Argument140 (x_x互改组) 多谢指教

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The author of the report recommended that the Committee on Faculty Promotions and Salaries at Elm City University should offer a promotion and a raise in salary, in the consideration of protecting Professor Thomas leaving to other colleges, which is compelling at first glance. The author cited the popularity of Prof. Thomas in the students and her ability in gaining research grants. Careful examination of the evidence, however, reveals several logical flaws in the report.

First, although her classes are among the largest at the university, the committee needs more details about her classes. It is entirely possible that her classes are all compulsory one, which compel the student to attend. And the condition of the students in her classes is another factor need to be considered. If most of the students do anything other than listening, we cannot conclude that she is popular in the students. On the contrary, such condition may undermine her reputation. Therefore, without the sort of all her classes and the response about her classes from her students, the author cannot ensure the committee.

Second, the author noted that the money she has brought to the university in research grants has exceeded her salary in each of the last two years, which did not reflect that her ability to get research grants. It is possible that the grants her get in recently two years are the only money she had ever got in her seventeen years' application. Even if she had the enough ability to get research funds, lacking of the specific sum of the grants she brought to the university, however, we cannot decide whether a $10,000 raise is reasonable.

Third, the author provided no evidence that could support the promotion. All the material in hand did not indicate that Prof. Thomas held that ability to be a Chairperson in the Department, although she was famous in students and able to earn research funds, if any. Therefore, the author needs to offer more information about her ability to be the Department Chairperson.

To sum up, the report of the committee need complementary information to ensure the committee accept the advice of the report. Without the details about the classes of Prof. Thomas, the committee cannot accept her popularity among students. And Lacking of the overall information about her application and her ability, the raise in salary and promotion is unreasonable.

最后还对Prof. Thomas 会不会离开Elm Univ.有个讨论， 但不知道该如何说。
大家有什么意见？

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觉得还不错，明天给意见

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The author of the report recommended that the Committee on Faculty Promotions and Salaries at Elm City University should offer a promotion and a raise in salary, in the consideration of protecting Professor Thomas leaving to other colleges, which is compelling at first glance. The author cited the popularity of Prof. Thomas in the students and her ability in gaining research grants. Careful examination of the evidence, however, reveals several logical flaws in the report.

First, although her classes are among the largest at the university, the committee needs more details about her classes. It is entirely possible that her classes are all compulsory one, which compel the student to attend. And the condition of the students in her classes is another factor need to be considered. If most of the students do anything other than listening, we cannot conclude that she is popular in the students. On the contrary, such condition may undermine her reputation. Therefore, without the sort of all her classes and the response about her classes from her students, the author cannot ensure the committee.

Second, the author noted that the money she has brought to the university in research grants has exceeded her salary in each of the last two years, which did not reflect that her ability to get research grants. It is possible that the grants her get in recently two years are the only money she had ever got in her seventeen years' application. Even if she had the enough ability to get research funds, lacking of the specific sum of the grants she brought to the university, however, we cannot decide whether a $10,000 raise is reasonable.

Third, the author provided no evidence that could support the promotion. All the material in hand did not indicate that Prof. Thomas held that ability to be a Chairperson in the Department, although she was famous in students and able to earn research funds, if any. Therefore, the author needs to offer more information about her ability to be the Department Chairperson.

To sum up, the report of the committee need complementary information to ensure the committee accept the advice of the report. Without the details about the classes of Prof. Thomas, the committee cannot accept her popularity among students. And Lacking of the overall information about her application and her ability, the raise in salary and promotion is unreasonable.

划线部分是我觉得用词不好或者语法有问题的地方，整体思路还可以
就是批判的时候不够犀利，感觉没有说道点子上，比方说上课

If most of the students do anything other than listening, we cannot conclude that she is popular in the students.
是不是应该说即使popular也没用
感觉作者加强练习

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The author of the report recommended that the Committee on Faculty Promotions and Salaries at Elm City University should offer a promotion and a raise in salary, in the consideration of protecting？ prevent更好吧？ Professor Thomas leaving to other colleges, which is compelling at first glance. The author cited the popularity of Prof. Thomas in the students and her ability in gaining research grants. Careful examination of the evidence, however, reveals several logical flaws in the report.

First, although her classes are among the largest at the university, the committee needs more details about her classes. It is entirely possible that her classes are all compulsory one, which compel the student to attend. And the condition of the students in her classes is another factor need to be considered. If most of the students do anything other than listening, we cannot conclude that she is popular in the students. On the contrary, such condition may undermine her reputation. Therefore, without the sort/catalogs? of all her classes and the response about her classes from her students, the author cannot ensure the committee.

Second, the author noted that the money she has brought to the university in research grants has exceeded her salary in each of the last two years, which did not reflect that her ability to get research grants. It is possible that the grants her get in recently two years are the only money she had ever got in her seventeen years' application. Even if she had the enough ability to get research funds, lacking of the specific sum of the grants she brought to the university, however, we cannot decide whether a $10,000 raise is reasonable.似乎应该说得更细节一点，比如这个钱怎么不够用了，怎么就不能证明他的研究能力。

Third, the author provided no evidence that could support the promotion. All the material in hand did not indicate that Prof. Thomas held that ability to be a Chairperson in the Department, although she was famous in students好像是你的推断吧？我可以反驳欧！ and able to earn research funds, if any. Therefore, the author needs to offer more information about her ability to be the Department Chairperson.我觉得应该列举一些能力，哪些是主任所必需的！

To sum up, the report of the committee need complementary information to ensure the committee accept the advice of the report. Without the details about the classes of Prof. Thomas, the committee cannot accept her popularity among students. And Lacking of the overall information about her application and her ability, the raise in salary and promotion is unreasonable.

不知道"他会离开的论断”错误大“还是他当主任能力的错误大”，反正我都写了

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