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lily_ruoUID: 2158092

75. Some students to take classes in many subjects. Other universities require students to specialize in one subject. Which is better? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

There is no consensus among people about whether students in universities should learn specifically or broadly. The voices for specific learning insists concentration makes deep insights, instead of superficial or partial understanding. However, in my perspective, it is more wise, especially when taking the development trends and career pursuing into account, for universities to provide students with diversified courses in many subjects.

The complexity and diversity of science and technology are forming a seamless net of the world. As a result, it is said that all the subjects could be potentially interconnected. Take biology as an example, the explanations of gene are not cogent until the statistical illustration was introduced by Mendel, while the origin of nerve current may not persuadable without the analogy of potential and current in physics. Without the inter-discipline background, no one could make those discoveries, and so it is with the future discoveries. As the fertilized soil to nurture future elite, many educators advocate actively the importance of broad learning.

Furthermore, the wider vision, the more opportunities grasped. In practice, when university students step into the society, the pressure of living is silently taken onto their shoulder. One of the functions of universities is to prepare their graduates the capacity to cope with the pressure and serve the society successfully. Having a wider vision is an advantage over other competitors. Different skills developed in diversified subjects is vital to deal with trivial at work, making the students more adaptable and more liable to survive. There is no wonder why inter-discipline is more preferable to those who want to start their own career after graduation.

However, some experts worry that students are less encouraged to drill deep, which results in their reluctance to face difficulty in both academic career and future life. Our country do not need mediocrity. Instead, we need innovation, invention, and reformation. The problems are out of the way, if the students are well-nurtured and clear-minded enough to find the place they fit in through broad learning. Even though there are worry about the depth of study, the drawbacks could be compensated in further study as master or a researcher in a R and D department in a company.  For those who are interested in the tough and decide to devote in a certain field, the difficulty is just a piece of cake.

All in all, study broadly in universities is a must in both short and long run. Universities should encourage classes in diversified subjects so as to prepare the students for the fast advancement of technology and future career.

cellophane05UID: 2135343

大家互拍，共同提高了。
楼主，第一感觉，全文很充实了。

There is no consensus among people about whether students in universities should learn specifically or broadly. The voices for specific learning insists （去s， 加that） concentration makes deep insights, instead of superficial or partial understanding. However, in my perspective, it is more wise （直接 wiser）, especially when taking the development trends and career pursuing into account, for universities to provide students with diversified courses in many subjects. （我理解没有错的话，for引导的是原因状语，那就去除to 或 添上 are）

The complexity and diversity of science and technology are forming a seamless net of the world. As a result, it is said that all the subjects could be potentially interconnected. Take biology as an example, the explanations of gene are not cogent until the statistical illustration was introduced by Mendel, while the origin （discover） of nerve current may not persuadable without the analogy of potential and current in physics. Without the inter-discipline background, no one could make those discoveries, and so it is with the future discoveries. As the fertilized soil to nurture future elite, many educators advocate actively the importance of broad （学习了！团体学习broad learning=group learning，你的用法很地道，羡慕:vomit:） learning.

Furthermore, the wider vision, the more opportunities grasped. In practice, when university students step into the society, the pressure of living is silently taken onto their shoulder. One of the functions of universities is to prepare their graduates （加个for，个人感觉用equip with 更好）the capacity to cope with the pressure and serve the society successfully. Having a wider vision is an advantage over other competitors. Different skills developed in diversified subjects is （are） vital to deal with trivial （adj. the trivial, or trifle） at work, making the students more adaptable and more liable to survive. There is no wonder why inter-discipline is more preferable to those who want to start their own career after graduation.

However, some experts worry that students are less encouraged to drill deep, which results in their reluctance to face difficulty in both academic career and future life. Our country do （does） not need mediocrity （我见都没见过，平庸之才 mediocrity，你英语专业的？？？）. Instead, we need innovation, invention, and reformation. （加一个有分量的转折词，应该很有气势。。。）The problems are out of the way, if the students are well-nurtured and clear-minded enough to find the place they fit in through broad learning. Even though there are worry （worries） about the depth of study, the drawbacks could be compensated in further study as master or a researcher in a R and D department in a company.  For those who are interested in the tough and decide to devote in a certain field, the difficulty is just a piece of cake.

All in all, study broadly in universities is a must in both short and long run. Universities should encourage classes in diversified subjects so as to prepare the students for the fast advancement of technology and future career.

感觉你的文笔不错了。结构也很符合TWE的要求了，
我的75篇修改稿，你有空时也看一下：
https://bbs.gter.net/viewthread.php?tid=504422&highlight=

lily_ruoUID: 2158092

我发现我的拼写还是有问题，一致性也有欠缺，多谢指正。再次感谢细心修改。
有个小的问题，探讨：
However, in my perspective, it is more wise （直接 wiser）, especially when taking the development trends and career pursuing into account, for universities to provide students with diversified courses in many subjects. （我理解没有错的话，for引导的是原因状语，那就去除to 或 添上 are）
这个句子我其实写得很简单，有点偷懒，在中间多加了一个插入语，实际上是 it is ...for ...to do ...,不知道是不是对的。 :)

cellophane05UID: 2135343

原帖由 lily_ruo 于 2006-8-6 21:30 发表
However, in my perspective, it is more wise （直接 wiser）, especially when taking the development trends and career pursuing into account, for universities to provide students with diversified courses in many subjects. （我理解没有错的话，for引导的是原因状语，那就去除to 或 添上 are）
这个句子我其实写得很简单，有点偷懒，在中间多加了一个插入语，实际上是 it is ...for ...to do ...,不知道是不是对的。

很有道理噢，:cool:
我怎么就没看出来？？
应该可以