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发表于 2006-8-14 11:35:55 |显示全部楼层
178. The 21st century has begun. What changes do you think this new century will bring? Use examples and details in your answer.
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The 21st century witnesses the advancements in biology, communication and environment. Everyone is taking the advantage of the benefits, while taking the challenges on our shoulders as well. It is predicted that, the trends of non-intermitted development will be the mark stamped on the coming century.

The new century is a century of information. With the development of computer and the introduction of internet, the capacity and efficiency of communication across vast areas is greatly increased. People gain the convenient access to all sorts of resources through the full utilization of search engine such as Google and Yahoo, meanwhile, the innovative tools, such as Skype and MSN, facilitates the real-time communication with both perfect quality and bottom price.

The new century is a century of biology. Inter-discipline subjects accelerate the pace of scientific discoveries in biology and further more promote the understanding of us. The utilization of electronic microscope makes the discovery of molecular double helix structure a possibility; the co-operation among the researchers of diversified nationalities enable the full decryption of gene-mapping; the ever deeper insight into DNA aids the investigation into fatal diseases. New development in biology provides us a platform to understand both the nature and ourselves.

The new century is a century of balancing both environment and human beings. Even though the benefits are conspicuous, there are objections from environmental protectors, insisting that antistrophes, taking tornados, floods, and starvations for examples, are the very alarms that nature gives us. People are realizing that, only through respecting and observing the rules of the nature, can we construct a harmonious ecological environment suitable to live in.

To sum up, new century will bring us significant advancement in technology, science and ecology. The new chances and challenges will always go with the proceeding wheels in the history of human beings.

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发表于 2006-8-14 21:11:09 |显示全部楼层
好久不见,考前我再改一篇吧。

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The 21st century witnesses (这用的不错) the advancements in biology, communication and environment(按照后文,换个顺序吧). Everyone (Every one) is taking the advantage of the benefits, while taking the challenges on our shoulders as well. It is predicted that, the trends of non-intermitted development will be the mark stamped on the coming (22nd  century??)century.

The new century is a century of information. With the development of computer and the introduction of internet, the capacity and efficiency of communication across vast areas is greatly increased. People gain the convenient access to all sorts of resources through the full utilization of search engine such as Google and Yahoo, meanwhile, the innovative tools, such as Skype and MSN, facilitates (facilitate) the real-time communication with both perfect quality and bottom price (低廉的价格?,好像是底价).

The new century is a century of biology. Inter-discipline subjects accelerate the pace of scientific discoveries in biology and further more (furthermore) promote the understanding of us. The utilization of electronic microscope makes the discovery of molecular double helix structure a possibility; the co-operation among the researchers of diversified nationalities enable (enables) the full decryption of gene-mapping; the ever deeper insight into DNA aids the investigation into fatal diseases. New development in biology provides us a platform to understand both the nature and ourselves.

The new century is a century of balancing both environment and human beings (到现在才看出,三个开头还有点排比对应的味道, 但这句建议 balance between environment and human beings, 感觉你both and 用的太多了:)). Even though the benefits (of … 说个具体) are conspicuous, there are objections from environmental protectors, insisting that antistrophes (catastrophes吧,不会是“反用”?), taking tornados, floods, and starvations for examples, are the very alarms that nature gives us. People are realizing that, only through respecting and observing the rules of the nature, can we construct a harmonious ecological environment suitable to live in.

To sum up, new century will bring us significant advancement in technology, science and ecology. The new chances and challenges will always go with the proceeding wheels in the history of human beings.

布局不错,
用词真的很好,我只是在抠其中的不足。
注意一下单复数问题
all in all,感觉这是一篇限时成功的文章。

我的链接:
https://bbs.gter.net/viewthre ... type%26typeid%3D280
我自己时间控制还是有点差距,虽然能表面完成文章,但时间是so紧张,后面明显不足。
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