issue 38 and arg2--Phoenix队第一次作业,欢迎拍砖

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ISSUE38
"In the age of television, reading books is not as important as it once was. People can learn as much by watching television as they can by reading books."

我对题目的分析：
Terminology:
as important as
as much as
我觉得题目的关键就在这两个比较上了，television和books大家都知道是怎么回事，没什么好分析的。
分析第一个比较：not as important as 那么books以前的地位是如何的呢？现在为什么不important了？题目给了个限制：in the age of television，这个限制的用处就在第二句里面体现出来了---learn as much as。
简单说，我认为题目的逻辑关系是这样的：我们要学习（这是个隐含前提），那么我们从television上可以学到和books上同样的东西，（也就是说television可以覆盖books的功能），所以read book就不如以前重要（以前没有可以覆盖它的）。
题目分析就到此为止，我想列提纲应该是不难得。
我的提纲：
1. 定义概念，我们要学什么，怎么学
2. television是否能覆盖books提供给我们我们要学习的东西
3. television和books各自的特点和优势如何？
4. 结论--再次强调自己的观点（我写结论一直写不好，总不知道怎么“升华”，只会简单重复，大家可以看看还有什么好的写法）
这样加开头一共5段，差不多了。这题中性不太好写，我选了反对的写法。

With the coming of the age of television, many people believe, like the author, that television is totally able to substitute the position of the books in the process of learning. In asserting that television technique brings huge convenience, I agree that it is an alternative way for us to pick up information. Nevertheless, the speaker's affirmation that reading is becoming less important than it was carries certain unfair implications, which should be addressed.



Admittedly, television program holds certain advantages over books for its lively images. For the purpose of documenting and conveying temporal, spatial events and experiences, film and video generally provide a more accurate and convincing record than a book or other written account. For instance, I think no child in China will deny much of our knowledge about the wild animals; about the variety of insets only found in Amazon River drainage area; and about the flowers blooming on an island of Pacific Ocean is mainly coming from one famous program called “The world of animal", not from the description of the cyclopedia. And furthermore, recent investigations on through which means people prefer to get information show that over half of the visited ones choose the video and radio as the first and second choices, rather than reading printing accounts. It is likely that a modern person would like being separated from the earth without the television.

However, the speaker overlooks several respects in which books are inherently superior to television as a medium for learning. What we called "learning" here not only just means accepting information; it is a complex course which includes several aspects: logical thinking, analysis, creative problem solving and est.—all of those are basically life skills we should familiar with. Nowadays, a worldwide trend of life-long education attracts each one's attention. It depends on the processes of self-learning, which enhance the requirement of high level learning abilities, the most outstanding one of which is critical thinking.

Critical thinking as well as analysis is the keys for us to realize the unknown world; to mouse out the truth of a business; to introspect and improve ourselves. Sadly, these abilities can hardly be gained through watching TV. Because each TV program has very strict limits on time, viewers always can not receive complete, unfiltered, and balanced information from it, let alone relying on TV to develop informed and intelligent opinions about important social and political issues. Thus, viewers nearly have no opportunity to train their critical thinking abilities through analyzing the facts showing in TV. Good books, on another hand, enable readers to get whole background of an issue and to review cross-reference material, which overcome the disadvantages of TV. By carefully comparing different standpoints of several writers, we may able to build up our own point of view. This process is an active training of creative thinking ability.

Moreover, reading books gives a lot of fun for readers than switching television channels, or even scanning a video library. Browsing among books allows for serendipity-unexpectedly picking up an attractive while searching for another one. This pleasurable sensory can not be easily substituted for many people--an experience who will miss forever.

In sum, television and video can be more efficient than books as a means of conveying current affairs, providing lively information of the world for children. However, books facilitate creative learning in certain ways that television can not. And reading books will ever play a crucial role in our process of education.





Argument2:
2.The following appeared in a letter sent by a committee of homeowners from the Deerhaven Acres to all homeowners in Deerhaven Acres.



"Seven years ago, homeowners in nearby Brookville community adopted a set of restrictions on how the community's yards should be landscaped and what colors the exteriors of homes should be painted. Since then, average property values have tripled in Brookville. In order to raise property values in Deerhaven Acres, we should adopt our own set of restrictions on landscaping and housepainting."

题目分析：
文中的逻辑是这样的，结论是we should adopt our own set of restrictions on landscaping and housepainting in order to raise property values，依据是Brookville's people这样做了然后average property values升了
批驳点：
最主要的错误该是论据吧，首先Brookville做了R是不是导致PV上升的原因呢？是不是还有其他可能？
其次就是即使R是PV上升的原因，也不能推出结论：
1.B和D是否具有可比性？也就是说B的做法未必合适D
2.即使合适，那是seven years ago的事情，现在情况有无变化？如果有，是不是还有更好的做法去提高PV？
我能想到的就是这些了，大家看看有什么问题或需要补充的


Giving some facts about what the Brookville community have done, the author alleges a between the raising of average property values with adopting a set of restrictions. Although it is credible on the surface, closer examination will reveal the hidden flaws as follows in his/her reasoning.

