Issue 51 狠拍吧~~~~

georgiayzhUID: 2225237

51. "Education will be truly effective only when it is specifically designed to meet the individual needs and interests of each student."

  Is it the individual needs and interests of each student that lead education to be truly effective, as the speaker asserts? It might be temping to agree with the speaker on the basis that individual interests and needs are the most motivation for students to study. However, further reflection shows that merely specially designed education will carry negative consequences both for students and education.
I concede that great interests towards particular subjects are motivations for students to achieve higher efficiency of learning. As an old saying goes “interest is the best teacher for students”, so are individual needs. Interest would not only stimulate students to pursuit professionally educational fruit in high spirits, but also let them enjoy the process of learning. Imaging that how a scientist researching on human beings’ diseases buries him/her in a ten-years project without the interest of the research content, how our world-famous cellist Yoyo Ma practices all his life to get to the amazing lever of playing cell without the interest towards cell playing. The foundation of interests and individual needs in the learning is found and reinforced by public and becoming the touchstone of students’ educational touchstone.
Admittedly, interests and individual needs are playing the amazingly catalysis role in studying, however, education should be well-rounded and broad so as to cultivate informed and qualified talents for society or our nation rather than be specially designed to meet the individual needs and interests of each students. The truly effective education, for one thing, should provide students insights and perspectives into individual position in the society and in both the physical and metaphysical world though the education in nature science, philosophy, politics and so forth; for another, it should offer education on literature, art, music etc so as to develop the aesthetic appreciation for the students toward the world around us; what is more, students should learn the events happened during the past and learn to accept, appreciate and tolerate the diversity of the world though the study of history, sociology and other subjects in the humanities. Accordingly, a specially designed education may pose several hazards for students to be truly educated primarily for the reasons that education specially designed to meet the individual needs and interests of each student will leads to primarily two negative consequence towards students and education.
  The first has to do with the utilitarianism, which results from the freedom for students to choose whatever they like and to reject whatever they consider to be of no use. In this way, many actually important courses, which seem of no obvious use, will be ignored by most students, such as philosophy. Though this subject is so useful that it provides us the proper ways of thinking which are highly instructive and helpful for the students to understand the changing and developing world and solve the real world problems, it has nothing to do with our future use at the first glance, as a result many students would lose the chance to learn the most great knowledge accumulated by all human-being’s wisdom as it seems “useless”. Another example comes to my mind is that nowadays many high schools cut the “needless” art courses to squeeze more time for subjects required in the college entrance examinations just because the intensive competition among high schools in the college enrollment. From above we can see that education catering to the individual needs is eventually becoming education for practical needs and short-term needs that deprives the students of the opportunities to receive the well-rounded and terribly impede them to develop into informed citizens in the long run.
  The second has to do with the incline for students to skip the hard learning subjects which have true values though all their lives. Especially at the early age students may lose interests in the subjects that are difficult, though very useful, in the other way they may lose the opportunities to get the basically necessary knowledge for their further learning if the education should meet their actually wrong needs and interests. For supporting example, mathematics, the nightmare for students of all levels around the world, plays a crucial role in that it not only gives us the basic knowledge that can be more useful in studying of other disciplines and our further education, but also helps us perceive the world with the conception of quality.
  To sum up, the speaker is simply amounts the education specially designed to meet the individual needs and interests of each students to the truly effective education, which should be broad and well-rounded. Such education as the speaker says will bring harmful consequence as it renders education utilitarian and biased. However, the college students who clearly understand their interests and needs can choose this specially designed education to achieve their professional goals.(I haven’t expatiated this point in the body of this issue, is it ok? )

wanggyUID: 2204289

[建议使用每段顶头，段间空行的格式]

Is it the individual needs and interests of each student that lead education to be truly effective, as the speaker asserts? It might be temp[t]ing to agree with the speaker on the basis that individual interests and needs are the most [最什么的？] motivation for students to study. However, further reflection[为什么是“反射”？] shows that merely[这词好像有问题] specially designed education will carry negative consequences both for students and education.

