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forevercocoUID: 149574

"The video camera provides such an accurate and convincing record of contemporary life that it has become a more important form of documentation than written records."

[词解]
accurate and convincing
也就是说video camera的documentation更精确，有说服力。
可以表现为以下几个方面：直观/客观/场景还原，相对应的纸笔记录是抽象/主观/可比较

Record of contemporary life
Video只能胜任短期的记录，而长期的记录类似于经济发展趋势，人民受教育程度等等只能用纸笔记录。一些需要从中寻求规律的东西，只能靠纸笔的记录。
Video 只能记录局部的、表面的东西，那什么是全部的、深刻的呢？
先来看看都有哪些video: 体育比赛、安全监控、儿童成长、自然现象、生活片断…还有什么呢?
Contemporary life是否指人们的日常生活？也就是说取代了日记之类的东西？

Documentation
是指需要长期保存的材料。Documentation是用来做什么的呢？主要是文献/数据/资料的保存吧……两个例子：法律/儿童成长
容易偏题的地方：把documentation写成expression
释义：The collation, synopsizing, and coding of printed material for future reference.
材料整理：以备将来参考的书面材料的整理、摘要和编码
与历史事实的一致性
(利用微型照片复制等技术进行的)文献的编集; 整理, 分类

提纲：
1.不同意
2.Video camera在某些方面确实可以精确的记录人们的生活。
a.新闻纪实（保存价值） b.生活记录（生动性） c.安全监控（客观性）
3.但是人们的思想和社会的发展还是依赖于纸笔的记录
a.日记（情感世界） b.社会发展规律（抽象性）/ 统计数据（可以性）
4.不能忽略纸笔记录的重要性。

In this era of rapid social and technological change leading to increasing life complexity, people are in great demand of new facilities to record their daily activities, social diversification and emotional displacements. Video camera is one of these advanced facilities as the author defined, but is it so important that even exceeds the writing records we have been used for thousands of years? I hold my opinion that the speaker overstates the comparative significance of video as a documentary tool.

For the purpose of documenting temporal, spatial events and experiences, I agree that a video record is usually more accurate and more convincing than a written record. The most important usage for video camera is news recording. It is impossible for anyone, no matter how keen an observer and skilled a journalist, to recount the complete and objective detail of an exciting NBA finals, or a catastrophic hurricane, tornado, or volcanic eruption. Entirely and accurate documentation of these affairs is a precious preservation of human process. At the same time, home use of video camera is more and more popular nowadays. From a sweet wedding to a happy birthday party, from a fantastic honeymoon travel to the growing process of a baby. Video cameras provide people with vivid images and living sounds which will not be replaced by any writing records. What’s more, video surveillance cameras are objective witnesses with perfect memories. Thus they can play a vital evidentiary role in legal proceedings--such as those involving robbery, drug trafficking, police misconduct, motor vehicle violations, and even malpractice in a hospital operating room. Indeed, whenever moving images are central to an event the video camera is superior to the written word. However, a writing entry cannot “replay” these living segments so identically as video camera.

But as we know, the progress of human society is not merely images and sounds.
What serve deeply as the foundation stone is actually our subjective thoughts and recondite natural laws. For example, people’s feeling appeared in diaries is sometimes so subjective that may not truly reflects the real world. This kind of psychological relief is especially necessary when the real life is not that satisfying. Therefore writing entry can play as an effective placebo to for people to escape from reality. Further, social development is always evaluated by some abstract quantitative index other than video records. Thus writing entries are of great importance in recording numerical values about economic growth and social status. Economic trend can be detected by comparing price index and the law of supply and demand in a period of time, environmental contamination can be evaluated by air quality index and forest-cover ratio. Undoubtedly this kind of abstract and comparable documentation have so irreplaceable merits and values in recording human development that video records can hardly surpass.

In my opinion, in spite of the important role writing entry played in social category, we should never desert this traditional documentation manner in order to pass our priceless culture and inheritance to next generation.

天才之梦UID: 2159126

"The video camera provides such an accurate and convincing record of contemporary life that it has become a more important form of documentation than written records."

