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7."The video camera provides such an accurate and convincing record of contemporary life that it has become a more important form of documentation than written records."

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[Position] cannot agree with the speaker's statement
虽然video records是一种很重要的form of documentation，但是很难因为它在某些方面的优越性而断定它比written records更为重要
[1] 不可否定的是Video records拥有它自己独特的不可替代的优点和价值
[2] 但是同样不可否定的是,not only video records也有它的缺点和局限性，but also written records同样有它比可替代的优点和价值
[3] 同时，单独仅仅考虑这两种forms自身的特点和优势，并不能完全决哪个更为重；外部因素同样也至关重要，其中两个主要的外部因素是record创作人的方式以及解读record的自身的喜好和特点。

Along with the dramatic development of technique, our life has gone through tremendous changes. By providing a brand-new vivid way of recording events, the video camera, serving as an important form of documentation has come to pervade many aspects of our lives. It is no doubt that its distinctive characteristics make it to be superior to other forms in some occasion, but they never push it to be predominated in any term.

The fascination of the camera video lies in its being not only a more detailed method to display events but also a doable way to record the whole process incessantly. In virtue of the vivid expression, video pictures come to be important documentary evidence to record specific affairs. For instance, surveillance video cameras are set almost anywhere in banks and casinos to monitor all events occurring there and conserve them as proofs for the future uses; news becomes more striking through the television than the same report in newspaper due to the stronger impression of films. Furthermore, video pictures can be termed the continuous uninterrupted image sequence, which accounts for another advantage of video cameras, the excellent ability to record the integral course. That is one reason why the living broadcast of sports games, captured by multiple cameras from different angles, to some extent can construct almost the same ambiance as that of the stadiums. All those merits make video documentations hard to be fully superseded for another one.

Yet, only by providing the predominance of the video record is it still hasty to settle the result of whether it is of more importance than written records. On one hand, its limits and shortages also need to be taken into consideration. In fact, video records are merely proper to convey the occurrences rather than dealing with data and ideas since video cameras can just capture certain events in a bounded scope. The image of a famous statue can show its beauty and shape, but it is powerless to present its historical and spiritual values which the written record is gifted to inform. By contrast, traditional documents are welcomed more widely. It is natural to use written records or other papery documents in many cases such as submitting the finance report in that it is really arduous and weird to use video cameras to do so. Meanwhile, the much lower cost of traditional documents will be another factor to achieve the broad prevalence. Otherwise, video records, despite the efforts of the professionals, are still too weak to bear the trials of long time and the unfavorable conditions. Those unforgotten demerits destine that video records may not beat written documents in many respects.

On the other hand, their own attributes cannot solely determine their importance for the reason that the external factors engender a considerable effect on this issue as well. Undoubtedly, the effect of one form of documentation indicates its importance in a sense, but the effect of records does not entirely hinge on the properties of their recording means. Also significant to their effects are both how to produce them and how to be perceived and comprehended. Hence, the importance of those two forms is affected by the one who creates them and the one who utilizes them too. Take “Harry Potter” for instance. If people are asked to judge whether its movies or books are more important, the answer will definitely vary by persons. People who favor the fantastic scenes will choose the movies, but others who love the books may be addicted to the mystery and imaginary space the author creates by words. Likewise, the skills of producers have the similar effect on records.

To sum up, it is unreasonable to allege that the video record or the written documentation is more important than the other for each has its own irreplaceable merits and values. In addition, the neglect of other external factors, how to produce records and how to perceive and comprehend them, may make the statement full of flaws.

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顶一下！！
老大太牛了

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Along with the dramatic development of technique, our life has gone [is going] through tremendous changes. By providing a brand-new vivid way of recording events, the video camera, serving as an important form of documentation has come to pervade many aspects of our lives [这句长句的语序读起来有点难受，请搂主推敲一下改成下边的句子会不会好一点Serving as an important form of documentation, the video camera has come to pervade many aspects of our lives by providing a brand-new vivid way of recording events.  ]. It is no doubt that its distinctive characteristics make it to be [去 to be] superior to other forms in some occasion, but they never push it to be predominated [不如直接用动词to predominate] in any term.

The fascination of the camera video lies in its being not only  a more detailed method to display events but also a doable way to record the whole process incessantly[这句长句有些混乱The fascination of the camera video not only lies on its detailed method to display events, but it also rest with its capacity of incessantly recording of the whole process. 或者改成其它形式，但需注意not only, but also 的用法]. In virtue of the vivid expression, video pictures come to be important documentary evidence to record specific affairs. For instance, surveillance video cameras are set almost anywhere in banks and casinos to monitor all events occurring there and conserve them as proofs for the future uses; news becomes more striking through the television than the same report in newspaper due to the stronger impression of films. Furthermore, video pictures can be termed [?] the [去 the] continuous uninterrupted [这两个形容词有些重复] image sequence, which accounts for another advantage of video cameras, the excellent ability to record the integral course. That is one reason why the living broadcast of sports games, captured by multiple cameras from different angles, to some extent can construct almost the same ambiance as that of the stadiums. All those merits make video documentations hard to be fully superseded for [by] another one.

