argument140 [METTLE小组]第三次作业

秋千UID: 2317735

The following appeared in a report of the committee on Faculty Promotions and Salaries at Elm City University.
"Druing her seventeen years as a professor of botany, Professor Thomas has proved herself to be well worth her annual salary of $50,000. Her casses are among the largest at the university, demonstrating her popularity among students. Moreover, the money she has brought to the university in research grants has exceeded her salary in each of the last two years. Therefore, in consideration of Professor Thomas' demonstrated teaching and research abilities, we recommened that she received a $10,000 raise and promotion to Department Chairperson; without such a raise ad promotion, we fear that Professor Thomas will leave Elm City University for another college."

在Thomas教授作为植物学教授的17年里，她证明了自己确实是值50000元年薪的。她的班级是本校最大的班级之一，这说明她在学生中间的受欢迎度。而且，她给学校带来的研究捐助在过去两年中都超过了她的年薪。因此，鉴于Thomas教授已被证实的教学和研究能力，我们建议将她的年薪增加10000元，并提升为系主任；如果没有这些加薪和提升，我们担心Thomas教授将会离开Elm City大学到别的学校就职.
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In this argument, the arguer is trying to convince us that Professor Thomas should get a salary raise and a promotion of the chairperson, due to her excellent teaching and research abilities. However, this conclusion is based on unwarranted assumptions, which render it unpersuasive as it stands.

To begin with, the arguer fails to provide enough evidence that Professor Thomas has extraordinary teaching ability. The fact that her classes are among the largest at the university cannot demonstrates her popularity, because the number of students can be decided by many factors besides the teaching technique. Perhaps Professor Thomas is the only teacher in her research area at the Elm City University, so that students interested in this subject have no choice but to take her class. Perhaps her class is undemanding, so that it is easy to pass for the students. All of these conditions may cause the large number of her class. Therefore, we cannot accept the arguer's conclusion that Professor Thomas' teaching ability is excellent.

Moreover, the arguer also cannot convince us that her research ability deserves what she would get. The amount of money in research grants has nothing to do with a teacher's salary, much less than the research ability. A research grant may be decided by the subject of research, which need to do some high-technique experiment, and requires a lot of money to be invested. Also, this sum of money should be used as only the research resource, but not to benefit the university or the teachers. Consequently, there is no effective evidence to demonstrate Professor Thomas's research ability.

In addition, even if the arguer can prove her competence in teaching and research with further evidence, it is still questionable that whether a promotion of Chairperson should be taken. As we know, a good leader requires not only splendid capabilities, but also excellent management ability. In this argument there is no clue of Professor Thomas management ability, so we believe the promotion should be discussed with further proof.

To sum up, the arguer cannot put forward enough evidence to support the conclusion that Professor Thomas has outstanding teaching and research abilities, which deserves a salary raise and promotion. To strengthen the conclusion, the arguer should bring forward more valid evidence and prove her abilities in teaching, research, and in management.

drlzUID: 2329258

In this argument, the arguer is trying to convince us that Professor Thomas should get a salary raise and a promotion of (换成to 会不会好点? promotion of sth.表示促进某事.)the chairperson, due to her excellent teaching and research abilities. However, this conclusion is based on unwarranted assumptions, which render it unpersuasive as it stands.

To begin with, the arguer fails to provide enough evidence that Professor Thomas has extraordinary teaching ability. The fact that her classes are among the largest at the university cannot demonstrates her popularity, because the number of students (加个participating in her class会不会指代更加明确点?)can be decided by many factors besides the teaching technique. Perhaps Professor Thomas is the only teacher in her research area at the Elm City University, so that students interested in this subject have no choice but to take her class. Perhaps her class is undemanding, it is easy to pass for the students. All of these conditions may cause the large number of her class. Therefore, we cannot accept the arguer's conclusion that Professor Thomas'(加个s) teaching ability is excellent.

Moreover, the arguer also cannot convince us that her research ability deserves what she would get. The amount of money in research grants has nothing to do with a teacher's salary, much less than the research ability. A research grant may be decided by the subject of research, which need(定语从句先行词为单数形式 换成needs) to do some high-technique experiment(加个s), and requires a lot of money to be invested. Also, this sum of money should be used as only the research resource, but not to benefit the university or the teachers. Consequently, there is no effective evidence to demonstrate Professor Thomas's research ability.

In addition, even if the arguer can prove her competence in teaching and research with further evidence, it is still questionable that whether a promotion of (同上)Chairperson should be taken. As we know, a good leader requires not only splendid capabilities, but also excellent management ability. In this argument there is no clue of Professor Thomas management ability, so we believe the promotion should be discussed with further proof.

To sum up, the arguer cannot put forward enough evidence to support the conclusion that Professor Thomas has outstanding teaching and research abilities, which deserves a salary raise and promotion.(再加一句可能会更能总结全文:and whether she will qualify the position as the Department Chairperson) To strengthen the conclusion, the arguer should bring forward more valid evidence and prove her abilities in teaching, research, and in (in是否也可以省去?)management.

由于我argument基本上还没有开始复习,所以也就只能和你改些语言上的错误,见谅!