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When it comes to experiences or ceremonies which most influence a person’s change from children to adults , because every person has various circumstances ,different people have different choices on their decision .Some people buttress that the happiest thing can promote their mature ; on the other hand ,others champion that the most painful one may cause their rapid transition from children to adults .According to my own factual circumstance , no other events can make me more rapid mature than dealing with my admission procedure for my university .Among countless factors which influence my decision ,there are two conspicuous aspects as follows .

The most consequent reason for my penchant for the viewpoint is that the course of managing the procedure develops my independence .In 2004 , I alone went to AnHui University ,which is located in Hefei ,the capital of Anhui province and far from my hometown .As we know , when new students enter universities ,many forms or something need to be completed and other things need to be dealt with ,which is a challenge for those who just leave their parents and have no experience of independent life .During the whole course ,I exerted my outmost and finally succeeded in finishing all formalities .Although at the end of the day I felt quite tired ,I still was happy because I have the first time experience of independently coping with my own things and it makes me rapid mature .

Another reason can be seen by every person is that the experience also cultivates my sense of responsibility .To some extent ,once you are independent to do something ,you must be responsible for it .A good example can be given .My classmate Thomas , a young boy less than 15 years old ,must confront many difficulties and bear the results possible when he decided to travel alone in the wild mountain .For that matter , independent behaviors are helpful to nurture one’s responsible sense .

Admittedly ,independence and responsible awareness are but two of the main factors which influence a person’s change from children to adults ; others are of certain meaning to a person’s mature as well such as modesty , toleration and confidence . Nevertheless ,as far as I am concerned , with independent and responsible qualities , I have accomplished several key things for me . As a result , I bolster that dealing with my admission procedure for the university is the most significant event for my mature .

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When it comes to experiences or ceremonies which most influence a person’s change from children to adults , because every person has various circumstances ,different people have different choices on their decisions .Some people buttress that the happiest thing can promote their mature ; on the other hand ,others champion that the most painful one may cause their rapid transition from children to adults .According to my own factual circumstance , no other events can make me more rapidly mature than dealing with my admission procedure for my university .Among countless factors which influence my decision ,there are two conspicuous aspects as follows .bbs.gter.net N+U



DThe most consequent reason for my penchant for the viewpoint is that the course of managing the procedure develops my independence .In 2004 , I alone went to AnHui University ,which is located in Hefei ,the capital of Anhui province and far from my hometown .As we know , when new students enter universities ,many forms or something need to be completed and other things need to be dealt with ,which is a challenge for those who just leave their parents and have no experience of independent life .During the whole course ,I exerted my outmost and finally succeeded in finishing all formalities .Although at the end of the day I felt quite tired ,I still was happy because I have the first time experience of independently coping with my own things and it makes me rapidly mature .

Another reason can be seen by every person is that the experience also cultivates my sense of responsibility .To some extent ,once you (we) are independent to do something ,you (we) must be responsible for it .A good example can be given .My classmate Thomas , a young boy less than 15 years old ,must confront many difficulties and bear the results possible when he decided to travel alone in the (a) wild mountain .For that matter , independent behaviors are helpful to nurture one’s responsible sense (responsibilities).*()f()

Admittedly ,independence and responsible awareness are but two of the main factors which influence a person’s change from children to adults ; others are of certain meaning to a person’s mature as well such as modesty , toleration and confidence . Nevertheless ,as far as I am concerned , with independent and responsible qualities , I have accomplished several key things for me . As a result , I bolster that dealing with my admission procedure for the university is the most significant event for my mature(maturation) .
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