COMEON作文小组9.15作业－yangkeli22

yangkeli22UID: 2360405

Due to the print, the knowledge increased dramatically. The accumulated knowledge added to libraries which in its turn made a great contribution to human being's progress. It is not exaggerate to say that any achievement human made were based on the knowledge they learned from the print. Be that as it may, nowadays an assumption mentioned that the printed book would be disappeared in two decades. Some people may approved(approve) this view while others may not agree with the assumption. To me, I support the latter opinion.
First, from the populace aspect, the book is much cheaper than other kinds of electrocal(electrical) products. Cost of making a book is much cheaper than making an electrical product. Therefore, many poor countries where have not be able to afford the cost will absolutely prefer the print book. Even though the technology and science will pervade every aspect of man's life in two decades, some countries still not are able to get rid of the shadow of poverty. In this way, the print is much better than other things.
Second, from the health aspect, the print book does no harm to human beings, while the electrical products will affect people's health. For instance, computer's radiation affects people's body condition, its screen harm people's eyes and necks. And when the PC was broken, it was hard to deal with those electrical trashes for the simple reason that they will contaminate the environment, which indirect harm people's living condition. While, if you hold a book reading, you don't need to consider those potential harms, you just read whenever you want, wherever you want, whatever you like.
As the reality and so many advantages by using print book, I am easily come to a conclusion that however the science may change, the print books will never disappear, not to speak of two decades.

经过大概半小时的修改，发现了不少语法上的错误，汗! 看来语法句法还有待加强啊！

chineseladyUID: 2403976

Due to the print, the knowledge has been increased 我觉得用完成时更好吧dramatically. The accumulated knowledge added to libraries which in its turn made a great contribution to human being's progress. It is not exaggerate动词并列了exaggeration to say that any achievement human made were based on the knowledge they learned from the print. Be that as it may, nowadays an assumption mentioned that the printed book would be disappeared in two decades. Some people may approved(approve) this view while others may not agree with the assumption. To me, I support the latter opinion.|留学|签证|TOEFL|GRE*}4Gr3ee}First, from the populace aspect, the book is much cheaper than other kinds of electrocal(electrical) products. Cost of making a book is much cheaper than making an electrical product. 这两句有并列的感觉，意思好象重复Therefore, many poor countries where have not be able to afford the cost will absolutely prefer the print book.(主语有点长吧有点头重脚轻的感觉，可以调换一下，without enough expense to develop electric products, many developing countries will absolutely prefer to print books,). Even though the technology and science will pervade every aspect of man's life in two decades, some countries still not are (are not) able to get rid of the shadow of poverty. In this way, the print is much better than other things.Second, from the health aspect, the print book does no harm to human beings, while the electrical products will affect people's health. For instance, computer's radiation affects people's body condition, its screen harm people's eyes and necks. And when the PC was broken (does work)broken 有破坏的意思 比如电脑被人砸了, it was hard to deal with those（electrical trashes）不好意思没明白for the simple reason that they will contaminate the environment, which indirect harm people's living condition. While, if you hold a book (to read) reading, you don't need to consider those potential harms, you just read whenever you want, wherever you want, whatever you like.|留学|签证|TOEFL|GRE/i0`1^5dqMnAs the reality and so many advantages by using print book, I am easily come 两个动词了（I am easily to make the conclusion）to a conclusion that however the science may change, the print books will never disappear, not to speak of two decades.

改的不好请多关照！希望大家共同进步！中间段落的论据很好都说到点子上了。

yangkeli22UID: 2360405

感谢chineselady的修改，改的挺认真的，谢谢提出的意见！:handshake
现在我的论述一个问题就是论点和后面的举例老有重复的地方，这样可能太啰嗦了，而且论证也不全面。
electrical trashes 我是想说电子垃圾，不知道这样的说法对不对，见笑了！