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65The following appeared in a memo from the president of a chain of cheese stores located throughout the United States.
"For many years all the stores in our chain have stocked a wide variety of both domestic and imported cheeses. Last year, however, the five best-selling cheeses at our newest store were all domestic cheddar cheeses from Wisconsin. Furthermore, a recent survey by Cheeses of the World magazine indicates an increasing preference for domestic cheeses among its subscribers. Since our company can reduce expenses by limiting inventory, the best way to improve profits in all of our stores is to discontinue stocking many of our varieties of imported cheese and concentrate primarily on domestic cheeses."

Outline:
1、It is false comparision that last year example use for the evidence of illustrating the arguer’s conclusion now.
2、The representative and authority of the survey.
3、Newest store does not popularize all stores.

  In the argument, the arguer conclude that the best way to improve profits in all of our stores is to discontinue stocking many imported cheese and concentrate primarily on domestic cheese. To support this conclusion, the arguer quotes the evidence that five best-selling cheeses at their newest store were all domestic cheeses last year. In addition, a recent survey by cheeses of the world magzine also indicates an preference for domestic cheeses among its subscribers. However, the argument seems unbelievable and unreliable under careful examination and scrunity.

In the first place, it is false comparision that last year examples use for the evidence of illustrating the arguer’s conclusion now. Common sense tells us that after a year, many changes have taken place. Perhaps cheeses saled out last year while no one want to buy domestic cheeses. If this is the case, then the last year example seems improper in the argument.

In the second place, the representative and authority of this recent survey is unreliable. On the one hand, the survey is launched among  the magazine subscribers. There is no clear information given about these subscribers in the argument. Perhaps these buyers are just preference to the taste of domestic arguer’s conclusion, then it is natural that the survey will support the arguer’s conclusion. On the other hand, because the arguer fails to provide more information of the world magazine, we have no reasons to believe the results of this maganize. To base on the two aspects, the reliable of results in this survey are weaken greatly.

Finally, newest store does not popularize all stores. The arguer provide the detailed information about the newest store such as its location, sale time, shop scales etc. Perhaps the newest store only store few imported cheeses, then of course, the domestic cheeses sale well. Without these distinctive information, it is difficult to accept the arguer’s conclusion.

In conclusion, to base on what has discussed above, it is clear that the argument is not reliable. To make it more believable, the arguer should provide more information on the newest stores and cheeses of the wold magazine, as well as the newest evidence that best-selling cheeses are no other imported than domestic cheeses.

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65The following appeared in a memo from the president of a chain of cheese stores located throughout the United States.
"For many years all the stores in our chain have stocked a wide variety of both domestic and imported cheeses. Last year, however, the five best-selling cheeses at our newest store were all domestic cheddar cheeses from Wisconsin. Furthermore, a recent survey by Cheeses of the World magazine indicates an increasing preference for domestic cheeses among its subscribers. Since our company can reduce expenses by limiting inventory, the best way to improve profits in all of our stores is to discontinue stocking many of our varieties of imported cheese and concentrate primarily on domestic cheeses."

Outline:
1、It is false comparision that last year example use for the evidence of illustrating the arguer’s conclusion now.
2、The representative and authority of the survey.
3、Newest store does not popularize all stores.

  In the argument, the arguer concludes that the best way to improve profits in all of our stores is to discontinue stocking many imported cheese and concentrate primarily on domestic cheese.最好不要照抄原文，稍微改点也好 To support this conclusion, the arguer quotes the evidence that five best-selling cheeses at their newest store were all domestic cheeses last year. In addition, a recent survey by cheeses of the world magzine also indicates an preference for domestic cheeses among its subscribers. However, the argument seems unbelievable and unreliable under careful examination and scrunity.

In the first place, it is false comparision that last year examples use for the evidence of illustrating the arguer’s conclusion now last year's record is not representative enough to be fell back on as a means to illustrate the arguer's conclusion Common sense tells us that after a year, many changes have taken place. Perhaps cheeses saled out last year while no one want to buy domestic cheeses. 这句什么意思啊？是去年人们买国产奶酪还是不买哦？If this is the case,if this turns out to be the case, then the last year example seems improper in the argument.