I concede that great interests towards particular subjects are motivations for students to achieve higher efficiency of learning[learning efficiency]. As an old saying goes “interest is the best teacher for students”, so are individual needs[why?]. Interest would not only stimulate students to pursuit professionally educational fruit[这里有点翻译的迹象。。。professionally和educational都是什么意思啊？] in high spirits, but also let them enjoy the process of learning. Imaging[Imagine吧] that how a scientist researching on human beings’ diseases buries[改成devotes或者engages吧。buries太恐怖了。。。] him/her in a ten-years[好像这样的词不用s，就是ten-year] project without the interest of the research content, how our world-famous cellist Yoyo Ma practices all his life to get to the amazing lever[level?] of playing cell[cello么？] without the interest towards cell playing.[这一句话没说完呢。可能可以把前面改成how could we imagine。不知道是不是chinglish] The foundation of interests and individual needs in the learning is found and reinforced by public and becoming the touchstone of students’ educational touchstone[touchstone of touchstone?].[这句话什么意思没太看懂。found是不是founded? 能解释一下你的原意么]

Admittedly, interests and individual needs are playing the amazingly catalysis role in studying,[感觉这半句放到前一段里比较好，放这太重复了] however, education should be well-rounded and broad so as to cultivate informed and qualified talents for society or our nation rather than be specially designed to meet the individual needs and interests of each students[s去掉]. The truly effective education, for one thing, should provide students insights and perspectives into individual position in the society and in both the physical and metaphysical world though[好像不通啊，through么？好像改成through也不通] the education in nature science, philosophy, politics and so forth; for another, it[指什么？] should offer education on literature, art, music etc[etc.] so as to develop the aesthetic appreciation for the students toward the world around us; what is more, students should learn the events happened during the past and learn to accept, appreciate and tolerate the diversity of the world though the study of history, sociology and other subjects in the humanities.[这句话完全看不懂。功力不够。。。能解释一下么？] Accordingly, a specially designed education may pose several hazards for students to be truly educated primarily[一句话里用了两遍，太重复啦] for the reasons that education specially designed to meet the individual needs and interests of each student will leads to primarily two negative consequence towards students and education.

The first has to do with the utilitarianism, which results from the freedom for students to choose whatever they like and to reject whatever they consider to be of no use[useless]. In this way, many actually important courses, which seem of no obvious use, will be ignored by most students, such as philosophy[such as philosophy可以放到will be ignored前面去]. Though this subject is so useful that it provides us[us是students么？] the proper ways of thinking which are highly instructive and helpful for the students to understand the changing and developing world and solve the real world problems, it has nothing to do with our future use[career，或者life什么的吧] at the first glance, as a result many students would lose the chance to learn the most great[greatest] knowledge accumulated by all human-being’s wisdom as it seems “useless”. Another example [加个that，或者不要用comes to my mind了] comes to my mind is that nowadays many high schools cut the “needless” art courses to squeeze more time for subjects required in the college entrance examinations just because[改成介词，比如because of] the intensive competition among high schools in the college enrollment. From above we can see that education catering to the individual needs is eventually becoming education for practical needs and short-term needs that deprives the students of the opportunities to receive the well-rounded [这里少了一个宾语吧?] and terribly impede them to develop[from developing] into informed citizens in the long run.

The second has to do with the incline for students to skip the hard learning subjects which have true values though[through] all their lives[their whole lives]. Especially at the early age students may lose interests in the subjects that are difficult, though very useful,[把从句去掉，difficult, though very useful subjects] [这里是不是少了连词了] in the other way they may lose the opportunities to get the basically necessary knowledge for their further learning if the education should meet their actually wrong needs and interests. For supporting example, mathematics, the nightmare for students of all levels around the world, plays a crucial role in that it not only gives us the basic knowledge that can be more useful in studying of other disciplines and our further education, but also helps us perceive the world with the conception of quality[conception of quality是什么意思啊？呵呵].

