IMPULSE作文小组----学习和教育类---saintj---周三作业

saintjUID: 2248994

Which is more important, effort or achievement? Different people have different viewpoints. As far as I am concerned, reward is an encouragement, and every student should have it. Not everyone can get good grades, but all of them can make effort, thus, effort is more important.

First of all, it is unfair for us to use the achievements as the criteria, because not all the students are in the same level. Not all the students are good at study; some of them may have difficulty in study. As a result, they may not achieve the same goal. For example, it is evidently impossible for a student who is poor in Math to get the same high grade with the student who is quite good at Math. If we award students only for their grades, students studying poor will never have the chance to get it, and they will lose their confidence in study.

On the other hand, good grades often give students stress, and reward is no more encouragement. For the students who are poor in study, achieving good grades is almost impossible, and of course, they will have no chance to get a reward, the way to be encouraged. Therefore, they will be tired of study, and hold a pessimistic attitude. For the good-study students, they will be nervous about their test and study, they will lose the pleasure of study. Thus, study will become a burden for them, which is harmful for the students.

However, if we award students for their effort, they may gain confidence and pleasure in study. Each time they make progress, they will receive a reward, this will give them the confidence in study, and they will become optimistic about themselves, their study as well. In addition, it is an easy and fair way to get encouragement, because everyone has the opportunity to make effort.

To sum up, the goal to get good grades often make the students nervous, and it seems to be a burden to them. Nonetheless, students will gain confidence in study and themselves if they are awarded when they make efforts. Thus, it is more important.

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First of all, it is unfair for us to use the achievements as the criteria, because not all the students are in the same level. Not all the students are good at study; some of them may have difficulty in study. As a result, they may not achieve the same goal. For example, it is evidently impossible for a student who is poor in Math to get the same high grade with the student who is quite good at Math. If we award students only for their grades, students studying poor will never have the chance to get it, and they will lose their confidence in study.rQc
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On the other hand, good grades often give students stress, and reward is no more encouragement. For the students who are poor in study, achieving good grades is almost impossible, and of course, they will have no chance to get a reward, the way to be encouraged. (似感重复)Therefore, they will be tired of study, and hold a pessimistic attitude. For the good-study students, they will be nervous about their test and study, they will lose the pleasure of study. Thus, study will become a burden for them, which is harmful for the students.

However, if we award students for their effort, they may gain confidence and pleasure in study. Each time they make progress, they will receive a reward, this will give them the confidence in study, and they will become optimistic about themselves, their study as well. In addition, it is an easy and fair way to get encouragement, because everyone has the opportunity to make effort.

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To sum up, the goal to get good grades often makes the students nervous, and it seems to be a burden to them. Nonetheless, students will gain confidence in study and themselves if they are awarded when they make efforts. Thus, it is more important

双手的温柔UID: 173110

我觉得lz的文字还是不错的，但这篇文章感觉思路有点奇怪的说。主要讨论下思路好了：）
lz的standing point是每个人都该受到鼓励，这个我比较不明白。它作为一个point并不是一个common sense，你在开篇提出来之后最好稍微解释下。为什么每个人都应该有encouragement。

第一个point。我觉得说过为什么用achievement作标准是unfair的原因是different level之后，再多加句后果。It may discourage the lower level students to continue putting effort on it. 然后例子里面可以稍微换下说法。一个本身math不好的人，他也会希望得到鼓励，事实上可能更需要鼓励。但是因为结果是标准，他就得不到鼓励。得不到鼓励就会不confident。

第二个point，good grades 不会给人stress，应该是the demand to get good grades会给stress。然后因为你的standing point是每个人都deserve encouragement，最好把后面写的好处提前，也就是为啥每个人都要被reward。放到第一句之后先说。然后再开始举例。

第三个point我木有什么意见^^

觉得你上一篇写的很流畅，很好，这一篇感觉是没有好好组织自己的观点。仔细想清楚再动笔就肯定没问题的，加油！