Issue159【Persistence小组】第11次作业

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TS:   To begin with, machine provides high quality service, as an excellent assistance in many social aspects
         However, public should not ignore machines' limitation in accelerating the social progress, that machines  can not to make a practical decision instead of people
        Further more, , machines are always inferior to human mind.


When it comes to the new century, the discussion of this issue among individuals and society as a whole has come to a vogue during the last decade. The author asserts that the machines will be always inferior to the human mind, for machines are just the tools. I agree with the statement- the machines, just as the tools in the social developing process, service human's mind and put in into practice.

To begin with, machine provides high quality service, as an excellent assistance in many social aspects. Taking one new technology applications for instance, a new kind of machine which can print the literature such as novels selected by customer and finally bound in one book has put into service in some libraries in America. People choose his or her favorite book and wait for some minutes, and then the books satisfied all the public's taste will come out to people's hands. The machine creates a new era in book selling, literature spreading, and terminates the old era of selective sorts chosen by the press. In these cases, machines propels the social development, supplies better service for public, also accelerates the literature's spreading and the human civilization increasing as a whole.

From a personal perspective, however, public should not ignore machines' limitation in accelerating the social progress, that machines  can not to make a practical decision instead of people, no matter how advanced it is. God creates human being; human being creates civilization and world. Though modern machine handles sorts of situations, taking the place of people, perfectly especially in peril, it is still a tool, even it reveals the capability human does not own. For example, the modern machine mentioned above whose function is producing a book in customers' wills can bring thousands of books, however, it can not write any single litter in its own will, for without any thoughts it only performs in order set ready before. So, we may call the machine a producer, not a writer. Human plans, and decides; machine obeys, and executes.     

Further more, since lacking the capability of thinking and creativity which human owns, even possessing infinite time, vigor, and indestructible body, machines are always inferior to human mind. Human mind sketches the future blueprint which set the whole world on the fast developing road, whereas tool will be used to realize the dreams. And the notion, gained from science fiction, that in the future the machine such as robot will have wisdom like human even superior to human seems reachless in the present science technology situation.

To sum up, from what has been discussed above, we may firmly draw the conclusion that the human mind must be superior to machine in present. Even someday in the future machines have their own thoughts, we can totally believe human mind still control all tools no matter how advanced it is.     

欣馨之火UID: 2183210

When it comes to the new century, the discussion of this issue among individuals and society as a whole has come to a vogue during the last decade. The author asserts that the machines will be always inferior to the human mind, for machines are just the tools. （这句用反义词概括题目，简洁、精练。好！）I agree with the statement- the machines, just as the tools （两次提到tools，稍显累赘）in the social developing process, service human's mind and put in into practice.（总体看，首段很简明的复述了题目并表达了自己的观点，很好！）

To begin with, machine provides high quality service, as an excellent assistance in many social aspects. Taking one new technology （用technological还是technology？我不太确定，你自己可以再斟酌，小问题。）applications for instance, a new kind of machine which can print the literature such as novels selected by customer and finally bound in one book has put into service in some libraries in America. People choose his or her favorite book and wait for some minutes, and then the books satisfied all the public's taste will come out to people's hands. The machine creates a new era in book selling, literature spreading, and terminates the old era of selective sorts chosen by the press. In these cases, machines propels the social development, supplies better service for public, （加一个and比较好吧？没有连接词了）also accelerates the literature's spreading and the human civilization increasing as a whole.

From a personal perspective, however, public should not ignore machines' limitation in accelerating the social progress, that machines  can not to make a practical decision instead of people, no matter how advanced it is. God creates human being; human being creates civilization and world. （这句话不错。据我了解，西方社会也流行基督思潮，但是，在这种文章中，这么表达，不知是否妥当。可以再斟酌。）Though modern machine handles sorts of situations, taking the place of people, perfectly especially in peril, it is still a tool, even it reveals the capability human does not own. For example, the modern machine mentioned above whose function is producing a book in customers' wills can bring thousands of books, however, it can not write any single litter（是letter的笔误吧？） in its own will, for without any thoughts it only performs in order set ready before. So,（用Therefore或者Hence更正式一点儿，So比较口语化） we may call the machine a producer, not a writer. Human plans, and decides; machine obeys, and executes.（最后一句并列句用的不错！）

Further more, since lacking the capability of thinking and creativity which human owns, even possessing infinite time, vigor, and indestructible body, machines are always inferior to human mind. Human mind sketches the future blueprint which set the whole world on the fast developing road, whereas tool will be used to realize the dreams. And the notion, gained from science fiction, that in the future the machine such as robot will have wisdom like human even superior to human seems reachless in the present science technology situation.（“科技”一般用science and technology，但如果直接加and又容易歧异。可不可以考虑换成：situation of science and technology）

To sum up, from what has been discussed above, we may firmly draw the conclusion that the human mind must be superior to machine in present. Even someday in the future machines have their own thoughts, we can totally believe human mind still control all tools no matter how advanced it is.（结尾简洁明了重新点题，不错！）

1.       从思想性上，没有什么大问题。持“完全赞成”观点，论证有力。
2.       文章结构清晰。先让步论述“机器”的优势，然后论证“机器”的局限性，再“局限性”论证上分为两段，主体思想是“机器不具有思维能力”，这样的论证结构，清晰，明了，好！而且，其中用同一个例子的两个方面，这个方法好！
3.       语言不说了，很不错！感觉你进步很大啊！可喜可贺！加油！
4. 一点讨论：尽管你在文末提到了“机器”优过“人类思想”的担忧近期不存在，但，个人认为，既然存在这种可能性，不如在全文持一种“偏向赞成的平衡观点”，这样会显得你的论证更有理性，思维更加缜密。毕竟，1997年，“更深的蓝”是战胜了卡斯帕罗夫的。这可是一个很典型的反例哦。那场大战，不仅对棋界，而且对整个人类还是产生了比较深远的影响。虽然深究这个例子，还是有一定局限性，只是机器的“博弈性”思维在那个特殊环境下战胜了人的思想，但是，既然存在，作为论证人，应该有所考虑。个人意见，仅供参考。

[ 本帖最后由 欣馨之火 于 2007-2-13 21:59 编辑 ]