To sum up, the speaker is[is去掉] simply amounts the education specially designed to meet the individual needs and interests of each students to the truly effective education, which should be broad and well-rounded. Such education as the speaker says will bring harmful consequence as it renders education utilitarian and biased. However, the college students who clearly understand their interests and needs can choose this specially designed education to achieve their professional goals.(I haven’t expatiated this point in the body of this issue, is it ok? )

[写这么长干嘛呢。。。句子长，全文更长。。。]
[最后再对论证过程提点看法吧。论证的过程应该还比较切题吧。但是有一点小问题我不太明白，既然你反对题目的观点，而且认为truly effective education应该是broad and well-rounded，那为什么不找一些例子说明一下你心目中truly effective education应该是什么样呢？]

sly60321UID: 2228803

51. "Education will be truly effective only when it is specifically designed to meet the individual needs and interests of each student."

  Is it the individual needs and interests of each student that lead education to be truly effective, as the speaker asserts? It might be temping to agree with the speaker on the basis that individual interests and needs are the most motivation for students to study. However, further reflection shows that merely specially designed education will carry negative consequences both for students and education.
I concede that great interests towards particular subjects are motivations for students to achieve higher efficiency of learning. As an old saying goes “interest is the best teacher for students”, so are individual needs. Interest would not only stimulate students to pursuit professionally educational fruit in high spirits, but also let them enjoy the process of learning. Imaging[改成it’s hard to imagine不然整个长句没有动词] that how a scientist researching on human beings’ diseases buries him/her in a ten-years[ten year] project without the interest of the research content, how our world-famous cellist Yoyo Ma practices all his life to get to the amazing lever of playing cell without the interest towards cell playing. The foundation of interests and individual needs in the learning is found and reinforced by public and becoming the touchstone of students’ educational touchstone.[后半句怎么两个touchstone? 看不太懂]
Admittedly, interests and individual needs are playing the amazingly catalysis role in studying, however, education should be well-rounded and broad so as to cultivate informed and qualified talents for society or our nation rather than be specially designed to meet the individual needs and interests of each students. The truly effective education, for one thing, should provide students insights and perspectives into individual position in the society and in both the physical and metaphysical [你用的词是超自然的意思，mental才是精神上的]world though the education in nature science, philosophy, politics and so forth; for another, it should offer education on literature, art, music etc so as to develop the aesthetic appreciation for the students toward the world around us; what is more, students should learn the events happened during the past and learn to accept, appreciate and tolerate the diversity of the world though the study of history, sociology and other subjects in the humanities. Accordingly, a specially designed education may pose several hazards for students to be truly educated primarily for the reasons that education specially designed to meet the individual needs and interests of each student will leads[lead] to primarily two negative consequence towards students and education.
  The first has to do with the utilitarianism, which results from the freedom for students to choose whatever they like and to reject whatever they consider to be of no use. In this way, many actually important courses, which seem of no obvious use, will be ignored by most students, such as philosophy. Though this subject is so useful that it provides us the proper ways of thinking which are highly instructive and helpful for the students to understand the changing and developing world and solve the real world problems, it has nothing to do with our future use at the first glance,[貌似是中国的国情，国外不清楚是否和我们一样忽视哲学] as a result many students would lose the chance to learn the most great knowledge accumulated by all human-being’s wisdom as it seems “useless”. Another example comes to my mind is that nowadays many high schools cut the “needless” art courses to squeeze more time for subjects required in the college entrance examinations[貌似又是中国国情] just because[of] the intensive competition among high schools in the college enrollment. From above we can see that education catering to the individual needs is eventually becoming education for practical needs and short-term needs that deprives the students of the opportunities to receive the well-rounded and terribly impede them to develop into informed citizens in the long run.
  The second has to do with the incline for students to skip the hard learning subjects which have true values though all their lives. Especially at the early age students may lose interests in the subjects that are difficult, though very useful, in the other way they may lose the opportunities to get the basically necessary knowledge for their further learning if the education should meet their actually wrong needs and interests. For supporting example, mathematics, the nightmare for students of all levels around the world[students前加个many避免与其绝对化], plays a crucial role in that it not only gives us the basic knowledge that can be more useful in studying of other disciplines and our further education, but also helps us perceive the world with the conception of quality.
  To sum up, the speaker is [去掉is]simply amounts the education specially designed to meet the individual needs and interests of each students to the truly effective education, which should be broad and well-rounded. Such education as the speaker says will bring harmful consequence as it renders education utilitarian and biased. However, the college students who clearly understand their interests and needs can choose this specially designed education[加个based on being broad]  to achieve their professional goals.(I haven’t expatiated this point in the body of this issue, is it ok? )[结尾段可以提出自己建议，问题不大，in sum, extremely great!!!!!!]

