COMEON作文小组9.7号作业――Yangkeli22

yangkeli22UID: 2360405

In our daily life, amounts of advertisements which come from television, post, brouches etc. pour into your eyes, ears, make you hiding nowhere. Though, persoanlly, I do not like advertisement, I can not confess the fact that advertisements have their advantages to attract people. In this situation, some people may argue that advertisements is a waste of a company's money and time ,for consumer have known what they want to buy while others hold the opinion that advertisement lead people to buy the products. As for me, I can't agree with the latter statement any more.
First, advertiser use colloquial words in the advertisements which make it easyier to remember and say, this, to some extent, lead consumer buy the products the company advertised unconciously. For example, the company advertise a kind of product people have to use in their daily life like soap, its name made people easier to remember. At this time, you can hear this products advertisement everywhere. Without doubt, it deeply planted in your heart and the next time when you want to buy the soap, the advertisements' product will naturally bump into your head and you finally will buy that. Therefore, consumer only know what kind of thing they want to buy but not know which brand exactly, in this way, the advertisement play an important role in leading people to buy.
Second, advertiser know how to attract consumers to buy their products. The formally attractive sign is "for sale", undoubtly, this sign will draw many people's eyes and the selling will sum up in some way. Though they may consider the advertisements' function, if the price worth it, they will turn their former brand into this one which has been advertised.
        From the reasons given above, I can safely draw a conclusion that advertisement is not a waste of company's money and time even if consumers have known what they want to buy. Or the advertisement will not developed so well nowadays if advertise plays no role in people's daily life.

[ 本帖最后由 yangkeli22 于 2008-9-8 22:16 编辑 ]

rougefishUID: 2321640

In our daily life, amounts of advertisements which come from television, post（应该是poster吧）, brouches （不知道是什么，请问是想说？）etc. pour into your eyes, ears, make you hiding nowhere. Though, persoanlly(拼写错误personally), I do not like advertisement, I （I 可以不要吧，直接用but是否更好）can not confess （从本段最后一句看，你是disagree这个命题的，这里是否应该用deny）the fact  that advertisements have their advantages to attract people. In this situation, （你前面说的situation是说自己的情况，后面是说普遍存在的两个观点，好像不太衔接）some people may argue that advertisements is a waste of a company's money and time ,（逗号不要也行吧）for consumer have known what they want to buy，（是否应该断开一下） while others hold the opinion that advertisement lead people to buy the products（这句换到前面第二句去是否好一些）. As for me, I can't agree with the latter statement any more.

First, advertiser use colloquial words in the advertisements which make it easyier（拼写错误） to remember and say, this, to some extent, lead consumer buy the products the company advertised（advertised products 是否就可以了） unconciously(拼写错误unconsciously). For example, the company advertise a kind of product people have to use in their daily life like soap, its name made people easier to remember. At this time, you can hear this products advertisement everywhere. Without doubt, (With endlessly repeated,) it （might，否则感觉太绝对了）deeply planted in your heart.(可以断开吧，否则感觉不太清楚)And the next time when you want to buy the soap, the advertisements' product will naturally bump into your head and you finally will buy that. Therefore, consumer only know what kind of thing they want to buy （可不要）but not know which brand exactly（还是有点绝对）, in this way, the advertisement play an important role in leading people to buy （可不要）.bbs.gter.net!vp

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Second, advertiser know how to attract consumers to buy their products. The formally attractive sign is "for sale（on sale？）", undoubtly（拼写错误undoubtedly）, this sign will draw many people's eyes and the selling will sum up in some way. Though (让步前后能深化主题更好) they may consider the advertisements' function, if the price worth it, they will （还是有点绝对）turn their former brand into this one which has been advertised.
     
From the reasons given above, I can safely draw a conclusion that advertisement is not a waste of company's money and time even if consumers have known what they want to buy. Or the advertisement will not (LZ是想说has not been吧) developed so well nowadays if advertise plays no role in people's daily life.


Lz用了不少不错的词组，但是怎样布局，思路上可能还需整理。一点拙见，请别介意。

yangkeli22UID: 2360405

谢谢rougefish 的认真更改，上面确实是poster,brochure，还有应该是I can not conceal the fact that...写忘记了，惭愧啊！
布局上确实是还要整理，感觉时间比较紧，没安排好，下次注意！