生如夏花小组第11次作业---sljlj

sljljUID: 2229927

独立写作: (个人成功)

The expression “Never, never give up” means to keep trying and never stop working for your goals. Do you agree or disagree with this statement? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
       
Numerous factors together determine whether one can achieve success or not. Persistence does be a crucial one among them. Admittedly, the person who never give up have bigger chance to make their dreams come true. This is especially true when we speak to the athletes, who are more inclined to win if he or she persist practicing and never give up. However, I strongly disagree with this statement and I will express my argument as follows.

To begin with, in no way can goals which contract with natural rules be achieved, even though people never give up. No matter how diligent and persistent s/he is, it is simply impossible for him/her achieve these goals. For supporting examples we need look no further than the perpetual power machine. Lots of scientist tried to create such machine, and they never give up in their whole lives. Unfortunately, they all failed. Since perpetual power doesn't obey the natural rules, the goal to create it is destined to fail. In this level, we can see certain goals, if it scientifically impossible, will never be achieved even if people never give up.

What is more, in my opinion, some goals just are meaningless and do not worth persistance. When we are faced with a meaningless goal, it is better to give up, or it will be a waste of time and human resources. There is a story said a man studied to kill dragon for many years, and he even tried hard to study well. However, no dragon really exists in the world. Thus it do much better if the man give up learning to kill a dragon.

All in all, I cherish the viewpoint that before you decide to persist or give up, you would better to check whether the goal is scientifically feasible and whether it worth your efforts. "Never, never give up" is too definite.


口语:

说说最喜欢的一个room，自己家的或者是其他地方的。

Well, the best room I like is my bedroom in my home. You know, I do all the clean work myself, and it's really tide in my bedroom. Everyone enter into this room will feel very comfortable, me too. Also I like it because I can do everything I like in it. For example, I can sing aloud, and can dance if I like. No one will bother me and I won't interrupt others. It is a space of mine, with great freedom. So I like it a lot.

尝试限时了一下，觉得作文还是够呛，考虑句子结构的时间有点多了，时间不够；口语，感觉无话可说，sigh，要努力！

等会我自己先改一下，尽量在十一点前提交自己的修改版。

欠了好多次作业了，惭愧。还有，组长辛苦了。有个同学今天考，bless

bluecathyUID: 2231215

独立写作: (个人成功)
The expression “Never, never give up” means to keep trying and never stop working for your goals. Do you agree or disagree with this statement? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
        
Numerous factors together determine whether one can achieve success or not. Persistence does be a crucial one among them. Admittedly, the person who never give up have bigger(改成more，比较中文化) chance to make their dreams come true. This is especially true when we speak to the athletes, who are more inclined to win if he or she persist（s） practicing and never give up. However, I strongly disagree with this statement and I will express my argument（s） as follows.

To begin with, in no way can goals which contract with natural rules be achieved, even though people never give up(说实话，这句话我完全没看懂，你的句子英文表达不是很正). No matter how diligent and persistent s/he is, it is simply impossible for him/her achieve these goals. For supporting examples we need look no further than the perpetual power machine. Lots of scientist tried to create such machine, and they never give up in their whole lives. Unfortunately, they all failed. Since perpetual power doesn't obey the natural rules, the goal to create it is destined to fail. In this level, we can see certain goals, if it scientifically impossible, will never be achieved even if people never give up.

What is more, in my opinion, some goals just are meaningless and do not worth persistance. When we are faced with a meaningless goal, it is better to give up, or it will be a waste of time and human resources. There is a story said a man studied to kill dragon for many years, and he even tried hard to study well. However, no dragon really exists in the world. Thus it do（es） much better if the man give up learning to kill a dragon.（最后这句没看出来有什么可比性）

All in all, I cherish the viewpoint that before you decide to persist or give up, you would better to check whether the goal is scientifically feasible and whether it worth（es） your efforts. "Never, never give up" is too definite.
总结一下，作者急需把写作表达中文化这个问题解决，怎么解决，多背纯正的英文句子。毫不客气地说，从表达到思维都非常中文化。还有动词的第三人称单数大多数是没加es的，这就不是疏忽问题，而是最基本的英语语法问题啊。
文章的立意很好，结构也不错，这个确实很重要，但基本问题别忘了解决。

口语:
说说最喜欢的一个room，自己家的或者是其他地方的。
Well, the best room I like is my bedroom in my home. You know, I do all the clean work myself, and it's really tide（tidy） in my bedroom. Everyone enter into this room will feel very comfortable, me too. Also I like it because I can do everything I like in it. For example, I can sing aloud, and can dance if I like. No one will bother me and I won't interrupt others. It is a space of mine, with great freedom. So I like it a lot.
非常好！有层次，有细节，很完整！我觉得作者很适合写短句，我觉得这应该是你弥补独立写作的方向