georgiayzhUID: 2225237

十号的第五次作业:
Issue 38
"In the age of television, reading books is not as important as it once was. People can learn as much by watching television as they can by reading books."
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     开头： 提出综合的观点，看电视学习和读书学习是同样的重要，should strike a balance between them.
     论据一：learn by watching television 的好处：vivid , 声像具备更加能draw attention;
             the information on television is the information up-to-date;
     论据二：如果忽视reading books 可能会“营养不良”：书的知识更加全面，更加广泛；
             如果just 看电视会浪费很多时间，因为现在很多泡沫电视，无聊节目，可能会带来negative consequences.
     论据三：associate them to make high effectiveness of study. 古今结合，中外兼并。
     结尾：  照应开头。
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               In the age of television, is learning by reading books not as important as by watching television, as the speaker assert? It might be tempting to agree with the speaker on the basis that television is becoming more and more important in our daily lives by providing  us with all kinds of information as well as fun, however, books, the records of our history and the discoveries of all human-beings, should be place at least balanced emphasis on.

  Admittedly, vivid leaning by watching television plays a more and more significant role to all aspects in our daily lives. In today’s television age, as the TV programs become increasingly attracting, people spend a lot of time sitting in front of the television round-the-clock, forgetting meals and rests. To study, as far as Ｉam concerted, by watching television at least has two benefits. On one hand, this special way of learning is vivid for the reason that it provides to the watchers the sound as well as the pictures. We can comparing the two ways of learning a history event, one by just describing the process with words, while the other by replaying the striking details with cliff-hanging sounds and fascinating changing pictures, which one will you choose? On the other hand, the information on the television id up-to-date, in other words, we are learning the active knowledge. After the American “9.11”event, the television broadcasted it to any country of the world in one minute, while it is a relatively long time since we can read the description of it. So it makes sense that television is inseparable to people’s lives. However, can we draw the conclusion that learning by television can to some extent displace the normal way of learning by reading books? Absolutely cannot.
   
  Undue emphasis on learning by watching TV and overlooking the books will carry negative consequences to individuals. As known to all, every informed citizen should gain the knowledge from all areas and the learning itself should be well organized, in other words, human should learn knowledge on all kinds of subjects and should learn step by step, from elemental school to college. As a saying goes, every book is a history of our human beings, which means that information from the books is all-around and abroad, providing us with any professional knowledge and discoveries. While what television gives us is the immediate knowledge, which is in general amusing not instructive. Nowadays, more and more parents worry for their kids about wasting a large amount of time on television, and the television programs are hardly to our comfort, full of sex, violence, and deceptions. All the programs above will misguide our children who are in the age of imitating others and thus may lead their lives to crime.
  
  In my view, correct and effective way of learning should associate the two aspects. When learning the history of any country, we can understand the truth of the history event by reading books at the same time watch the history episodes to enjoy the decorated history that may be more interesting and attracting. By this way, we can find that even the most boring history events might be well understood as a interesting story. For another supporting example, when there are some world-wide influencing accidents happening, we can by the same step watch the exactly news vividly from the television which must attach to the spot to get the first-time news as an effective media and further detailed learning will come from the later-published books which might depict the far-reaching influence of this accident as well as the direct and indirect causes of it. This way of learning obviously tell the learners not only the apparently happening event but also the theoretically analysis so as to provide the learners with an all-round and easy-understanding approach to understand the occurrences.

