view.
First thing first,这个用法感觉有点奇怪。first不就可以了嘛，没必要的可以尽量省略 reading in the form of a book or newspaper is a unique experience, which offers the reader a special kind of （去掉）enjoyment.KThe touch on a thick volume gives one inexpressible pleasure and fun.How delightful and cozy it is to read a book in an armchair in a fine day! In addition, you will not get bored to read a good book twice or even three times, but is it a pleasure to read the same book on the Internet for many times? What about reading a five-million-word novel? Would you choose to read it online or traditional book? Speaking for mayself, I would definitely choose the latter one.这个地方latter出现地有点突兀，如果指的是标题中的latter,未免有点太不邻近了吧。另外，这段应该是在说明纸质刊物会给人很好的体验，但这个观点并没有很好展开的样子，几个反问还是用的很好，但是个人认为这个作为论证力度不够。
In the second place, when we are reading online, we cannot take notes in the margins between the lines. What we can do are gazing at the cold flickering screen and using the mouse or clicking the keyborad.(clicking the mouse and typing the keyboard) As a result, online reading becomes a considerably long, tiresome and uncomfortable experience. Moreover, the process is detrimental for our eyesight and the effect of radiation might also do harm to our physical health.

Last but not the least, the Internet has not yet gained as wild( wide )applications as we expect. There are still some technical limitations. For example, the children in the Western part of my country(western China) live in great destitution. It is already extremely difficult for them to get normal education. Then how is it possible for them to own a computer and have the access to the Internet?|留学|签证|TOEFL|GREy
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In conclusion, printed books are a good form conveying information. In my opinion, it will not get crushed out of exsitence for the next 20 years

总体上没有大的问题，但是个人认为句式还是有点奇怪，也许是我最近看了些七七八八的英文原版书，发现句子应该是用来表达思想的，而不是越长越复杂越好的，所以，我觉得语言还是要简洁有力，能用adj.+n.的就不要用从句。另外论证必须要有说服性才好。
lz在组织语言和论证方式上还可以提高一些，呵呵。加油！
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ammyanaUID: 2529083

The ever-accelerating updating of science and technology brings about a multitude of changes to our daily lives. The computer, one of the most fascinating inventions in the twentieth century, is playing an increasingly signifiacant role. Yet at the meantime, controversial debate has arisen as to whether the mordern technology will ever replace the book. People have different attitudes towards this issue. Some hold the contention that the printed information will go out of existence as a consequence. However, I would not hesitate to side with this point of view.
First thing first,这个用法感觉有点奇怪。first不就可以了嘛，没必要的可以尽量省略 reading in the form of a book or newspaper is a unique experience, which offers the reader a special kind of （去掉）enjoyment.KThe touch on a thick volume gives one inexpressible pleasure and fun.How delightful and cozy it is to read a book in an armchair in a fine day! In addition, you will not get bored to read a good book twice or even three times, but is it a pleasure to read the same book on the Internet for many times? What about reading a five-million-word novel? Would you choose to read it online or traditional book? Speaking for mayself, I would definitely choose the latter one.这个地方latter出现地有点突兀，如果指的是标题中的latter,未免有点太不邻近了吧。另外，这段应该是在说明纸质刊物会给人很好的体验，但这个观点并没有很好展开的样子，几个反问还是用的很好，但是个人认为这个作为论证力度不够。
In the second place, when we are reading online, we cannot take notes in the margins between the lines. What we can do are gazing at the cold flickering screen and using the mouse or clicking the keyborad.(clicking the mouse and typing the keyboard) As a result, online reading becomes a considerably long, tiresome and uncomfortable experience. Moreover, the process is detrimental for our eyesight and the effect of radiation might also do harm to our physical health.

Last but not the least, the Internet has not yet gained as wild( wide )applications as we expect. There are still some technical limitations. For example, the children in the Western part of my country(western China) live in great destitution. It is already extremely difficult for them to get normal education. Then how is it possible for them to own a computer and have the access to the Internet?|留学|签证|TOEFL|GREy
E
g8D!y3QHV.d1v

In conclusion, printed books are a good form conveying information. In my opinion, it will not get crushed out of exsitence for the next 20 years

总体上没有大的问题，但是个人认为句式还是有点奇怪，也许是我最近看了些七七八八的英文原版书，发现句子应该是用来表达思想的，而不是越长越复杂越好的，所以，我觉得语言还是要简洁有力，能用adj.+n.的就不要用从句。另外论证必须要有说服性才好。
lz在组织语言和论证方式上还可以提高一些，呵呵。加油！