COMEON作文小组——jiwasun2008 10月26日作业

jiwasunUID: 2425569

Agree or disagree: university students should be required to take basic science classes even they are not part of the field of the study.

With the progress of modern education rises a debate whether university students are required to learn fundamental science classes even they are not related much to the field of the study. Many people believe not. Because students' spirits may not be focus on the project well. However, to my knowledge, those who take more basic science classes will enjoy more benefits. Generally speaking, the students will enjoy the advantages from the fundamental science lessons, such as knowledge, rest, common topic. My side populates well in the following aspects.

The point of top importance for my preference focus on the knowledge range. Instead of the depth of one subject , it is the range of knowledge that substantially stimulates one to success. Recently, a survey by the Today showed that nearly eighty percent granted that basic science education plays an indispensable role in our lives; moreover, through fundamental science classes greatly extended the knowledge of range, which enables us to climb the ladder of success. At the same time, over ninety-three percent acknowledged that a man without a wide range of knowledge, an increasing number of people believe, is an unfortunate victim of the adverse circumstance, deprived one of the greatest opportunities nowadays. So, it is a brilliant extent of knowledge that is essential in the our trip to the success, even in our daily lives. Of course, the fundamental science class is a necessity.

With the first point stands the second point demonstrates that basic science lessons' learning could emerge rest. If student always wonks on the project where his/her field is over and over, and even do nor have a day to take relaxation, it would be rather boring. Obviously, how low the efficiency will be. However, if one takes a lesson which is not related much to the project field, it will be a another kind of break. Then, one will have more energy to study the project of his/her field. Eventually, the field learning can be finished better.

Impressive as the above points are, the third are enjoying the same value, stating that common topic can come from fundamental science classes. It is of significance for common topics in the communication with others. When talking, common topic is essential. If not, the people in the conversation can be rather uneasy, apparently the talk can not be long. What's worse, no talk sometimes leads to no friend. It would be a disaster.

So far, as i see it, students are required to take basic science classes has given birth to positive impact far beyond our imagination.

devilkinelevenUID: 2442869

With the progress of modern education rises a debate whether university students are required to learn fundamental science classes even they are not related much to the field of the study. Many people believe not.(,) Because (because) students' spirits may not be focus on the project well. However, to my knowledge, those who take more basic science classes will enjoy more benefits. Generally speaking, the students will enjoy the advantages from the fundamental science lessons, such as knowledge, rest, common topic. My side populates well in the following aspects.&j h6[


The point of top importance for my preference ( I like this phrase.) focus(es) on the knowledge range. Instead of the depth of one subject , it is the range of knowledge that substantially stimulates one to success. Recently, a survey by the Today showed that nearly eighty percent granted that basic science education plays an indispensable role in our lives; moreover, through fundamental science classes greatly extended the knowledge of range, which enables us to climb the ladder of success. At the same time, over ninety-three percent acknowledged that a man without a wide range of knowledge, an increasing number of people believe,(For what does this clause appears here? It makes the whole sentence awkward. Cross it out.) is an unfortunate victim of the adverse circumstance, deprived one(‘one’ is not needed. Delete it) of the greatest opportunities nowadays. So, it is a brilliant extent of knowledge that is essential in the our trip to the success, even in our daily lives. Of course, the fundamental science class is a necessity.

With the first point stands the second point( The beginning of the second point is also phrased in a attractive way.)demonstrates(Cross it out. ‘stand’ is the verb for the whole sentence, you cannot have two predicates in one sentence.)that basic science lessons' learning could emerge rest. If student always wonks on the project where his/her field is over and over, and even do nor have a day to take relaxation, it would be rather boring. Obviously, how low the efficiency will be. However, if one takes a lesson which is not related much to the project field, it will be a another kind of break. Then, one will have more energy to study the project of his/her field. Eventually, the field learning(I don’t know how to correct it. But field learning? It doesn’t sound normal. Perhaps “the field on which they are focusing’?)can be finished better.

Impressive as the above points are, the third are enjoying the same value, stating that common topic can come from fundamental science classes. It is of significance for common topics in the communication with others. When talking, common topic is essential. If not, the people in the conversation can be rather uneasy, apparently the talk can not be long. What's worse, no talk sometimes leads to no friend. It would be a disaster. ( This point is very brilliant. I wouldn’t have come across this idea had I not read your compostion.)So far, as i see it, students are required to take basic science classes has given birth to positive impact far beyond our imagination. (Again two predicates appear in the same sentence at the same time. It is not allowed grammatically. Why not just break the sentence down into two simpler ones?)

Viewpoint is clear with sound supporting reasons. I am most impressed by the ability to think of three distinct reasons, none of which are overlapping with others. This displays an active mind. Besides, the beginning of each paragraph contains some shining dictions, phrases. I like them.