issue144 第一篇 求拍啊！

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144. "It is the artist, not the critic*, who gives society something of lasting value."
       *a person who evaluates works of art, such as novels, films, music, paintings, etc.
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It is common that some people have the opinion that the artist, rather than the critic who evaluates works of art, gives society permanent value. There is no doubt that the things of lasting value, such as the famous paintings, the classic music, the great films, the widely known novels, are created by the artist. However, there is not only world-class artist but also third-class artist, who is creating countless art work, valuable or valueless, all the time. The function of the critic, which helps the ordinary people to distinguish the excellent ones from thousands of art work, is always be ignored by the public. Therefore, it is the artist who creates the lasting valuable thing, while, it is the critic who discover the things of lasting value.

The artist gives us good works together with the bad ones. In the world, there are thousands of artist making millions of art work ceaselessly. Just like all the fingers have different length, all the artist is unable to be in the same level, indeed, a world-class artist might make some failure works either. The excellent works would be remember forever, and the rest would be forgotten in the history.

Why so many art works would be sank into oblivion? Or, why the public's eyes would be caught on such few art works? The answer is the critic, who guides the public to the art world. Turn over the daily newspaper; the critic's article introduces the attractive or disappointed books. Open the TV set, the entertainment programs tell us which film should to watch or which shouldn't. And the others wouldn't be talked. Then most of those may lose the public attentions even when it was born. Moreover, when surfing the Internet, we can find that the good one is be praised, the bad one is be criticized and the normal one is be forgotten. In modern society, there are so many such critics guiding people's eyes. Unfortunately, in front of the mass art work, the majority would follow the suggestions. They would enjoy the art works in the list made by the critic. In the modern art, the effect of the critic is very important to the art work, which could decide the fate of it in some degree.

The critic's advice is also signified to the classical art. In one hand, the classical art is called classic, just because it was said classical by the grand old man, who was the critic to the modern people. In the other hand, nowadays, many people acquainting with the old art work is through the comments made by the critic. The influence of the critic would be continuance by the time.

The factor of the critic’s existent is the common people need the critic's help to comprehend the art, especially when a new art form is created. Take the Van Gogh for example. When his impression paintings, such as the Starry Night, was first published. Many people couldn't understand the content in his paintings. At this time, the critic's comments have made an important role to the spread of his paintings. Then his work could still be enjoyed by many people. At the beginning of a new kind of art's, it's always too complexity or too abstract for normal people to understand. So the art works need the critic's help to be received by the public.

In a conclusion, the artist gives the society something of lasting value, together with something of valueless. And it is the critic to discover the true valuable thing. People would memorize the famous artist's name through his (or her) art work, but should never forget contribution of the critic.

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It is common that some people have the opinion that the artist, rather than the critic who evaluates works of art, gives society permanent value. There is no doubt that the things of lasting value, such as the famous paintings, the classic music, the great films, the widely known novels, are created by the artist. However, there is not only world-class artist but also third-class artist, who is creating countless art work, valuable or valueless, all the time. The function of the critic, which helps the ordinary people to distinguish the excellent ones from thousands of art work, is always be ignored by the public. Therefore, it is the artist who creates the lasting valuable thing, while, it is the critic who discover the things of lasting value.开头太长了,很多句子可以放在后面丰满正文段.最后这个therefore可以换个写法,不用那么对称,显得有点死板了

The artist gives us good works together with the bad ones. In the world, there are thousands of artist making millions of art work ceaselessly. Just like all the fingers have different length, all the artist is unable to be in the same level, indeed, a world-class artist might make some failure works either. The excellent works would be remember forever, and the rest would be forgotten in the history.

Why so many art works would be sank into oblivion? Or, why the public's eyes would be caught on such few art works? The answer is the critic, who guides the public to the art world. Turn over the daily newspaper; the critic's article introduces the attractive or disappointed books. Open the TV set, the entertainment programs tell us which film should to watch or which shouldn't to be watched. And the others wouldn't be talked前面这两句感觉有点怪,修改一下吧.后句没看懂.talked是什么意思??. Then most of those may lose the public attentions even when it was born. Moreover, when surfing the Internet, we can find that the good one is be praised, the bad one is be criticized and the normal one is be forgotten. In modern society, there are so many such critics guiding people's eyes. Unfortunately, in front of the mass art work, the majority would follow the suggestions. They would enjoy the art works in the list made by the critic. In the modern art, the effect of the critic is very important to the art work, which could decide the fate of it in some degree.设问句开头比较新颖,但是主题句不太明显.而且感觉本段论证得比较乱...

The critic's advice is also signified to the classical art. In one hand, the classical art is called classic, just because it was said classical by the grand old man, who was the critic to the modern people. In the other hand, nowadays, many people acquainting with the old art work is through the comments made by the critic. The influence of the critic would be continuance by the time.

The factor of the critic’s existent is the common people need the critic's help to comprehend the art, especially when a new art form is created. Take the Van Gogh for example. When his impression paintings, such as the Starry Night, was first published. Many people couldn't understand the content in his paintings. At this time, the critic's comments have made an important role to the spread of his paintings. Then his work could still be enjoyed by many people. At the beginning of a new kind of art's, it's always too complexity or too abstract for normal people to understand. So the art works need the critic's help to be received by the public. Van Gogh好像一直是被当时的评论家批评...

In a conclusion, the artist gives the society something of lasting value, together with something of valueless. And it is the critic to discover the true valuable thing. People would memorize the famous artist's name through his (or her) art work, but should never forget contribution of the critic.

语句比较通顺,鲜有语法错误 :)
个人觉得这种长短段夹杂,文章显得比较乱.长段落的论证顺序重新组织一下.
第一篇写成这样,很好啦,加油~

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谢谢拉！
确实是对艺术类的很头痛， 说来说去都没有什么例子。
写完后，看了看别人的文章， 感觉收获很大。