  In sum, I concede that the speaker’s assertion about emphasis on the way of learning by watching television is somewhat reasonable on the basis that attracting and up-to-date  television programs make the learning interesting and easy-understanding, in my view, however, we should strike a balance between learning by watching television and by reading books in order to gain the all-round and abroad knowledge effectively.
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georgiayzhUID: 2225237

谢谢楼上的两位帮我改我的第一篇issue, 说实话,这个着实花了很长时间.
我也觉得没必要说那么多费话,可是第一篇嘛,想到都会写下,我会改进的...
我再好好改改~
至于二楼的一些问题 都是些拼写错误 引来的歧义哈
如：function  写成foundation
需要我改的尽管开口阿，一定会尽力，呵呵

[ 本帖最后由 georgiayzh 于 2006-7-22 00:36 编辑 ]

fenghua9801UID: 2191885

In the age of television, is learning by reading books not as important as by watching television, as the speaker assert[asserts]? It might be tempting to agree with the speaker on the basis that television is becoming more and more important in our daily lives by providing  us with all kinds of information as well as fun, [逗号换成分号]however, books, the records of our history and the discoveries of all human-beings, should be place at least balanced emphasis on.
[开头不错～！]

Admittedly, vivid leaning by watching television plays a more and more significant role to all aspects in our daily lives. In today’s television age, as the TV programs become increasingly attracting[应该换成attractive吧？], people spend a lot of time sitting in front of the television round-the-clock, forgetting meals and rests. To study, as far as Ｉam concerted[concerned], by watching television at least has two benefits. On one hand, this special way of learning is vivid for the reason that it provides to the watchers the sound as well as the pictures. We can comparing the two ways of learning a history event, one by just describing the process with words, while the other by replaying the striking details with cliff-hanging sounds and fascinating changing pictures, which one will you choose? On the other hand, the information on the television id[is,小错误啊～！] up-to-date, in other words, we are learning the active knowledge. After the American “9.11”[好像直接写911就行吧] event, the television broadcasted it to any country of the world in one minute, while it is a relatively long time since[该换成before吧？] we can read the description of it[我觉得这句话要是想再加强一点，把after换成as soon as，当然，其他的也是要改的了]. So it makes sense that television is inseparable to people’s lives. However[昨天看书说However表示转折不能用在句首，虽然我以前也一直这么用，你可以回去确认一下哈], can we draw the conclusion that learning by television can to some extent displace the normal way of learning by reading books? Absolutely cannot[换成not吧？].
   
Undue emphasis on learning by watching TV and overlooking the books will carry negative consequences to individuals. As known to all, every informed citizen should gain the knowledge from all areas and the learning itself should be well organized, in other words, human should learn knowledge on all kinds of subjects and should learn step by step, from elemental[elementary] school to college. As a saying goes, every book is a history of our human beings, which means that information from the books is all-around and abroad[broad], providing us[这个分词短语有点问题，是书本provide,但是跟前面主语的不一致] with any professional knowledge and discoveries. While what television gives us is the immediate knowledge, which is in general amusing not instructive[这整句话的意思没有写完整]. Nowadays, more and more parents worry for their kids about wasting a large amount of time on television, and the television programs are hardly to our comfort, full of sex[换成pornography好些吧？], violence, and deceptions. All the programs above will misguide our children who are in the age of imitating others and thus may lead their lives to crime.
  
In my view, correct and effective way of learning should associate[感觉应该用combine] the two aspects. When learning the history of any country, we can understand the truth of the history event by reading books at the same time watch the history episodes to enjoy the decorated history that may be more interesting and attracting[attractive][这句话感觉有点问题，at the same time那块，但是我也不知道]. By[In] this way, we can find that even the most boring history events might be well understood as a interesting story. For another supporting example, when there are some world-wide influencing accidents happening, we can by the same step watch the exactly news vividly from the television which must attach to the spot to get the first-time news as an effective media[加个逗号] and further detailed learning will come from the later-published books which might depict the far-reaching influence of this accident as well as the direct and indirect causes of it. This way of learning obviously tell the learners not only the apparently happening event but also the theoretically[theoretical] analysis so as to provide the learners with an all-round and easy-understanding approach to understand the occurrences.

