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可能是我电脑的问题，我没法在你的作文下面回复，所以单独发个贴先。
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What seems to be a tragedy for modern people is that we’re facing a rapidly changed world, and however hard we strived to keep up the pace with it, we’re still on the losing side without even accomplish a single aspect of our tasks这地方没读懂，without是不是想说in spite of？. But, does this sound like a plausible reason for us to give up? Definitely Not.|留学|签证|TOEFL|GRE"u
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Human possesses wisdom that none--no other species could compare--exceed好一点. Hence we can choose which work to be tackled first according to our interest and future orientation. This world is no longer the one Socrate and Aristotle knew. It’s impossible for us to understand everything about it. People become specialized into different aspects of life and we just need to learn the expertise involved in our job thus earn daily bread and contribute to the society as well. Therefore we have profound figures such as the father of relativity—Einstein, who chose science as his life and gave up his job as an officer in government administration. 4o:Z6a(D0Z)i i
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The spare time is left for other activities that may also significantly contribute to your life amelioration and self-improvement. Despite your job, there are a whole lot more to do. Einstein played violin when he’s having a rest, while another profound scientist, Yuan Longping shared the same habit. Their techniques were no inferior to their scientific achievements. Thomas Jefferson would rather be remembered by the descendants for his establishing University of Virginia rather than his presidency. It might be hard to change our profession, but we should never be limited by it.

We have to concede that many tasks are not set by others, but by ourselves. The competitions around us make us believe the more expertise we possess, the more possibility we could reach the ultimate victory. Ever since childhood, people around us keep instilling us we should communicate with others well in order to gain cooperation and repute. Also we should dress neatly and act confidently before formal situation to leave good impression to others. But Einstein never learnt to communicate to others, while President Lincoln never dressed and acted like an ideal leader. Sometimes, giving up is the best way to attain.

You’re never required to be as elite in every discipline, you’re never assumed to be a perfect man. What you got to do with the mass works is to pick up the one you have the most confidence in rather than slightly taste on every of them, in this way you can free yourself from this tragedy, finally finish something, and gain success through it.
语言没的说，挑不出什么毛病，功底很好啊，值得学习。
但是，我觉得你的观点有点偏于题目，你的观点是;  事情多的时候，也不要都浅尝辄止，挑些你有自信做好的事情去做。你并没有同意或不同意题目的大是大非：1.事情多了是会导致人什么都干不好 or  事情多了并不会导致什么都干不好。希望我表达清楚了，lz考虑一下。

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嗯嗯……跑题跑得有点太远了，写得太随心所欲了，下次一定得注意……要把重点放到事情太多到底会不会导致成就的减少上