Yet, only by providing the predominance of the video record is it still hasty to settle the result of whether it is of more importance than written records. On one hand, its limits and shortages also need to be taken into consideration. In fact, video records are merely proper to convey the occurrences rather than dealing with data and ideas since video cameras can just capture certain events in a bounded scope. The image of a famous statue can show its beauty and shape, but it is powerless to present its historical and spiritual values which the written record is gifted to inform. By contrast[ing], traditional documents are welcomed more widely. It is natural to use written records or other papery documents in many cases such as submitting the finance report in that it is really arduous and weird to use video cameras to do so. Meanwhile, the much lower cost of traditional documents will be another factor to achieve the broad prevalence. Otherwise, video records, despite the efforts of the professionals, are still too weak to bear the trials of long time and the unfavorable conditions. Those unforgotten demerits destine that video records may not beat written documents in many respects. [这段论证严谨，精彩！]

On the other hand, their own attributes cannot solely determine their importance for the reason that the external factors engender a considerable effect on this issue as well. Undoubtedly, the effect of one form of documentation indicates its importance in a sense, but the effect of records does not entirely hinge on the properties of their recording means. [What is ] Also significant to their effects are both how to produce them and how to be perceived and comprehended. Hence, the importance of those two forms is affected by the one who creates them and the one who utilizes them too. Take “Harry Potter” for instance. If people are asked to judge whether its movies or books are more important, the answer will definitely vary by persons. People who favor the fantastic scenes will choose the movies, but others who love the books may be addicted to the mystery and imaginary space the author creates by words. Likewise, the skills of producers have the similar effect on records.

To sum up, it is unreasonable to allege that [whether] the video record or the written documentation is more important than the other for each has its own irreplaceable merits and values. In addition, the neglect of other external factors, how to produce records and how to perceive and comprehend them, may make the statement full of flaws.

[楼主除了第二段有点混乱外其它两个论证段都很精彩！不愧是老大啊~~]

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Along with the dramatic development of technique, our life has gone through tremendous changes. By providing a brand-new vivid way of recording events, the video camera, serving as an important form of documentation has come to pervade many aspects of our lives. It is no doubt that its distinctive characteristics make it to be superior to other forms in some occasion（s), but they never push it to be predominated in any term（s).

The fascination of the camera video lies in its being not only a more detailed method to display events but also a doable way to record the whole process incessantly. In virtue of the vivid expression(s), video pictures come to be important documentary evidence to record specific affairs. For instance, surveillance video cameras are set almost anywhere in banks and casinos to monitor all events occurring there and (to) conserve them as proofs for the future uses; news becomes more striking through the television than the same report in newspaper due to the stronger impression of films. Furthermore, video pictures can be termed the continuous uninterrupted image sequence, which accounts for another advantage of video cameras, the excellent ability to record the integral course. That is one reason why the living broadcast of sports games, captured by multiple cameras from different angles, to some extent can construct almost the same ambiance as that of the stadiums. All those merits make video documentations hard to be fully superseded for another one.
例子举的好多，感觉你想说的问题都有点被例子盖过的感觉，看到最后的印象都是例子了


Yet, only by providing the predominance of the video record is it still hasty to settle the result of whether it is of more importance than written records. On one hand, its limits and shortages also need to be taken into consideration. In fact, video records are merely proper to convey the occurrences rather than dealing with data and ideas since video cameras can just capture certain events in a bounded scope. The image of a famous statue can show its beauty and shape, but it is powerless to present its historical and spiritual values which the written record is gifted to inform. By contrast, traditional documents are welcomed more widely. It is natural to use written records or other papery documents in many cases such as submitting the finance report in that it is really arduous and weird to use video cameras to do so. Meanwhile, the much lower cost of traditional documents will be another factor to achieve the broad prevalence. Otherwise, video records, despite the efforts of the professionals, are still too weak to bear the trials of long time and the unfavorable conditions. Those unforgotten demerits destine that video records may not beat written documents in many respects.
从四个方面论述文字记录的优点

On the other hand, their own attributes cannot solely determine their importance for the reason that the external factors engender a considerable effect on this issue as well. Undoubtedly, the effect of one form of documentation indicates its importance in a sense, but the effect of records does not entirely hinge on the properties of their recording means. Also significant to their effects are both how to produce them and how to be perceived and comprehended. Hence, the importance of those two forms is affected by the one who creates them and the one who utilizes them too. Take “Harry Potter” for instance. If people are asked to judge whether its movies or books are more important, the answer will definitely vary by persons. People who favor the fantastic scenes will choose the movies, but others who love the books may be addicted to the mystery and imaginary space the author creates by words. Likewise, the skills of producers have the similar effect on records.
这段的角度好少人写到，从作者和读者自身能力方面去论证

To sum up, it is unreasonable to allege that the video record or the written documentation is more important than the other for each has its own irreplaceable merits and values. In addition, the neglect of other external factors, how to produce records and how to perceive and comprehend them, may make the statement full of flaws.


语言：555俺没啥说滴鸟~
思路：正，反，合（角度比较新）好多人写合的时候都说了两者结合是一个很好的方法去记录，论证的也比较没力度（俺也一样55）
论证：举例论证
好厉害~~顶！

[ 本帖最后由 dudujasper 于 2006-2-22 21:06 编辑 ]