[词解]
accurate and convincing
也就是说video camera的documentation更精确，有说服力。
可以表现为以下几个方面：直观/客观/场景还原，相对应的纸笔记录是抽象/主观/可比较

Record of contemporary life
Video只能胜任短期的记录，而长期的记录类似于经济发展趋势，人民受教育程度等等只能用纸笔记录。一些需要从中寻求规律的东西，只能靠纸笔的记录。
Video 只能记录局部的、表面的东西，那什么是全部的、深刻的呢？
先来看看都有哪些video: 体育比赛、安全监控、儿童成长、自然现象、生活片断…还有什么呢?
Contemporary life是否指人们的日常生活？也就是说取代了日记之类的东西？

Documentation
是指需要长期保存的材料。Documentation是用来做什么的呢？主要是文献/数据/资料的保存吧……两个例子：法律/儿童成长
容易偏题的地方：把documentation写成expression
释义：The collation, synopsizing, and coding of printed material for future reference.
材料整理：以备将来参考的书面材料的整理、摘要和编码
与历史事实的一致性
(利用微型照片复制等技术进行的)文献的编集; 整理, 分类

提纲：
1.不同意
2.Video camera在某些方面确实可以精确的记录人们的生活。
a.新闻纪实（保存价值） b.生活记录（生动性） c.安全监控（客观性）
3.但是人们的思想和社会的发展还是依赖于纸笔的记录
a.日记（情感世界） b.社会发展规律（抽象性）/ 统计数据（可以性）
4.不能忽略纸笔记录的重要性。

In this era of rapid social and technological change leading to increasing life complexity, people are in great demand of new facilities to record their daily activities, social diversification and emotional displacements. Video camera is one of these advanced facilities as the author defined, but is it so important that even exceeds the writing records we have been used for thousands of years? I hold my opinion that the speaker overstates the comparative significance of video as a documentary tool.

For the purpose of documenting temporal, spatial events and experiences, I agree that a video record is usually more accurate and more convincing than a written record. The most important usage for video camera is news recording. It is impossible for anyone, no matter how keen an observer and skilled a journalist, to recount the complete and objective detail of an exciting NBA finals, or a catastrophic hurricane, tornado, or volcanic eruption. Entirely and accurate documentation of these affairs is a precious preservation of human process. At the same time, home use of video camera is more and more popular nowadays. From a sweet wedding to a happy birthday party, from a fantastic honeymoon travel to the growing process of a baby.[不是一个句子吧] Video cameras provide people with vivid images and living sounds which will not be replaced by any writing records. What’s more, video surveillance cameras are objective witnesses with perfect memories. Thus they can play a vital evidentiary role in legal proceedings--such as those involving robbery, drug trafficking, police misconduct, motor vehicle violations, and even malpractice in a hospital operating room. Indeed, whenever moving images are central to an event the video camera is superior to the written word. However, a writing entry cannot “replay” these living segments so identically as video camera.

But as we know, the progress of human society is not merely images and sounds.
What serve deeply as the foundation stone is actually our subjective thoughts and recondite natural laws. For example, people’s feeling appeared in diaries is sometimes so subjective that may not truly reflects the real world. This kind of psychological relief is especially necessary when the real life is not that satisfying. Therefore writing entry can play as an effective placebo to for people to escape from reality. [这个例子感觉你是在说写东西的作用，你强调了写，而不是强调了记录]Further, social development is always evaluated by some abstract quantitative index other than video records. Thus writing entries are of great importance in recording numerical values about economic growth and social status. Economic trend can be detected by comparing price index and the law of supply and demand in a period of time, environmental contamination can be evaluated by air quality index and forest-cover ratio. Undoubtedly this kind of abstract and comparable documentation have so irreplaceable merits and values in recording human development that video records can hardly surpass. [感觉这里不太合适，index不一定就要written records的呀]

In my opinion, in spite of the important role writing entry played in social category, we should never desert this traditional documentation manner in order to pass our priceless culture and inheritance to next generation.
[总的来说，前半部分不错，后面的用例感觉不大符合你要讨论的问题。个人意见，仅供参考,从提纲上看，感觉要比文章实际写的好一些]

