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TOPIC: ARGUMENT38 - The following memo appeared in the newsletter of the West Meria Public Health Council.

"An innovative treatment has come to our attention that promises to significantly reduce absenteeism in our schools and workplaces. A study reports that in nearby East Meria, where fish consumption is very high, people visit the doctor only once or twice per year for the treatment of colds. Clearly, eating a substantial amount of fish can prevent colds. Since colds are the reason most frequently given for absences from school and work, we recommend the daily use of Ichthaid, a nutritional supplement derived from fish oil, as a good way to prevent colds and lower absenteeism."
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By citing the facts listed above, the arguer claims that :they recommend using lchthaid every day as a good way to prevent colds and lower absenteeism as colds are the reason most frequently given for absences from school and work.although the deduction seems reasonable at first glance , it suffers from several fallacies after close scrutiny.
First.the arguer unfairly establish a relationship  between a low visit for cold treatment for people lived in ME and a high fish consumption . there is no proof to attest fish contribute to cold preventing , it is possible that the weather in ME is usually confortable and people is difficult to catch cold in this environment ,although they like fish at the same time ,consequently , fish would not be related with cold .
Secondly .even eating lots of fish could prevent cold , the deduction that people should use lchthaid,a nutritional in fish oil ,to prevent colds is unwarrent , because argument provides no evidence that fish's preventing function borns of lchthaid , if other materials contained in fish play the role of prevention , then even people use lchthaid every day , they could not survive from cold suffering too .
Finally,simply put that eating lchthaid could also prevent people from cold , it is unreasonable to conclude that amount of people's absences could decease . from the argument we know that people usually hold cold as the reason for absences , however, how could we guranteen this reason could not be a just excuse? maybe cold is the most appropriate excuse because companies would not force people working when they are sick . in this situation ,even people could really catch less cold , they would still use this to be their excuse. if so , this recommendation could make little sense in lowing absenteeism .
In conclusion , ................................

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By citing the facts listed above, the arguer claims that :they recommend using lchthaid every day as a good way to prevent colds and lower absenteeism as colds are the reason most frequently given for absences from school and work.although the deduction seems reasonable at first glance , it suffers from several fallacies after close scrutiny.
First.the arguer unfairly establish a relationship  between a low visit for cold treatment for people lived in ME and a high fish consumption . there is no proof to attest fish contribute to cold preventing , it is possible that the weather in ME is usually comfortable and people is difficult to catch cold in this environment ,although they like fish at the same time ,consequently , fish would not be related with cold .
Secondly .even eating lots of fish could prevent cold , the deduction that people should use lchthaid,a nutritional in fish oil ,to prevent colds is unwarrent , because argument provides no evidence that fish's preventing function borns of lchthaid , if other materials contained in fish play the role of prevention , then even people use lchthaid every day , they could not survive from cold suffering too .
Finally,simply put that eating lchthaid could also prevent people from cold , it is unreasonable to conclude that amount of people's absences could decease . from the argument we know that people usually hold cold as the reason for absences , however, how could we guranteen this reason could not be a just excuse? maybe cold is the most appropriate excuse because companies would not force people working when they are sick . in this situation ,even people could really catch less cold , they would still use this to be their excuse. if so , this recommendation could make little sense in lowing absenteeism .
In conclusion , ................................

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