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题目
Students should bring certain skepticism to whatever they study. They should question what they are taught instead of accepting it passively.

正文：

When I was a little girl, my parents told me to "cultivate the ability of skepticism". Previously I didn't understand, nevertheless, as time went by, I realized how significant it is to form the sense of skepticism in the getting access to the truth.

With the spirit of skepticism toward what is told in class, students usually get a more thorough understanding of the knowledge. Things carefully thought leaves a deeper impression in our mind. When it comes to learning knowledge, no matter the skepticism is right or wrong, after the progress of original skepticism--reasonable discussion--critical thinking, a student can look into the very subject from all-section angles, thus getting a better understanding of the knowledge. In some special academic fields, such as philosophy and sociology, both of which calls for critical analysis and thinking, skepticism is of tremendous significance and is thought as basic quality as professionals.

Deep down, skepticism is the original force that pushes our society into a better state which is filled with new inventions and discoveries as well as new theories. Without skepticism, human beings would still be thought to be created by unnatural forces; people would be never come up with the idea that the planet they'd lived for thousands is round rather than flat; the quantum theory would never come into being......without skepticism, we might still live in carves and lurk in jungles. Along with skepticism goes innovation and fresh ideas, some of which can cause tremendous transform in our lives.

Nevertheless, it is not a wise idea to encourage skepticism all the time. Firstly, skepticism to teachers should not be encouraged among little pupils say less than five years old. Because skepticism is based on the precondition that the person has get a clear understanding of the content taught by the teacher. Therefore, we cannot expect the majority of young children with little experience of living in the world to understand how the society functions and why moral rules should be followed---things seeming easy but call for critical and complex thoughts to understand.  Secondly, some subjects are too obvious to be suspected. Take the example of the earth going around the sun, with accurate evidence and strict demonstration, no one can deny the law of nature. Thirdly, it is impossible to learn if a person suspects everything. Not only is it a waste of time but also a waste of energy.

In the final analysis, we should encourage skepticism among students because skepticism is the original source of innovation and reasoning, however, we must caution the extending the proposition too far might risk undermining the major objectives.

[ 本帖最后由 绚烂夏花 于 2007-1-30 16:24 编辑 ]

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因为昨天我的帖子出了点问题，所以今天才刚开始改
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正文：
When I was a little girl, my parents told me to "cultivate the ability of skepticism". Previously I didn't understand, nevertheless, as time went by, I realized how significant it is to form the sense of skepticism in the[way] getting access to the truth.
首段摆明观点，支持skepticism
[来个，first of all/to begin with 吧]With the spirit of skepticism toward what is told in class, students usually get a more thorough understanding of the knowledge. [since]Things carefully thought leaves a deeper impression in our mind. When it comes to learning knowledge, no matter [the skepticism is right or wrong,][怀疑精神又对错，这不就是你在论证的问题吗？你是想说无论怀疑的是对还是错吧？no matter the things people suspect are right or wrong] after the[ progress][process] of original skepticism--reasonable discussion--critical thinking, a student can look into the very subject from all-section angles, thus getting[get] a better understanding of the knowledge.[he/she learn/sutdy] [For instance]In some special academic fields, such as philosophy and sociology, both of which calls[call] for critical analysis and thinking, skepticism is of tremendous significance and is thought as [the]basic quality as[to/for ] professionals.
Deep down, skepticism is the original[太绝对了吧，除非你后面充分证明确实是original] force[reason 会不会好一点] that pushes our society into a better state which is[觉得可以去掉] filled with new inventions and[，] discoveries as well as new theories. [Since觉得这样更连贯]Without skepticism, human beings would still be thought to be created by unnatural forces[虽然在人类从野蛮到文明的发展过程中，人类自身确实起了很大的主动作用，但是对于人类最初的起源仍然是未知的，而且目前并不是全世界都接受进化论这样的原因的]; people would be never come up with the idea that the planet they'd[they have现在还在居住啊，they had 是指在过去曾经吧] lived for thousands[？of years] is round rather than flat; the quantum theory would never come into being......[and]without skepticism, we might still live in carves[caves] and lurk in jungles. [感觉和怀疑精神关系不大吧，不知道楼主是如何理解这个粒子的，我觉得人类从不再潜伏于洞穴之中，不再生活于丛林之内，是由很多原因造成的，比如冒险精神什么的，当然也有怀疑的因素在里面。但是因为这个例子太泛泛，如果真要用的话是不是具体指出怀疑精神是如何促使这一切发生的，这样是不是会更有说服力呢？]Along with skepticism goes[come about] innovation and fresh ideas, some of which can cause tremendous transform[transformation] in our lives.
[举了很多的例子，但是我觉得是不是具体说一下怀疑精神是如何使我们认识到这些未知的事情的，可以用事情发展的过程论证，比如：当发现某一现象与传统解释不完全匹配的时候，有怀疑精神的人就敢于和传统作斗争，不被动接受知识，而是去探索新的原因。]
Nevertheless, [前面加一个，虽然上面列举了很多怀疑精神的例子，然而。。。。是不是会好一点？承上启下作用]it is not a wise idea to encourage skepticism all the time. Firstly, skepticism to teachers should not be encouraged among little pupils say[such as/especially是不是好一点] less than five years old. Because skepticism is based on the precondition that the person has get a clear understanding of the content taught by the teacher. Therefore, we cannot expect the majority of young children with little experience of living in the world to understand how the society functions[runs/moves/circulates是不是好一点] and why moral rules should be followed---things seeming easy but call for critical and complex thoughts to understand. [这句和上面那句改成递进关系，共同支持结论——怀疑精神不能总是鼓励，会不会更好，这样才会紧扣该段TS] Secondly, some subjects are too obvious to be suspected. Take the example of the earth going around the sun, with accurate evidence and strict demonstration, no one can deny the law of nature. Thirdly, it is impossible to learn if a person suspects everything. Not only is it a waste of time but also a waste of energy.[没有展开论述为什么怀疑所有的事情就不可能学习了，只是说浪费时间和精力说服力不够，举个例子或者再深入点]
In the final analysis, we should encourage skepticism among students because skepticism is the original source of innovation and reasoning, however, we must caution the extending the proposition too far might risk undermining the major objectives.
总体例子举的比较多，而且范围很广，但是都没有深入论述，因为一个现象发生是有很多原因共同导致的，也许判卷老师潜意识里会认为是别的原因，而你在这里引述的却是另外一个原因，会给人牛头不对马嘴的感觉，但是如果你能进一步论述为什么就是这个原因，而且头头是道，那这个例子就用的很好,还需要改进阿，一起加油吧，FIGHTIN!!!

绚烂夏花UID: 2245298

看了你该过的，觉得自己差得很远啊……
嗯！一起加油！