[ 本帖最后由 天才之梦 于 2006-2-15 17:36 编辑 ]

forevercocoUID: 149574

原帖由 天才之梦 于 2006-2-15 17:35 发表
[总的来说，前半部分不错，后面的用例感觉不大符合你要讨论的问题。个人意见，仅供参考,从提纲上看，感觉要比文章实际写的好一些]

其实就是后面的部分，我想不到什么好的例子。比如说对于抽象东西的把握，写得比较乱，而且我自己就不太懂，sigh，感觉没有把documentation表达出来。。。。:L

michelle1021UID: 195011

In this era of rapid social and technological change leading to increasing life complexity, people are in great demand of new facilities to record their daily activities, social diversification and emotional displacements. Video camera is one of these advanced facilities as the author defined, but is it so important that even exceeds the writing records we have been used for thousands of years? I hold my opinion that the speaker overstates the comparative significance of video as a documentary tool.

For the purpose of documenting temporal, spatial events and experiences, I agree that a video record is usually more accurate and more convincing than a written record. The most important usage for video camera is news recording. It is impossible for anyone, no matter how keen an observer and skilled a journalist, to recount the complete and objective detail of an exciting NBA finals, or a catastrophic hurricane, tornado, or volcanic eruption. Entirely and accurate documentation of these affairs is a precious preservation of human process. At the same time, home use of video camera is more and more popular nowadays. From a sweet wedding to a happy birthday party, from a fantastic honeymoon travel to the growing process of a baby. Video cameras provide people with vivid images and living sounds which will not be replaced by any writing records. What’s more, video surveillance cameras are objective witnesses with perfect memories. Thus they can play a vital evidentiary role in legal proceedings--such as those involving robbery, drug trafficking, police misconduct, motor vehicle violations, and even malpractice in a hospital operating room. Indeed, whenever moving images are central to an event the video camera is superior to the written word. However, a writing entry cannot “replay” these living segments so identically as video camera.我觉得这段写的很好，例子很充实

But as we know, the progress of human society is not merely images and sounds.
What serve deeply as the foundation stone is actually our subjective thoughts and recondite natural laws. For example, people’s feeling appeared in diaries is sometimes so subjective that may not truly reflectsreflect the real world. This kind of psychological relief is especially necessary when the real life is not that satisfying. Therefore writing entry can play as an effective placebo to for people to escape from reality. Further, social development is always evaluated by some abstract quantitative index other than video records. Thus writing entries are of great importance in recording numerical values about economic growth and social status. Economic trend can be detected by comparing price index and the law of supply and demand in a period of time, environmental contamination can be evaluated by air quality index and forest-cover ratio. Undoubtedly this kind of abstract and comparable documentation have so irreplaceable merits and values in recording human development that video records can hardly surpass.虽然这一段也有举很多例子，感觉没有上一段读起来舒服，可能是之前的例子更通俗易懂些

In my opinion, in spite of the important role writing entry played in social category, we should never desert this traditional documentation manner in order to pass our priceless culture and inheritance to next generation.

我觉得全文论述的都很不错，但是我觉得可以把段稍微分细一些，这样更清爽些。仅供参考啊！:)

freud5027UID: 2165870

词解
accurate and convincing
也就是说video camera的documentation更精确，有说服力。
可以表现为以下几个方面：直观/客观/场景还原，相对应的纸笔记录是抽象/主观/可比较
<忽然发觉video camera的客观是相对的，要看它作何用途，就看我们用什么角度说明它的客观了>

Record of contemporary life
Video只能胜任短期的记录，而长期的记录类似于经济发展趋势，人民受教育程度等等只能用纸笔记录。一些需要从中寻求规律的东西，只能靠纸笔的记录。
Video 只能记录局部的、表面的东西，那什么是全部的、深刻的呢？
先来看看都有哪些video: 体育比赛、安全监控、儿童成长、自然现象、生活片断…还有什么呢?
Contemporary life是否指人们的日常生活？也就是说取代了日记之类的东西？
<取代日记至少目前不行吧，对着镜头和纸张的感觉也不太一样呢！contemporary life感觉蕴藏着某些背景，比如科技发展。。。>