Primarily, whether setting restrictions on how the community's yards should be landscaped and what colors the exteriors of homes should be painted caused the increasing of average property values in Brookville is kept unknown since that no evidence shows other alternative possibilities have been ruled out. It is widely held belief that increasing of average property values could be attributed to complex reasons. For instance, with the resuscitation of the whole country's economy government could provide more investments on basic equipments such as speedway, railway and new havens in local areas like Brookville. These investments allure enormous architectural contractors, thus creating hundreds of new work opportunities for local persons. Besides, exploit ting mineral resources will also brings the town millions of dollars. In addition, the new techniques rolled out from the local universities may contribute to the continuing growth of the local economy, thus enhancing the increases of average property values. Without taking this case into consideration, the arguer's conclusion is unconvincing.

Next, granted that adopting restrictions do help B to improve its average property values, to assert that it will also work in D. In other words, different nature conditions and customs prevent the same method from being suitable for two areas. Local people in D may prefer having various styles of houses instead of the same types. And huge of buildings in D maybe the traditional ones which have specially historical values: for example, the old church standing from more than one hundred years; the library used as harbor during the World War Two; the former residence of a famous writer or politician. Printing them with the same color will totally destroy their fascination and hurt citizens' feeling. Thus, the auger assumes without justification that the background and conditions have remained the same for the two places.

In addition, I wonder that setting restrictions will be as useful as it was seven years ago. The world changes so fast that we can hardly rely on our previously successful experience. Not only in technique field but also in business circles, completely believing past experience always leads to fail. IBM insisted its old useful business mode and left the tremendous PC market to Microsoft. And Microsoft was forced to develop IE and MSN by the trend of Internet which leads by companies like Yahoo and Google. So, the auger unfairly assumes that the old method would be of use after several years and the conclusion based on it is unwarranted.

In sum, the argument is unconvincing since it is standing on questionable assumptions. To strengthen it, the author must provide strong evidence to assure us about the assumptions which have been described above.

lovegentooUID: 2171248

[题目分析的很好，深刻]
With the coming of the age of television, many people believe, like the author, that television is totally able to substitute the position of the books in the process of learning. In asserting that television technique brings huge convenience, I agree that it is an alternative way for us to pick up information. Nevertheless, the speaker's affirmation that reading is becoming less important than it was carries certain unfair implications, which should be addressed.[你的观点没有表示的很清楚，如果反对，直接strongly oppose]



Admittedly, television program holds certain advantages over books for its lively images. For the purpose of documenting and conveying temporal, spatial events [暂时的，空间的事件？改成instantly如何？]and experiences, film and video generally provide a more accurate and convincing record than a book or other written account. For instance, I think no child in China will deny much of our knowledge about the wild animals; about the variety of insets only found in Amazon River drainage area; and about the flowers blooming on an island of Pacific Ocean is mainly coming from one famous program called “The world of animal", not from the description of the cyclopedia.[这个例子并没有有力的支持TS，TS说lively images相对books来说有一定的优势，这个例子应该和生动的images产生关系吧？跟第二句话倒是有联系] And furthermore, recent investigations on through which means people prefer to get information show that over half of the visited ones choose the video and radio as the first and second choices, rather than reading printing accounts. It is likely that a modern person would like being separated from the earth without the television.[这段话是表明人们对获取信息方面的观点调查并不意外着愿意通过电视来Learning，况且对于获取信息而言，跟TS和本段第二句都没什么大的关联。]

However, the speaker overlooks several respects in which books are inherently superior to television as a medium for learning. [TS several respects 下文没有具体阐明]What we called "learning" here not only just means accepting information; it is a complex course which includes several aspects: logical thinking, analysis, creative problem solving and est.[est是什么东西？]—all of those are basically life skills we should familiar with. Nowadays, a worldwide trend of life-long education attracts each one's attention. It depends on the processes of self-learning, which enhance the requirement of high level learning abilities, the most outstanding one of which is critical thinking. [这一段好像没有具体的说出书本对于电视有什么特别superior的东西，另外也没有相关的例子作为支持]

Critical thinking as well as analysis is the keys for us to realize the unknown world; to mouse out the truth of a business; to introspect and improve ourselves.[看你的下文，TS应该改称书本对于培养Critical优于电视吧？] Sadly, these abilities can hardly be gained through watching TV. Because each TV program has very strict limits on time, viewers always can not receive complete, unfiltered, and balanced information from it, let alone relying on TV to develop informed and intelligent opinions about important social and political issues. Thus, viewers nearly have no opportunity to train their critical thinking abilities through analyzing the facts showing in TV. Good books, on another hand, enable readers to get whole background of an issue and to review cross-reference material, which overcome the disadvantages of TV. By carefully comparing different standpoints of several writers, we may able to build up our own point of view. This process is an active training of creative thinking ability. [这段论证结构很好]

Moreover, reading books gives a lot of fun for readers than switching television channels, or even scanning a video library. Browsing among books allows for serendipity-unexpectedly [这个词用得好极了] picking up an attractive while searching for another one. This pleasurable sensory can not be easily substituted for many people--an experience who will miss forever.

