COMMOEN作文小组——claierh0323 9.4作业

claierh0323UID: 2375722

汽车减少问题

In the past century, cars were the dominate traffic tools in our daily lives. It seemed that we could not live without cars. However, in my point of view, this era will end in the near future. The utilization of cars will decrease because of the raise of petroleum, the people's awareness of environmental friendly and the rapid development of technology.

For one thing, the growth of the oil's price will be a big obstacle for the raising demand of cars. According to a famous car company, their car’ sales and production dropped by about 40% when the price of petroleum raised about 30%.Fewer people can afford the car’ consuming which will become a big part in the percentage of their income. People in my country tend to take bicycles or other public transportation instead of the high-paid cars. So if the price of oil keep raising, I have reason to believe that the use of car will keep decreasing even extinct.

In addition, the use of car can also be a source of pollution to the environment. The waste smoke released by car plays a big role in causing the Global Warming. The crowded road occupied the garden where plants used to be and thus the less the plants are, the more the global house gas is released. What a horrible vicious cycle. So in the near future, people may pay more attention to protect their environment because the trend to be aware of that we have only one earth by replacing the car by some other traffic tools.

Last but not least, with the development of technology and science, we are willing to have something more economic and swift such as small flying engine which can take you everywhere without waiting for the red light or some magic ships floating in the air. All these imaginations may come true and thus we do not need cars any longer.

In conclusion, cars may be used for some time but they will finally be a past memory and faded away in the human history. There are not only objective factors but also subjective factor. The price of oil, the awareness and the technology can all be considered as reasons. So I believe the utilization of car will decrease.

yuanhu124UID: 2444317

整体的结构不错，过渡也挺好。不过，可能需要在细节上多注意一些。Keep fighting!

In the past century, cars were the dominate traffic tools in our daily lives. It seemed that we could not live without cars. However, in my point of view, this era will end in the near future. The utilization of cars will decrease because of the raise of petroleum（感觉这样还不足以表示出石油价格的上涨，可能还是需要加上price吧）, the（去掉the，the people是指“人民”，而且这里也没必要用the） people's awareness of environmental friendly（这样也应该不合适，friendly是形容词啊，建议改成protection） and the rapid development of technology.

For one thing, the growth of the oil's price will be a big obstacle for the raising demand of cars. According to a famous car company, their car’ sales and production dropped by about 40% when the price of petroleum raised about 30%. Fewer（去掉比较级，就用few就行） people can afford the car’ consuming（consumption） which will become a big part in the percentage of their income（我感觉这样说就比较中式英语了，没有必要用percentage，而且也应该用outgo，而不是income）. People in my country tend to take bicycles or other public transportation instead of the high-paid cars. So if the price of oil keep raising, I have reason to believe that the use of car will keep decreasing even extinct.

In addition, the use of car can also be a source of pollution to the environment. The waste smoke released by car plays a big（发现你比较爱用big，其实应该尽量减少用这种含义宽泛的小词，你可以用huge, large, immense, giant, enormous….当然，要看具体的程度） role in causing the Global Warming. The crowded road occupied the garden where plants used to be and thus the less the plants are, the more the global house gas is released.（这句话有些没读明白，而且我感觉逻辑也有些说不清楚，你再顺一顺） What a horrible vicious cycle. So in the near future, people may pay more attention to protect their（the） environment because （加一个of）the trend to be aware of that we have（there is，这样比较客观） only one earth by replacing the car by some other traffic tools.（我感觉这半句有些多余，而且读起来也拗口）
Last but not least, with the development of technology and science, we are willing to have something more economic and swift such as small flying engine which can take you everywhere without waiting for the red light or some magic ships floating in the air. All these imaginations may come true and thus we do not need cars any longer.（呵呵，这一段比较有想象力！）

In conclusion, cars may be used for some time but they will finally be a past memory and faded away in the human history. There are not only objective factors but also subjective factor. The price of oil, the awareness and the technology can all be considered as reasons. So I believe the utilization of car will decrease.