issue94 【米国有米】寒假第二天作业

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TOPIC: ISSUE94 - "Universities should require every student to take a variety of courses outside the student's field of study because acquiring knowledge of various academic disciplines is the best way to become truly educated."
WORDS: 546          TIME: 0:42:40          DATE: 2007-1-28

As the fast development of our society and technology, education takes a more and more important role in a person's life. Considering the several of knowledge required in the future, every student should have some recognize to other course besides his major. Meanwhile, as an excellent student, he or she should have a strong knowledge basic.

Universities should require students, who want to and also are suit to, to take a variety of courses outside the student's field of study. By this way, universities can lead students to learn more useful things and a bright future. In this period, society and companies choose their employees not only though their basic knowledge but also from their integral quality. They will care about the students' ability of communication, expression of themselves and spirit of team work. All this qualities can not be trained in the students' field of study, so they should get these abilities outside their study field. As leaders of a student's study, universities should require students to take a scale of courses which can form better ability. If universities only require students to learn some fix courses or only research on their majors, the students will become not only be bond in method of thinking, but also hardly succeed. Thus, university should encourage students to join in some other courses and give this chance to students.

Not only form better characters of students, courses outside the student's field can also help them to learn and research better in their own field of study. Learning some other courses would lead the students to a broad world of thinking. And though some other useful learning, the students may be can learn some other worthy skill which can be a tool of their own study.  For example, a student majoring in biology may be require some knowledge of chemistry. If university require the student to learn some basic knowledge and research method in some chemical courses, the student would have less difficult in his further research and study. It is possibly that the knowledge he gained in the chemical courses would become the key-points of his own study on his major.

Admittedly, before the students get a variety of courses outside, university should measure that whether the students need these courses or not and how deeply they should learn. University should require the students to only take part in the outside courses which is needed in their further learning and life. If the courses have no related to their future, university should not allow the students waste time on them unless they are interesting on them. Meanwhile, the university should control the time and vigor that students spend on outside courses in a reasonable scope. This is because that if the students waste too much time on the outside courses, they must ignore the basic learning and research in their own major field. This will lead to a result that the students have many other skills and methods, but they do not know how to use them and where they can use them. In the case, the outside courses will lost the original meaning of improve students' ability and try to consummate students' characters.

When universities require students to learn some other things reasonably, the best way to become truly educated is becoming clearly.

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As the fast development of our society and technology, education takes a more and more important role in a person's life. Considering the several of knowledge required in the future, every student should have some recognition to other course besides his major. Meanwhile, as an excellent student, he or she should have a strong knowledge basic. 手段简洁明确

Universities should require students, who want to and also are suit to, to take a variety of courses outside the student's field of study. By this way, universities can lead students to learn more useful things and enjoy a bright future. In this period(Nowadays), society and companies choose their employees not only though(according to) their basic knowledge but also from their integral quality.(according not only to their basic knowledge and also to their integral quality)综合素质直译有点别扭吧，maybe overall capability and personality They will care about the students' ability of communication, expression of themselves and spirit of team work. All this qualities can not be trained in the students' field of study, so they should get these abilities outside their study field. As leaders of a student's study, universities should require students to take a scale of courses which can formcultivate better ability. If universities only require students to learn some fixed courses or only research on their majors, the students will become not only bounded in method of thinking, but also hardly succeed. Thus, university should encourage students to join in some other courses and provides chances--give this chance to students.

Not only form better characters of students, courses outside the student's field can also help them to learn and research better in their own field of study. Learning (some删掉) other courses would lead the students to a broad world of thinking. And though some other useful learning, the students maybe can learn some other worthy skills which can be a tool of their own study.  For example, a student majoring in biology may be required to possess some knowledge of chemistry. If university require the student to learn some basic knowledge and research method in some chemical courses, the student would have less difficult in his further research and study. It is possibly that the knowledge he gained in the chemical courses would become the key-points of his own study on his major.

Admittedly, before the students get a variety of courses outside, university should measure that whether the students need these courses or not and how deeply they should learn. University should require the students to only take part in the outside courses which is needed in their further learning and life. If the courses have no relation to their future, university should not allow the students waste time on them unless they are interesting on them. Meanwhile, the university should control the time and vigor that students spend on outside courses within a reasonable scope. This is because that if the students waste too much time on the outside courses, they must ignore the basic learning and research in their own major field. This will lead to a result that the students have many other skills and methods, but they do not know how to use them and where they can use them. In the case, the outside courses will lost the original meaning of improve students' ability and try to consummate students' characters.

When universities require students to learn some other things reasonably, the best way to become truly educated is becoming clearly.这句话有点拗口

脉络大致清楚，结尾有点弱，注意一下词语的使用，力求准确。把提纲列出来修改会容易点

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明早有会得早起，所以只改了一部分，抱歉。
感觉语言方面的主要问题是词性和句子结构的正确运用掌握得不太好，而在思想和逻辑方面，可能因为限时的关系，不太清楚，建议列下提纲。
第一次限时作业写了这么多，还是不错的，加油加油！！

As the fast development of our society and technology, education takes (plays) a more and more important role in a person's life.(As后面应该接从句,要用名词的话应用With。而且社会和科技的快速发展跟教育的重要性之间的关系不明显，感觉开头有点奇怪) Considering the several of knowledge required in the future ( several的词性从语法上不能这么用，意思也有点不明白), every student should have some recognize( recognize 是动词, 不能用some来修饰。要么是have some knowledge， 要么是 should acquire) other course besides his major. Meanwhile, as an excellent student, he or she should have a strong knowledge basic.

Universities should require students, who want to and also are suit to (who have the desire and capability), to take a variety of courses outside the student's field of study. By (In) this way, universities can lead students to learn more useful things and a bright future.(这句话句子结构有问题)  In this period（Nowadays） society and companies (直接用employers表示公司，政府或其他选拔人才的机构)choose their employees not only though( through) their basic knowledge but also from their integral quality. They will(will是多余的) care about the students' ability of communication, expression of themselves（可删除） and spirit of team work. All this qualities cannot be trained in the students' field of study, so they should get these abilities outside their study field. (交流能力和合作能力不能在自己的专业课程中得到训练么？那样的话又怎能说学习其他的课程就能达到了呢？这逻辑上是不是有点问题呢？所以在论据方面需要再考虑一下。可以从正反两方面来说)As leaders of a student's study, universities should require students to take a scale of courses which can form better ability. If universities only require students to learn some fix （fixed） courses or only research on their majors, students will not only become be bond in method of thinking, but also hardly succeed. （not only 放在become 之后的话，后面的结构就是不对的。）Thus, university should encourage students to join in some other courses and give this chance to students.( offer them easy access)



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