In the second place, the representative and authority of this recent survey is unreliable. On the one hand, the survey is launched among  the magazine subscribers. 我想这里该讨论以下，订购者是杂志订购者还是牛乃订购者There is no clear information given about these subscribers in the argument. Perhaps these buyers are just preference to the taste of domestic arguer’s conclusion,语法有问题，自己再检查 then it is natural that the survey will support the arguer’s conclusion. On the other hand, because the arguer fails to provide more information of the world magazine, we have no reasons to believe the results of this maganize.对于杂志的什么内容呢？显然你的论述太简单了，不够有力 To base based on the two aspects, the reliable名词 of results in this survey are weaken greatly.
论证可以再深入点，另外，语法要注意～～

Finally, newest store does not popularize all stores. The arguer should provide the detailed information about the newest store such as its location, sale time, shop scales etc. Perhaps the newest store only store few imported cheeses, then of course, the domestic cheeses sale well[/u].这点很好 Without these distinctive information, it is difficult to accept the arguer’s conclusion.

In conclusion, to base on what has discussed above, it is clear that the argument is not reliable. To make it more believable, the arguer should provide more information on the newest stores and cheeses of the wold magazine, as well as the newest evidence that best-selling cheeses are no other imported than domestic cheeses. 结尾不错，总结做得比较好

首先，语法要注意。另外，如果时间允许最好再深入，整个论述感觉太浅了点，分析不透彻

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65The following appeared in a memo from the president of a chain of cheese stores located throughout the United States.
"For many years all the stores in our chain have stocked a wide variety of both domestic and imported cheeses. Last year, however, the five best-selling cheeses at our newest store were all domestic cheddar cheeses from Wisconsin. Furthermore, a recent survey by Cheeses of the World magazine indicates an increasing preference for domestic cheeses among its subscribers. Since our company can reduce expenses by limiting inventory, the best way to improve profits in all of our stores is to discontinue stocking many of our varieties of imported cheese and concentrate primarily on domestic cheeses."

Outline:
1、It is false comparision that last year example use for the evidence of illustrating the arguer’s conclusion now.
2、The representative and authority of the survey.
3、Newest store does not popularize all stores.

  In the argument, the arguer concludes that the best way to improve profits in all of our stores is to discontinue stocking many imported cheese and concentrate primarily on domestic cheese.最好不要照抄原文，稍微改点也好(这个也是新东方老师讲的，我也不知道为什么他这么说要尊重作者的论点) To support this conclusion, the arguer quotes the evidence that five best-selling cheeses at their newest store were all domestic cheeses last year. In addition, a recent survey by cheeses of the world magzine also indicates an preference for domestic cheeses among its subscribers. However, the argument seems unbelievable and unreliable under careful examination and scrunity.

In the first place, it is false comparision that last year examples use for the evidence of illustrating the arguer’s conclusion now last year's record is not representative enough to be fell back on as a means to illustrate the arguer's conclusion（sally的表达很好，值得我学习） Common sense tells us that after a year, many changes have taken place. Perhaps cheeses saled out last year while no one want to buy domestic cheeses. 这句什么意思啊？是去年人们买国产奶酪还是不买哦？（打的时候，忘了加this year 了）If this is the case,if this turns out to be the case（同意）, then the last year example seems improper in the argument.

In the second place, the representative and authority of this recent survey is unreliable. On the one hand, the survey is launched among  the magazine subscribers. 我想这里该讨论以下，订购者是杂志订购者还是牛乃订购者（这点提的很好）There is no clear information given about these subscribers in the argument. Perhaps these buyers just prefer to the taste of domestic cheeses语法有问题，自己再检查（打错了，电脑错误操作，不好意思）， then it is natural that the survey will support the arguer’s conclusion. On the other hand, because the arguer fails to provide more information of the world magazine, we have no reasons to believe the results of this survey by the magazine.对于杂志的什么内容呢？显然你的论述太简单了，不够有力 To base based on the two aspects, the reliable名词 of results in this survey are weaken greatly.
论证可以再深入点，另外，语法要注意～～（同意sally的意见）

Finally, newest store does not popularize all stores. The arguer should provide the detailed information about the newest store such as its location, sale time, shop scales etc. Perhaps the newest store only store few imported cheeses, then of course, the domestic cheeses sale well.这点很好 Without these distinctive information, it is difficult to accept the arguer’s conclusion.

In conclusion, to base on what has discussed above, it is clear that the argument is not reliable. To make it more believable, the arguer should provide more information on the newest stores and cheeses of the wold magazine, as well as the newest evidence that best-selling cheeses are no other imported than domestic cheeses. 结尾不错，总结做得比较好

首先，语法要注意。另外，如果时间允许最好再深入，整个论述感觉太浅了点，分析不透彻