argument29 求拍

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A.29
提纲：
1、别的市长的方法可行，不一定用在自己的城市就行得通
2、就算M用了这个方法，减少了污染，也不一定能够选上市长
3、不一定这个决定就能够吸引市民的注意，他们也不一定都会因为这个去投他的票
In this argument, the arguer recommends that Ida McAllister would be wise to announce her intention to close all Lake City parks to automobile traffic. To justify this claim, the arguer points out that mayor Yu successfully solving the pollution problem and improving the quality of life in Plainville by prohibiting automobile traffic in all Plainsville parks. In addition, the arguer reasons that Ida McAllister's action would appeal the citizens of Lake City, most of whom participate in the community's recycling program, and McAllister would surly be successful in her current quest to Lake City's new mayor. However, the argument suffers from several critical fallacies.

First, the argument is based on a false analogy. The arguer simply assumes that McAllister can gain the same success by showing her commitment to environmental causes by following Yu's example, but he does not provide any evidence that the two cites have the same number of parks and the same traffic conditions. Perhaps there are only two parks in Lake City, then such proposal makes no sense . Or maybe Lake City is a city of gardens and parks, this prohibition would damage the traffic condition badly. Without convincing me all the other aspects of these two cities are same, I cannot believe that Mayor Yu's prohibition could be applied in Lake City as well.
  
Second, the arguer fails to examine the reason why McAllister was defeated in the last election. Maybe her capability is inferior to her opponent. Or any other factors lead to the failure. Therefore, even though her proposal to close all Lake City parks to automobile traffic would be succeed, there is no guarantee that she would be successful in the current election.

Last but not least, the arguer reasons that this action would appeal citizens who participate in the community's recycling program, and would guarantee McAllister's success. However, community's recycling program have no direct relationship with environment. Maybe some people attend this activity just for fun or for enriching their daily life or for some other reasons. The less percent of people involve in recycling program truly concerned about environmental affairs, the less people would be appealed by her action. Even if they know what McAllister has done, they would not vote her as the mayor for sure in the current mayor election. So the arguer's conclusion that such action would guarantee McAllister's success is unconvincing.

In conclusion, as it stands the argument is unpersuasive. To bolster it the author must show that Lake City's environmental would surely be improved after the prohibition of automobile traffic in all city parks. The author must also convince me that more citizens would choose McAllister as the mayor after such action. To better assess the argument it would be useful to know why McAllister failed in the last election four years ago. Also useful would be any information about Lake City's mayor now.

[ 本帖最后由 staralways 于 2006-3-9 09:53 编辑 ]

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In this argument, the arguer recommends that Ida McAllister would be wise to announce her intention to close all Lake City parks to automobile traffic. To justify this claim, the arguer points out that mayor Yu successfully solving the pollution problem and improving the quality of life in Plainville by prohibiting automobile traffic in all Plainsville parks. In addition, the arguer reasons that Ida McAllister's action would appeal the citizens of Lake City, most of whom participate in the community's recycling program, and McAllister would surly be successful in her current quest to Lake City's new mayor. However, the argument suffers from several critical fallacies.

First, the argument is based on a false analogy. The arguer simply assumes that McAllister can gain the same success 有说另外那个市的市长是因为这个提议而获得选举成功的吗。忘了。。楼主再确认下by showing her commitment to environmental causes by following Yu's example, but he does not provide any evidence that the two cites have the same number of parks and the same traffic conditions. Perhaps there are only two parks in Lake City,与此同时Yu市长的city有几个park呢，具体点 then such proposal makes no sense . Or maybe Lake City is a city of gardens and parks, this prohibition would damage the traffic condition badly. Without convincing me all the other aspects of these two cities are same, I cannot believe that Mayor Yu's prohibition could be applied in Lake City as well.
也可以对比两城市的目前环境状况如果McAllister ‘s city已经比Yu's好了那此建议也无参考价值
Second, the arguer fails to examine the reason why McAllister was defeated in the last election. Maybe her capability is inferior to her opponent. Or any other factors lead to the failure. 再具体再具体，也许人们还关注什么呢？城市犯罪率，失业率？Therefore, even though her proposal to close all Lake City parks to automobile traffic would be succeed, there is no guarantee that she would be successful in the current election.

Last but not least, the arguer reasons that this action would appeal citizens who participate in the community's recycling program, and would guarantee McAllister's success. However, community's recycling program have no direct relationship with environment. Maybe some people attend this activity just for fun or for enriching their daily life or for some other reasons. The less percent of people involve in recycling program truly concerned about environmental affairs, the less people would be appealed by her action. Even if they know what McAllister has done, they would not vote her as the mayor for sure in the current mayor election. So the arguer's conclusion that such action would guarantee McAllister's success is unconvincing.
挺好的，论述了参与活动的不等于支持政策，进而支持市长。其实也是个false analogy，两个截然不同的问题，人们的态度不一定必然相同。
In conclusion, as it stands the argument is unpersuasive. To bolster it the author must show that Lake City's environmental would surely be improved after the prohibition of automobile traffic in all city parks. The author must also convince me that more citizens would choose McAllister as the mayor after such action. To better assess the argument it would be useful to know why McAllister failed in the last election four years ago. Also useful would be any information about Lake City's mayor now.
结尾也点到了缺点什么evidennce。挺好！
结构不错，感觉开头有点累赘。整体挺好的，加油了