Documentation
是指需要长期保存的材料。Documentation是用来做什么的呢？主要是文献/数据/资料的保存吧……两个例子：法律/儿童成长
容易偏题的地方：把documentation写成expression<这一点蛮难区分的>
释义：The collation, synopsizing, and coding of printed material for future reference.
材料整理：以备将来参考的书面材料的整理、摘要和编码
与历史事实的一致性
(利用微型照片复制等技术进行的)文献的编集; 整理, 分类

提纲：
1.不同意
2.Video camera在某些方面确实可以精确的记录人们的生活。
a.新闻纪实（保存价值） b.生活记录（生动性） c.安全监控（客观性）
3.但是人们的思想和社会的发展还是依赖于纸笔的记录
a.日记（情感世界） b.社会发展规律（抽象性）/ 统计数据（可以性）
4.不能忽略纸笔记录的重要性。

In this era of rapid social and technological change leading to increasing life complexity, people are in great demand of new facilities to record their daily activities, social diversification and emotional displacements. Video camera is one of these advanced facilities as the author defined, but is it so important that even exceeds the writing records we have been used for thousands of years? I hold my opinion that the speaker overstates the comparative significance of video as a documentary tool.

For the purpose of documenting temporal, spatial events and experiences, I agree that a video record is usually more accurate and more convincing than a written record. The most important usage for video camera is news recording. It is impossible for anyone, no matter how keen an observer and skilled a journalist, to recount the complete and objective detail of an exciting NBA finals, or a catastrophic hurricane, tornado, or volcanic eruption. Entirely and accurate documentation of these affairs is a precious preservation of human process. At the same time, home use of video camera is more and more popular nowadays. From a sweet wedding to a happy birthday party, from a fantastic honeymoon travel to the growing process of a baby. Video cameras provide people with vivid images and living sounds which will not be replaced by any writing records. What’s more, video surveillance cameras are objective witnesses with perfect memories. Thus they can play a vital evidentiary role in legal proceedings--such as those involving robbery, drug trafficking, police misconduct, motor vehicle violations, and even malpractice in a hospital operating room. Indeed, whenever moving images are central to an event the video camera is superior to the written word. However, a writing entry cannot “replay” these living segments so identically as video camera.<这段虽然流畅，不过不知道会不会让人有种眼熟的感觉。。。>

But as we know, the progress of human society is not merely images and sounds.What serve deeply as the foundation stone is actually our subjective thoughts and recondite natural laws. For example, people’s feeling appeared in diaries is sometimes so subjective that may not truly reflects the real world. This kind of psychological relief is especially necessary when the real life is not that satisfying. Therefore writing entry can play as an effective placebo to for people to escape from reality. Further, social development is always evaluated by some abstract quantitative index other than video records. Thus writing entries are of great importance in recording numerical values about economic growth and social status. Economic trend can be detected by comparing price index and the law of supply and demand in a period of time, environmental contamination can be evaluated by air quality index and forest-cover ratio <指标是具体应用方面的东西，强调它作为written records有点怪>. Undoubtedly this kind of abstract and comparable documentation have so irreplaceable merits and values in recording human development that video records can hardly surpass.

In my opinion, in spite of the important role writing entry played in social category, we should never desert this traditional documentation manner in order to pass our priceless culture and inheritance to next generation.

chrielousUID: 2166642

个人感觉写日记那个例子着实不妥

Anny.Y.WangUID: 2178596

coco姐， 明天我改好了，发上来哦

"The video camera provides such an accurate and convincing record of contemporary life that it has become a more important form of documentation than written records."

