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发表于 2007-7-24 09:11:30 |显示全部楼层
If I have a chance to travel to another country, I would like to visit America. For the reason that I like the big city and America has one of the greatest cities in the world----New York. It is a opportunity to see how fictional the big city is.

In a big city, the mass transportation system is more efficient. In my country, when crossing the city, waiting for the bus for a long time is necessary. Another problem is that the bus is almost the only choice. But in a metropolis, there are so many options, such as subway, highway, and well-developed bus. An efficient public transportation system can save mass of time.

Related to the first, big cities are always so energetic and full of opportunities. Big city gives all kinds of people chances to win or to loss, and then loss or win again. It is so exciting that bunches of young men want to come to big city to have to a chance to realize their dream, such as New York. In New York, it has Wall Street, Manhattan business area, and so on. These supply positions to youngest to earn their future by their own hand and brain.

At the same time, New York is an international city which stirs different cultures together. There some cities bigger than New York, but no one has so many people from different countries with different ideas. Traveling in New York likes traveling round-the –world. Contributing to the mixing of diverse cultures and ideas is all that’s new in a big city: new fashion, new idea and new creation.

In summary, traveling in U.S., especially in New York will be a exciting trip with amazing and happiness. It will harvest me a lot.

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发表于 2007-7-25 17:39:40 |显示全部楼层
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发表于 2007-7-25 17:43:45 |显示全部楼层
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发表于 2007-7-25 20:06:27 |显示全部楼层
If I have a chance to travel to anothercountry, I would like to visit America.For the reason that I like the big city and Americahas one of the greatest cities in the world----New York. It is an opportunity to see how prospersthe big city is.

In a big city, the mass transportationsystem is more efficient. In my country, when I 否则就是waitingcrosscrossing the city, waiting for the bus for a long time is necessary.Another problem is that the bus is almost the only choice. But in a metropolis,there are so many options, such as subway, highway, and well-developed bus. Anefficient public transportation system can save mass of time.

Related to the first, big cities are alwaysso energetic and full of opportunities. Big city gives all kinds of peoplechances to win or to loss, and then loss or win again. It is so exciting thatbunches of young men want to come to big city to have to a chance to realizetheir dream, such as New York(终于谈NY). In New York, it(who) has Wall Street, Manhattanbusiness area, and so on. These supply positions to youngest to earn theirfuture by their own hand and brain.

At the same time, New York is an international city whichstirs (up) different cultures together. There some cities bigger than New York, but no one hasso many people from different countries with different ideas. Traveling in New York likes travelinground-the –world. Contributing to the mixing of diverse cultures and ideas isall that’s new in a big city: new fashion, new idea and new creation.

In summary, traveling in U.S., especially in New York will be a(an) exciting trip withamazing and happiness. It will harvest me a lot(I will harvest a lot?).

LZ几乎花了2段在谈metropolis,个人感觉有点跑,毕竟题目是问你要visit哪个country,建议之前加上NY是一个バラバラ的什么城市,然后将这些展开说明,用上前两段的内容就可以

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发表于 2007-7-26 08:23:06 |显示全部楼层
谢谢大家的建议 下次注意 太过于注重XDF里那种发散思维,硬把他往big city扯 结果有点跑

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