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发表于 2008-3-25 07:37:48 |只看该作者 |倒序浏览
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1)鹿减少主要原因不是气候变暖,也许很大因素是猎人过渡捕猎或者食物缺乏。
2)得出鹿数量减少的结论是由猎人提出,这个结论缺乏依据。
3)全球气候变暖,没有证据表明此地所受影响有多大



The argument supports that the decline of the deer population in Canada is especially due to the warming trends which check the deer's regular moving between islands for fodder. For this evidence we find that three conspicuous defects in its logical reasoning emerge.


First of all, the arguer refers that hunters report that the deer populations are declining. But the reason is mostly contributed to the hunters themselves. Maybe in Canada, many people prefer hunting to other activities and more and more deer are killed by them. Besides, the damage of environment where deer live in may cause the decline of food for the deer. So deer may be dying because lack of food. Since the article’s author lacks the convincing evidences to justify the truth that the main reason of declining of deer is due to the warming truth.

Second, the article shows that the fact of declining of deer is based on the hunters’ reports. Maybe the mass deer live in some islands that hunters could not reach there easily. Furthermore, the warming trends make there beneficial for the growth of plants and deer have enough food in case that they have no need to travel. So they conclude the wrong conclusion about the number of deer is declining.

Finally, the author curtly concludes that the weather of the area is also getting warmer than before. Though we can see the global warming trends, the arguer cannot provide enough evidences about the weather trends of this area. It is possible that the weather of this area is getting cooler or being unchangeable. Moreover, the warming trends may influent smoothly, not all the ice could not froze to cover the sea. Lacking evidence that warming trends influence this area, the argument is indefensible.

In conclusion, the argument is logically flawed and therefore unconvincing as it stands. We can not receive enough information and evidence about the declining of deer population and the reason of it. To strengthen the argument, the author must provide more convincing evidence comparing the poor conclusion based on unjustified hunter’s reports and the irrelevant relation between the deer declining and warming trends causing.

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The argument supports that the decline of the deer population in Canada is especially due to the warming trends which check(阻止? )the deer's regular moving between islands for fodder. For this evidence we find that three conspicuous defects in its logical reasoning emerge.

First of all, the arguer refers that hunters (hunters')report that the deer populations are declining. But the reason is mostly contributed to the hunters themselves. Maybe in Canada, many people prefer hunting to other activities(?) and more and more deer are killed by them. Besides, the damage of environment(environmental damage of habitat) where deer live in(去掉in   may cause the decline of food for the deer. So deer may be dying(die 不能用进行时吧) because lack of food. Since the article’s author(article 或argtment,人不能缺少,只能没提供) lacks the convincing evidences to justify the truth that the main reason of declining of deer is due to the warming truth.(since 后面少了后半句吧)


Second, the article shows that the fact of declining of deer is based on the hunters’ reports. Maybe the mass deer live in some islands that hunters could not reach there easily. Furthermore, the warming trends make there beneficial for the growth of plants and deer have enough food in case that they have no need to travel. So they conclude the wrong conclusion about the number of deer is declining.

Finally, the author curtly concludes that the weather of the area is also getting warmer than before. Though we can see the global warming trends, the arguer cannot provide enough evidences about the weather trends of this area. It is possible that the weather of this area is getting cooler or being unchangeable. Moreover, the warming trends may influent smoothly, not all the ice could not froze to cover the sea.(是说不至于导致这样的结果吗?句子不太通顺啊) Lacking evidence that warming trends influence this area, the argument is indefensible.

In conclusion, the argument is logically flawed and therefore unconvincing as it stands. We can not receive enough information and evidence about the declining(declination) of deer population and the reason of it. To strengthen the argument, the author must provide more convincing evidence comparing the poor conclusion based on unjustified hunter’s reports and the irrelevant relation between the deer declining and warming trends causing.


总体感觉通顺,若将第二三点调换更好,前者已经说了global warming 成立,后面又怀疑。

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