[词解]
accurate and convincing
也就是说video camera的documentation更精确，有说服力。
可以表现为以下几个方面：直观/客观/场景还原，相对应的纸笔记录是抽象/主观/可比较

Record of contemporary life
Video只能胜任短期的记录，而长期的记录类似于经济发展趋势，人民受教育程度等等只能用纸笔记录。一些需要从中寻求规律的东西，只能靠纸笔的记录。
Video 只能记录局部的、表面的东西，那什么是全部的、深刻的呢？
先来看看都有哪些video: 体育比赛、安全监控、儿童成长、自然现象、生活片断…还有什么呢?
Contemporary life是否指人们的日常生活？也就是说取代了日记之类的东西？

Documentation
是指需要长期保存的材料。Documentation是用来做什么的呢？主要是文献/数据/资料的保存吧……两个例子：法律/儿童成长
容易偏题的地方：把documentation写成expression
释义：The collation, synopsizing, and coding of printed material for future reference.
材料整理：以备将来参考的书面材料的整理、摘要和编码
与历史事实的一致性
(利用微型照片复制等技术进行的)文献的编集; 整理, 分类

我本人还是觉得，还是要从video 和written 两方面的特点来写。比如即时信息，和历史性的记载。上面的解释很好的。

提纲：
1.不同意
2.Video camera在某些方面确实可以精确的记录人们的生活。
a.新闻纪实（保存价值） b.生活记录（生动性） c.安全监控（客观性）
3.但是人们的思想和社会的发展还是依赖于纸笔的记录
a.日记（情感世界） b.社会发展规律（抽象性）/ 统计数据（可以性）
4.不能忽略纸笔记录的重要性。

In this era of rapid social and technological change leading to increasing life complexity, people are in great demand of new facilities to record their daily activities, social diversification and emotional displacements. Video camera is one of these advanced facilities as the author defined, but is it so important that even exceeds the writing records we have been used for thousands of years? I hold my opinion that the speaker overstates the comparative significance of video as a documentary tool.

For the purpose of documenting temporal, spatial events and experiences, I agree that a video record is usually more accurate and more convincing than a written record. The most important usage for video camera is news recording. It is impossible for anyone, no matter how keen an observer and skilled a journalist, （这段很熟悉哦，我们都阅读了北美范文了，呵呵）to recount the complete and objective detail of an exciting NBA finals, or a catastrophic hurricane, tornado, or volcanic eruption. Entirely and accurate documentation of these affairs is a precious preservation of human process.<我觉得改成这样会比较好，Video for family use becomes more and more popular nowadays, from a sweet wedding to a happy birthdady party...> At the same time, home use of video camera is more and more popular nowadays. From a sweet wedding to a happy birthday party, from a fantastic honeymoon travel to the growing process of a baby. Video cameras provide people with vivid images and living sounds which will not be replaced by any writing written records. What’s more, video surveillance cameras are objective witnesses with perfect memories. Thus they can play a vital evidentiary role in legal proceedings--such as those involving robbery, drug trafficking, police misconduct, motor vehicle violations, and even malpractice in a hospital operating room. Indeed, whenever moving images are central to an event the video camera is superior to the written word. However, a writing entry cannot “replay” these living segments so identically as video camera.

But as we know, the progress of human society is not merely images and sounds. What serve deeply as the foundation stone is actually our subjective thoughts and recondite natural laws. For example, people’s feeling appeared in diaries <diary 的例子我也有提到过，但是我是这样想的，我是说如果用video来写日记的话，我们会发现我们有时候一个整天都在电视旁边看另一天的日记， 这样会不会好点呢？>is sometimes so subjective that may not truly reflects the real world. This kind of psychological relief is especially necessary when the real life is not that satisfying. Therefore writing entry <嗬嗬，coco 姐， 这个是什么意思呢？>can play as an effective placebo to 删掉吧for people to escape from reality. Further, social development is always evaluated by some abstract quantitative index other than video records. Thus writing entries are of great importance in recording numerical values about economic growth and social status. Economic trend can be detected by comparing price index and the law of supply and demand in a period of time, environmental contamination can be evaluated by air quality index and forest-cover ratio. Undoubtedly this kind of abstract and comparable documentation have so irreplaceable merits and values in recording human development that video records can hardly surpass.

In my opinion, in spite of the important role writing entry played in social category, we should never desert this traditional documentation manner in order to pass our priceless culture and inheritance to next generation.

coco 姐， 总体来说行文还是不错的，但我觉得如果再写之前看看北美范文，就会觉得没有别的思路了，所以我会现自己写，然会再看范文的。:)

加油！！！

[ 本帖最后由 Anny.Y.Wang 于 2006-2-16 21:03 编辑 ]