生如夏花小组--第7次作业(a long-life)之小马过河

ernest81888UID: 2247639

My grandfather passed away on the summer 2005 at his 77s. Although my family feel greatly grieved on his leaving, we still think he deserved to be the person who has a long-life. In fact, this is not somehow a special case.Compared with those who lived in early ages, people has become healier and most of them are able to keep a long-life. I think this might be caused by several reasons and I will discuss as below.

Primarly, the improvement of living standard contribute to today's long-life phenomenon. It's true that we are now living in the world with both highly advanced hardware and software. Our comunities are now equiped with hosptial. That says we are accessible to see doctors when we feel uncomfortable and we are also adviced under the instruction of doctors to eat right food that is important for heart and any other healthy issues. Meanwhile, environment in our neighbours also changed greatly. We feel agreeable because of the street becomes wider and cleaner. We are able to breath fresh airs for there are more trees and flowers. These improved living condition defenitely allows us to live a longer life.

Again, exercises help us to keep physical fitness. Taking sport acitvities has now become the important thing in people's life. Parks and squares are always crowd with people who are conducting dancing ,runing or skating. What' more, Gym which provides area for swiming and area for playing bastetball is the hottest place that favored by different ages of people. Today, doing exercise appears so popular in maintaining healthy that everyone of us is willing to take part in it.

At last, a good mood comes from the peaceful world. We are no longer suffered by a war or confict between contries which allows us to live happlier. A good living mood helps us obtain a good living attitude. We are expect to live longer to enjoy the happiness time with family. We hope keep healty to travel  fantasy area that we have never been to. A peaceful world gives us these postive willings so that we spend more time on taking care of ourselves. That's really great!

In sum, the phenomenon of long-life is not as suprising as that was in early days. Since subject and object condition chages, the life of today's people will be prolonged confirmly.

[ 本帖最后由 ernest81888 于 2007-7-16 00:05 编辑 ]

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my grandpa went about a month ago, he was already 84 years old, perhaps he deserves to be the person who has long life, but i still want him to be with us some more time, our technology towards cancer is so far away from mature, damn the stupid hospital, damn the torturous welfare system ( my grandpa used to serve in military), damn the ridiculous boasting of our medicine research, i really want to share the agony with my grandpa, at least i could have accompanied him in his last
days, but now everything turns to be senseless words on the paper

portsxuUID: 2342632

My grandfather passed away on the summer 2005 at his 77s. Although my family feel greatly grieved on his leaving, we still think he deserved to be the person who has a long-life. In fact, this is not somehow a special case.Compared with those who lived in early ages, people has become healier and most of them are able to keep a long-life. I think this might be caused by several reasons and I will discuss as below.

Primarly, the improvement of living standard( the improvement of our living condition, the uplifting of our living leverl/standard) contributes to today's long-life phenomenon. It's true that we are now living in the world with both highly advanced hardware and software. Our comunities(communities,or neighborhood) are now equipedequipped with hosptialhospital. Thatit says we are accessible to see doctors(to see doctors is now available for us) when we feel uncomfortable and we are also adviced under the instruction of doctors to eat right food that is important for heart and any other healthy issues(unlike people in poor medical condition years ago, it maintains that to see doctors is
available for us now, thus we follow the prescriptions provided by doctors to abstract from the food which is harmful and unhealthy, resulting in better physical condition and longer life). Meanwhile, environment in our neighbours also changed greatly. We feel agreeable because of the street becomes wider and cleaner. We are able to breath fresh airs(air) for there are more trees and flowers. These improved living condition defenitely allows us to live a longer life.

Again, exercises help us to keep physical fitness. Taking sport acitvities has now become the important thing in people's life. Parks and squares are always crowd with people who are conducting dancing ,runing or skating. What' more, Gym which provides area for swiming and area for playing bastetball is the hottest place that favored by different ages of people. Today, doing exercise appears so popular in maintaining healthy that everyone of us is willing to take part in it.可以的话不妨加一句现在的人更加注重健康,或者把最后一句提到第一句,因为老美的逻辑和我们相反

At last, a good mood comes from the peaceful world. We are no longer suffered by a war or confict between contries which allows us to live happlier. A good living mood helps us obtain a good living attitude. We are expect to live longer to enjoy the happiness time with family. We hope keep healty to travel  fantasy area that we have never been to. A peaceful world gives us these postive willings so that we spend more time on taking care of ourselves. That's really great!

In sum, the phenomenon of long-life is not as suprising as that was in early days. Since subject and object condition chages, the life of today's people will be prolonged confirmly.


文章逻辑流畅,思路清晰,不过这次拼写错误要稍微注意下了,可能是没有认真打字的缘故,具体拉到word里面看一下吧~
除了这些,已经是一篇有自己风格的文章了~不过,这次作业似乎真的没有花很多心思做哦~~~个人意见,仅供参考....