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sun,wind water will be soon replace fossil fuels

Many people think that fossil fuel can play a big part in a long time, whereas others consider that oil or gas will not be available in the near future and we should seeking for other forms of energy resource. In my point of view, solar, wind or water energy will be more likely to replace the traditional fossil fuel to dominate the energy supplement due to the advantage of reutilization, economic value and environmental friendly.

First of all, the solar wind and water energy are something called renewable energy source. That means there is no limitation of the location or amount. Compared to the fossil fuel which was formed by the body of ancient animals and plants, renewable sources are total natural. As we all know, the storage of fossil fuel became diminution because of the constantly growth of demand. According to research by National energy committee, the oil storage has decreased from 60% to 40% in the past 50 year. So it is reasonable for us to imagine that they will be extinct in the near future. But the solar or wind energy will never meet such kind of problem.

Additional, the renewable source is cheaper. Now the hottest issue in the world is the raising of petroleum. In the several years before, the prize oil is $80 per pail. Things change dramatically; the prize had risen to $120 recently. We could no longer pay the bill for this energy using. However, the solar or wind source are cheaper .After installing the instruments, we do not have to pay any money at all unless there are not sunshine and wind blowing. Thus we could save a huge amount of money.

Moreover, the renewable source is cleaner. That prevents the pollution which was formed by the burning of fossil fuel. The global warming gas CO2 will be efficiently reduced by the replacement of solar or water energy. Followed by such priority measure, we can live a even better life on the earth.

In conclusion, the sun, wind water fuel will be soon replacing fossil fuels. Not only for the economic value ,but also for the constantly development of human beings. That will be a better place for us to live without the limited, high-paid and dirty smoke produced by oil or gas.

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Many people think that fossil fuel can play a big part infor a long time, whereas others consider that oil or gas will not be available in the near future and we should seeking for other forms of energy resource. In my point of view, solar, wind or water energy will be more likely to replace the traditional fossil fuel to dominate the energy supplement due to the advantage of reutilization, economic value andenvironmental friendly应该选个名词吧.|留学|签证|TOEFL|GREZ8CQzN$d"?
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First of all, the solar wind and water energy are something called renewable energy source. That means there is no limitation of the location or amount. Compared to the fossil fuel which was formed by the body of ancient animals and plants, renewable sources are totally natural. As we all know, the storage of fossil fuel became diminution because of the constantly growth of demand. According to research by National energy committee, the oil storage has decreased from 60% to 40% in the past 50 year. So it is reasonable for us to imagine that they will be extinct in the near future. But the solar or wind energy will never meet such kind of problem.这一段主题不是说新能源嘛.lz最后又扯到能源不足上了，这个例detail有点牵强的感觉
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Additional, the renewable source is cheaper. Now the hottest issue in the world is the raising of petroleum. In the several years before, the prize oil is $80 per pail. Things change dramatically; the prize had risen to $120 recently. We could no longer pay the bill for this energy using. However, the solar or wind source are cheaper .After installing the instruments, we do not have to pay any money at all unless there are not sunshine and wind blowing. Thus we could save a huge amount of money.句式有些单薄
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Moreover, the renewable source is cleaner. That prevents the pollution which was formed by the burning of fossil fuel. The global warming gas CO2 will be efficiently reduced by the replacement of solar or water energy. Followed by such priority measure, we can live a even better life on the earth.
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In conclusion, the sun, wind water fuel will be soon replacing fossil fuels. Not only for the economic value ,but also for the constantly development （sustainable development）of human beings. That will be a better place for us to live without the limited, high-paid and dirty smoke produced by oil or gas.

总体感觉结构还是完整的，每段也有topic但是感觉阐释的还是不详细，句子中还有些用词和语法的问题
和楼主一起加油。。。

qawsedUID: 2359935

Many people think that fossil fuel can play a big part in a long time, whereas others consider that oil or gas will not be available in the near future and we should seeking for other forms of energy resource. In my point of view, solar, wind or water energy will be more likely to replace the traditional fossil fuel to dominate the energy supplement due to the advantage of reutilization, economic value and environmental friendly.

First of all, the solar wind and water energy are something called renewable energy source. That means there is no limitation of the location or amount. (这句不错！)Compared to the fossil fuel which was formed by the body of ancient animals and plants, renewable sources are totally natural. As we all know, the storage of fossil fuel became diminution(这个词是名词，改成reduced或者decreased吧) because of the constantly growth of demand. According to research by National energy committee, the oil storage has decreased from 60% to 40% in the past 50 year. So it is reasonable for us to imagine that they will be extinct in the near future. But the solar or wind energy will never meet such kind of（口语化了，可以不要 ）problem.（这地方正面论证有点少，再说几句吧，可以举个例子，说这个新能源是如何再利用的）
为了与后面两段的主题句成对应，建议这段也用个比较级式的主题句，如：the renewable source is  reproducible.

Additional, the renewable source is cheaper. Now the hottest issue in the world is the raising of petroleum. In the several years before, the prize oil is $80 per pail. Things change dramatically; the prize had risen to $120 recently. We could no longer pay the bill for this energy using. However, the solar or wind source are cheaper .After installing the instruments, we do not have to pay any money at all unless there are not sunshine and wind blowing. Thus we could save a huge amount of money.

Moreover, the renewable source is cleaner. That prevents the pollution which was formed by the burning of fossil fuel. The global warming gas CO2 (carbon dioxide) will be efficiently reduced by the replacement of solar or water energy. Followed by such priority measure, we can live a even better life on the earth.

In conclusion, the sun, wind water fuel will be soon replacing fossil fuels. Not only for the economic value ,but also for the constantly development of human beings. That will be a better place for us to live without the limited, high-paid and dirty smoke produced by oil or gas.

文章不错嘛，继续加油哦！