Argument111 V6 8.4

xiaowenzi118UID：202887

11The following appeared in a memo from the vice president of marketing at Dura-Sock, Inc.
'A recent study of Dura-Sock wearers suggests that our company is wasting the money it spends on its patented 'Endure' manufacturing process, which ensures that our socks are strong enough to last for two years. Dura-Sock has always advertised its use of the 'Endure' process, but the new study shows that the average Dura-Sock customer actually purchases new Dura-Socks every three months. Furthermore, Dura-Sock customers surveyed in our largest market, northeastern United States cities, say that they most value Dura-Sock's stylish appearance and availability in many colors. These findings suggest that Dura-Sock can increase its profits by discontinuing its use of the 'Endure' manufacturing process.'

In this argument, the arguer recommends the company to discontinue its use of the "Endure" manufacturing process of Dura-Socks. To support this argument, the arguer cites two studies to substantiate that not only are the socks not strong enough, but also customers care little about their endurance. Based on several false assumptions, this argument is specious for several grounds.

To begin with, the arguer assumes that the socks are not strong enough to last for two years. Yet the first study is scant evidence in itself to substantiate this point. Since no statistics about the new study is given, whether it is statistically reliable is unknown. If the sample is too small or the subjects are mostly young people who always want to try new things, the reliability of this survey could be greatly undermined. Even assuming that this study is statistically reliable, the frequency is poor indicator for the endurance of the socks. It is quite likely that people still wear the old socks while purchasing new ones. Just like the arguer indicated, as their socks have various styles, it is highly possible that customers who are confident about the qualities of the socks want to have more pairs of them in different styles and colors. Unless the arguer could provide concrete evidence like some quality report about their socks, I suspend my judgment on this argument.

Furthermore, the survey in the largest market is too vague to be reliable evidence for the preferences of the customers. Without any information about the number, age and gender of the customers, it is difficult to assess the reliability of this survey. If the sample is too small or perhaps the subjects are mostly young women or even children who prefer the style and color to quality, the representativeness of the survey could be greatly undermined. Even if the customers are randomly chosen and the sample is large enough, the trend in the largest market could not definitely represent the trends of all the markets. It is common sense that markets in different areas have different customers who have different preferences. Moreover, although people cherish the styles and colors, it is unfair for the arguer to take it for granted that the customers do not cherish the endurance of the socks. Without a further consideration about the factors above, this recommendation is hasty at best.

Finally, the arguer assumes too hastily that profits could be increased by discontinuing the companies' use of the "Endure" process. Since the arguer does not provide us with any statistics about the costs of this process, it is highly possible that the costs are too small to increase the profits. Moreover, it is presumptuous for the arguer to assume that the revenue could stay the same after they discontinue the "Endure" process. It is highly possible that the new socks with low quality could lose their market which could bring about a sharp decrease of revenue. Therefore, the arguer should better weigh benefits against loss first.

In sum, this argument is unconvincing as it stands. To bolster it, the arguer should provide further evidence to substantiate the representativeness of the two studies. To better assess the recommendation, I'd like to know the costs of the "Endure" process as well as potential loss in the revenue. The arguer should also provide a quality test report for their socks for us to better assess the endurance of their socks.

限时可能就是这样吧,看到题目真的很机械了,只觉得要往里面填字。根本就管不了什么句式呀，风格呀，有4分就满足了;P

今天不只不觉就打了570，废话太多了，最后也没检查。错字一大堆。哎。不过我发现在PP3里写的话字大会好一点。这个倒计时工具字太小了。:vomit:

看看怎么删吧

[ Last edited by staralways on 2005-8-4 at 13:32 ]

mkb57288UID：2105771

占座位

xiaowenzi118UID：202887

另外这是我前天写的一个Argument 117的开头，看看吧，自己觉得太突然了，第一次写那么短的。

Based on a potential trend of work-at-home, the arguer recommends an increase of home office machines and other office supplies to the office-supply department. This argument suffers from a few logical flaws which render it unconvincing as it seems.

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Did you limit the typing time? You have to limit the time which you spend in typing your assignment.

mkb57288UID：2105771

In this argument, the arguer recommends the company to discontinue its use of the "Endure" manufacturing process of Dura-Socks. To support this argument, the arguer cites two studies to substantiate that not only are the socks not strong enough, but also customers care little about their endurance（前面这句话的句子好像有点儿别扭，但又说不太清楚）. Based on several false assumptions, this argument is specious for several grounds（for several grounds这个用法不很确定） .

To begin with, the arguer assumes that the socks are not（第一段也有not我还以为是笔误，各人觉得题目的意思是strong enough to endure for two years is an unnecessary feature that only add to the expenditure in advertisements，for。。。第一个论点好像读错题了） strong enough to last for two years. Yet the first study is scant evidence in itself to substantiate this point. Since no statistics about the new study is given, whether it is statistically reliable is unknown. If the sample is too small or the subjects are mostly young people who always want to try new things, the reliability of this survey could be greatly undermined. （有这种让步建议分段）Even assuming that this study is statistically reliable, the frequency is poor indicator（indication） for the endurance of the socks. It is quite likely that people still wear the old socks while purchasing new ones. Just like the arguer indicated, as their socks have various styles, it is highly possible that customers who are confident about the qualities of the socks want to have more pairs of them in different styles and colors. Unless the arguer could provide concrete evidence like some quality report about their socks, I suspend my judgment（这个和第一段里的for grounds google的完全匹配结果都不超过600项，觉得还是慎重使用） on this argument.