In sum, I concede that the speaker’s assertion about emphasis on the way of learning by watching television is somewhat reasonable on the basis that attracting and up-to-date television programs make the learning interesting and easy-understanding,[逗号不能连接两个独立的句子（independent clause），把它改成句号] in my view, however, we should strike a balance between learning by watching television and by reading books in order to gain the all-round and abroad[broad] knowledge effectively.
[写的很好，但是有些细节还是应该注意一下， 加油～！]

queeniezUID: 2203712

In the age of television, is learning by reading books not as important as by watching television, as the speaker assert? It might be tempting to agree with the speaker on the basis that television is becoming more and more important in our daily lives by providing  us with all kinds of information as well as fun, however, books, the records of our history and the discoveries of all human-beings, should be placed at least balanced emphasis on.

  Admittedly, vivid leaning by watching television plays a more and more significant role to all aspects in our daily lives. In today’s television age, as the TV programs become increasingly attracting, people spend a lot of time sitting in front of the television round-the-clock , forgetting meals and rests(“废寝忘食”这个用法确定否?). To study, as far as Ｉam concerted, by watching television at least has two benefits. On one hand, this special way of learning is vivid for the reason that it provides to the watchers the sound as well as the pictures. We can comparing the two ways of learning a history event, one by just describing the process with words, while the other by replaying the striking details with cliff-hanging sounds and fascinating changing pictures, which one will you choose? On the other hand, the information on the television id(is) up-to-date, in other words, we are learning the active knowledge. After the American “9.11”event, the television broadcasted it to any country of the world in one minute, while it is a relatively long time since we can read the description of it. 这个原因很好！学习中！So it makes sense that television is inseparable to people’s lives. However, can we draw the conclusion that learning by television can to some extent displace the normal way of learning by reading books? Absolutely cannot not.
  (举例子的方式很好，水到渠成的感觉)
  Undue emphasis on learning by watching TV and overlooking the books will carry negative consequences to individuals. As known to all, every informed citizen should gain the knowledge from all areas and the learning itself should be well organized, in other words, human should learn knowledge on all kinds of subjects and should learn step by step, from elemental school to college. As a saying goes, every book is a history of our human beings, which means that information from the books is all-around and abroad, providing us with any professional knowledge and discoveries. While what television gives us is the immediate knowledge, which is in general amusing not instructive. Nowadays, more and more parents worry for their kids about wasting a large amount of time on television, and the television programs are hardly to our comfort, full of sex, violence, and deceptions. All the programs above will misguide our children who are in the age of imitating others and thus may lead their lives to crime.
  这段没有上一段说理透彻，而且学校和书本好像也是不同概念吧。或者你可以说学校里采用的教材，可能会好一点
  In my view, correct and effective way of learning should associate the two aspects. When learning the history of any country, we can understand the truth of the history event by reading books at the same time watch the history episodes to enjoy the decorated history that may be more interesting and attracting. By this way, we can find that even the most boring history events might be well understood as a interesting story. For another supporting example, when there are some world-wide influencing accidents happening, we can by the same step “同步”好像不能这么说吧 watch the exactly news vividly from the television which must attach to the spot to get the first-time news as an effective media and further detailed learning will come from the later-published books which might depict the far-reaching influence of this accident as well as the direct and indirect causes of it. This way of learning obviously tell the learners not only the apparently happening event but also the theoretically analysis so as to provide the learners with an all-round and easy-understanding approach to understand the occurrences.

  In sum, I concede that the speaker’s assertion about emphasis on the way of learning by watching television is somewhat reasonable on the basis that attracting and up-to-date  television programs make the learning interesting and easy-understanding, in my view, however, we should strike a balance between learning by watching television and by reading books in order to gain the all-round and abroad knowledge effectively.
语言流畅，而且内容丰富！学习中！