In sum, television and video can be more efficient than books as a means of conveying current affairs, providing lively information of the world for children. However, books facilitate creative learning in certain ways that television can not. And reading books will ever play a crucial role in our process of education.[最后一段可以先点出你的观点，不要先说理由，books facilitate之类的，刚看，还以为你要支持TV呢，其中more efficient….however后也没有点出你认为book更高效而是许多理由的罗列]


Giving some facts about what the Brookville community have done, the author alleges a between the raising of average property values with adopting a set of restrictions. Although it is credible on the surface, closer examination will reveal the hidden flaws as follows in his/her reasoning.[首段很好]

Primarily, whether setting restrictions on how the community's yards should be landscaped and what colors the exteriors of homes should be painted caused the increasing of average property values in Brookville is kept unknown since that no evidence shows other alternative possibilities have been ruled out.[TS很棒] It is widely held belief that increasing of average property values could be attributed to complex reasons. For instance, with the resuscitation [复兴在这里MS不妥]of the whole country's economy government could provide more investments on basic equipments such as speedway, railway and new havens in local areas like Brookville. These investments allure [allure贬义词吧，勾引得意思]enormous architectural contractors, thus creating hundreds of new work opportunities for local persons. Besides, exploit ting mineral resources will also brings the town millions of dollars. In addition, the new techniques rolled out from the local universities may contribute to the continuing growth of the local economy, thus enhancing the increases of average property values. Without taking this case into consideration, the arguer's conclusion is unconvincing.

Next, granted that adopting restrictions do help B to improve its average property values, to assert that it will also work in D. [这句缺东西吧，不通顺]In other words, different nature conditions and customs prevent the same method from being suitable for two areas.[也不一定就完全不适合阿，委婉点吧maybe] Local people in D may prefer having various styles of houses instead of the same types. And huge of buildings in D maybe the traditional ones which have specially historical values[这个理由好]: for example, the old church standing from more than one hundred years; the library used as harbor during the World War Two; the former residence of a famous writer or politician. Printing them with the same color will totally destroy their fascination and hurt citizens' feeling. Thus, the auger assumes without justification that the background and conditions have remained the same for the two places.

In addition, I wonder that setting restrictions will be as useful as it was seven years ago. The world changes so fast that we can hardly rely on our previously successful experience. Not only in technique field but also in business circles, completely believing past experience always leads to fail. IBM insisted its old useful business mode and left the tremendous PC market to Microsoft. And Microsoft was forced to develop IE and MSN by the trend of Internet which leads by companies like Yahoo and Google. [这个例子可以在写得完整一些，比如说IBM转让后的情况。。。。]So, the auger unfairly assumes that the old method would be of use after several years and the conclusion based on it is unwarranted.

In sum, the argument is unconvincing since it is standing on questionable assumptions. To strengthen it, the author must provide strong evidence to assure us about the assumptions which have been described above.[结尾不错]

感觉你Argu写得不错，不过我觉得你可以举更多的例子来说明道理，这样就更好了，这篇Issue我觉得论证不够缜密，词汇句法方面比我丰富，我不敢评论。。。

lovegentooUID: 2171248

晕,怎么没有颜色?

angelstarUID: 2162799

我对题目的分析：
Terminology:
as important as
as much as
我觉得题目的关键就在这两个比较上了，television和books大家都知道是怎么回事，没什么好分析的。
分析第一个比较：not as important as 那么books以前的地位是如何的呢？现在为什么不important了？题目给了个限制：in the age of television，这个限制的用处就在第二句里面体现出来了---learn as much as。
简单说，我认为题目的逻辑关系是这样的：我们要学习（这是个隐含前提），那么我们从television上可以学到和books上同样的东西，（也就是说television可以覆盖books的功能），所以read book就不如以前重要（以前没有可以覆盖它的）。
题目分析就到此为止，我想列提纲应该是不难得。
我的提纲：
1. 定义概念，我们要学什么，怎么学
2. television是否能覆盖books提供给我们我们要学习的东西
3. television和books各自的特点和优势如何？
4. 结论--再次强调自己的观点（我写结论一直写不好，总不知道怎么“升华”，只会简单重复，大家可以看看还有什么好的写法）
这样加开头一共5段，差不多了。这题中性不太好写，我选了反对的写法。

赞fishyao对提纲的分析，很有条理！有个建议：文中增加你所支持的观点的论述比重。至于升华，最后再强调一下自己的观点还不够是吗？我也困惑

[ 本帖最后由 angelstar 于 2006-2-19 09:01 编辑 ]