Furthermore, the survey in the largest market is too vague to be reliable evidence for the preferences of the customers. Without any information about the number, age and gender of the customers, it is difficult to assess the reliability of this survey. If the sample is too small or perhaps the subjects are mostly young women or even children who prefer the style and color to quality, the representativeness of the survey could be greatly undermined. （还是分段）Even if the customers are randomly chosen and the sample is large enough, the trend in the largest market could not definitely represent（reflect/typify） the trends of all the markets. It is common sense that markets in different areas have different customers who have different preferences. Moreover, although people cherish the styles and colors, it is unfair for the arguer to take it for granted that the customers do not cherish the endurance of the socks. Without a further consideration about the factors above, this recommendation is hasty at best.

Finally, the arguer assumes too hastily that profits could be increased by discontinuing the companies' use of the "Endure" process. Since the arguer does not provide us with any statistics about the costs of this process, it is highly possible that the costs are too small to increase the profits. （感觉证据不足，再小的成本减少也会增加利润，建议写一点offset的可能性）Moreover, it is presumptuous for the arguer to assume that the revenue could stay the same after they discontinue the "Endure" process. It is highly possible that the new socks with low quality could lose their market which could bring about a sharp decrease of revenue. Therefore, the arguer should better weigh benefits against loss first.（把这moreover的提上去就可以支持哪个论点了）

In sum, this argument is unconvincing as it stands. To bolster it, the arguer should provide further evidence to substantiate the representativeness of the two studies. To better assess the recommendation, I'd like to know the costs of the "Endure" process as well as potential loss in the revenue. The arguer should also provide a quality test report for their socks for us to better assess the endurance of their socks.（结尾的280味道还是很重）

mkb57288UID：2105771

总体感觉是自由了一些，但最终效果不好讲，也让别人在评判一下看看吧，我吃完饭再回来研究一下，字数肯定是偏长了，不过考虑多写了一个点，其他的地方应该还是差不多

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In this argument, the arguer recommends the company to discontinue its use of the "Endure" manufacturing process of Dura-Socks. To support this argument, the arguer cites two studies to substantiate that not only are the socks not strong enough, but also customers care little about their endurance. Based on several false assumptions, this argument is specious for several grounds.

To begin with, the arguer assumes that the socks are not strong enough to last for two years. Yet the first study is scant evidence in itself to substantiate this point.（ Since no statistics about the new study is given, whether it is statistically reliable is unknown. If the sample is too small or the subjects are mostly young people who always want to try new things, the reliability of this survey could be greatly undermined. Even assuming that this study is statistically reliable, the frequency is poor indicator for the endurance of the socks.如果要删这些可以删去，我觉得一般是实在没话说再这样攻击） It is quite likely that people still wear the old socks while purchasing new ones. Just like the arguer indicated, as their socks have various styles, it is highly possible that customers who are confident about the qualities of the socks want to have more pairs of them in different styles and colors. Unless the arguer could provide concrete evidence like some quality report about their socks, I suspend my judgment on this argument.

Furthermore, the survey in the largest market is too vague to be reliable evidence for the preferences of the customers. Without any information about the number, age and gender of the customers, it is difficult to assess the reliability of this survey.（ If the sample is too small or perhaps the subjects are mostly young women or even children who prefer the style and color to quality, the representativeness of the survey could be greatly undermined.和body1有些重复） Even if the customers are randomly chosen and the sample is large enough, the trend in the largest market could not definitely represent the trends of all the markets. It is common sense that markets in different areas have different customers who have different preferences. Moreover, although people cherish the styles and colors, it is unfair for the arguer to take it for granted that the customers do not cherish the endurance of the socks. Without a further consideration about the factors above, this recommendation is hasty at best.（感觉其他有些地方和body1有些重）

Finally, the arguer assumes too hastily that profits could be increased by discontinuing the companies' use of the "Endure" process. Since the arguer does not provide us with any statistics about the costs of this process, it is highly possible that the costs are too small to increase the profits. Moreover, it is presumptuous for the arguer to assume that the revenue could stay the same after they discontinue the "Endure" process. It is highly possible that the new socks with low quality could lose their market which could bring about a sharp decrease of revenue. Therefore, the arguer should better weigh benefits against loss first.（这段脱离survey来讲，比较好，还可以说use of the 'Endure'是Dura-Sock的优势，如果没有了顾客就不买Dura-Sock的袜子了）

In sum, this argument is unconvincing as it stands. To bolster it, the arguer should provide further evidence to substantiate the representativeness of the two studies. To better assess the recommendation, I'd like to know the costs of the "Endure" process as well as potential loss in the revenue. The arguer should also provide a quality test report for their socks for us to better assess the endurance of their socks.
（字数的确多了呢，考试的时候很难写这么多的，关键是body1 和body2都在针对survey来攻击，肯定会有些地方重复了，而且应该找最有力的地方，说服力不大的攻击点在时间有限的情况下可以忽略，我建议把body 1and body 2合并，针对the new study shows that the average Dura-Sock customer actually purchases new Dura-Socks every three months在写一段，这样应该攻击的比较全面，而且简洁，不知xiaoweizi是否同意呢？）

mkb57288UID：2105771

另外那个开头的第一句很好了，总的框架已经出来了，several logic flaw 感觉不是很具体后面那一句要是能罗列一下批驳的逻辑错误的类型就好了像haste generalization, false analogy, ungrounded assumption, unpresentative survey, etc，就好像Issue统领全文的开头那样，所以不妨把开头最后写，当然只是个人意见

xiaowenzi118UID：202887

确实, 一开始题目没看仔细,看到Survey就写了下去,第一段废话太多了