IMPULSE小组 周四作业——雪羽酒 报纸新闻与电视 会回拍哦~

雪羽酒UID: 2515193

这次50分钟。。。:o

Agree or disagree, Newspapers can truly help people understand world events. Televison news doesn’t provide enough information.

When the television technology was applied into practice, the newspaper market got into an anxiety period, worrying to lose the shares in the media market that should have been theirs. However, before long, they found their role in the competition - helping people understand the world better. In other words, I agree with the standpoint presented above.

Basically speaking, television news broadcasting has a big limitation of time, which lead to a limited news radium. They have to manage every minute even every second for different use. A fully prepared news programme may be cut off by half by the editor only because there should be a talk show after that. While newspapers reporters can extent what they want to say as detailed as they want, within the fundamental principles established. What's more, there can be a larger number of news presented in newspapers. There could be essays, comments on a big issue,or a interview to the people on focus. If they desire, the editor can give a point news two to three sections long. So that's the newspaper's first role: convey detailed information people couldn't know from the television, here, the television act as a medium to raise people's interest in new events.

Furthermore, this advantage of newspapers as I mentioned above give this medium a deeper exploration in focus than television. Taking the big shocking news about LiuXiang as an example. After Liu quitted his participant right, television news programme immediately declared it to the mass, with no more than the massage itself. However, the newspaper journalists have more time to express  the event since the publishing time is the midnight of that day. They wrote down the explanations from Liu's coach SunHaiping, and also described the reflection of the spectaculars and some moving backgrounds that the mass hardly knew. Why did he decide to quit this event, and what sorrow had he experienced in the way trying to insist on? Could he anticipate other competitions after Olympics? That's what people concerns about after hearing the news itself. Televisions just act as a conveyancer to raise public attention.

It is the newspapers’ role in the media market and its responsibility for producing profound news in wide range makes me uphold the opinion that it can truly help people understand world events better.

[ 本帖最后由 雪羽酒 于 2008-8-21 13:39 编辑 ]

雪羽酒UID: 2515193

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meaninghanUID: 2512532

When the television technology was applied into practice, the newspaper market got into an anxiety （anxious) period, worrying (about being) to lose the shares in the media market that should have been theirs. However, before long, they found their role in the competition -(正式文中可以用“-”符号？）（that is） helping people understand the world better. In other words, I agree with the standpoint （what standpoint?最好点出来)presented above.

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Basically speaking, television news broadcasting has a big limitation of time, which lead to a limited news radium. They have to manage every minute even every second for different use. A fully prepared news programme may be cut off by half by the editor only because there should be a talk show after that. While newspapers reporters can extent what they want to say as detailed as they want, within （？不懂，为何要用这个词）the fundamental principles established. What's more, there can be a larger number of news presented in newspapers. There could be essays, comments on a big issue,or a interview to the people on focus（ to provide readers know information from various perspectives in order to let people know more details and achieve the truth closer) . If they desire, the editor can give a point news two to three sections long. So that's the newspaper's first role: convey detailed information people couldn't know from the television, here, the television act as a medium to raise people's interest in new events.

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Furthermore, this advantage of newspapers as I mentioned above give this medium a deeper exploration in focus than television does. Taking the big shocking news about LiuXiang as an example. After Liu quitted his participant right in race, television news programme immediately declared it to the mass, with no more than the massage itself. However, the newspaper journalists have more time to express  the event since the publishing time is the midnight of that day. They wrote down the explanations from Liu's coach SunHaiping, and also described the reflection of the spectaculars and some moving backgrounds that the mass hardly knew. Why did he decide to quit this event, and what sorrow had he experienced in the way trying to insist on? Could he anticipate other competitions after Olympics? That's what people concerns about after hearing the news itself. Televisions just act as a conveyancer to raise public attention.

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It is the newspapers’ role in the media market and its responsibility for producing（digging out) profound news in wide range makes me uphold the opinion that it can truly help people understand world events better.

论证有力

提出一个问题，lz找了一个论据来论证你的观点，第二段特地找了个例子来证明。整篇文章就只用了一个论点，这样可以达到作文的要求？？？希望有正解， 谢谢。

雪羽酒UID: 2515193

因为见OG上那篇5分的范文也只有一个论点，所以我当时写的时候就觉得问题不大了。

其实是两个小论点：更广的新闻面，和更深入的报道。但是可能写的不是很明确。。。

baojaneUID: 2472739

依我来看，你的文章结构：

1 提出观点：help understand the world better

2 分论点1）电视因为时间限制，不能很好的说明观点和问题；报纸信息量大，观点多。

3 分论点2）电视只有时效性，而报纸可以更深入的报道。例子：刘翔

4 总结

建议：

             分论点1中，希望能够对比强调，最好能用上你在第三段结尾用的列举的方法。如此论述就增强了。

             分论点2，我觉得并不能说服读者，就我来看，电视难道不能去采访刘翔教练，采访相关人员么？所以理论的时候要分析全面。这里最好的方法是用although~~~,~~的句型，正反都说，但是着重强调自己的观点。

             一般来讲，在写ETS的作文时，要在段首就提出观点，而不是一直讲啊讲，拖到段末才so,提出观点。这样是中国人的写法，ETS不喜欢（XDF说的，有证。）

             在遣词造句方面，长句是发展变化的，不能为了写长，而过分纠结，这样不利于读者的阅读。

             除上述外，你的文章结构啦什么的都很完整了，才刚开始写，不用急，可以多看看牛人的文章，看看别人是怎么写的。

            加油吧！