issue5 V6站队8.20 考T后归队第一篇

ttzoeUID: 202809

考T回来第一篇，由于这个题目比较熟悉，所以头一次现时成功，可惜后来用word一看字数有点少:( 我自己还没改过，本来想改过再发上来的，但是可能由于刚考了TWE，脑子有点木，总是往上面扯，各位队友受累了（估计会有非常ridiculerous的错误，见笑了）

Issue 5
"A nation should require all its students to study the same national curriculum until they enter college rather than allow schools in different parts of the nation to determine which academic courses to offer."

The assertion prefers a national curriculum over the domestic curriculum before the students enter college. I agree with this assertion insofar as a universal curriculum would benefit both the country and different regions. However, I posit that different parts of the nation should have some freedom to set particular courses that they think would be appropriate.

On the one hand, I agree that a national basic curriculum would benefit both individuals and the country in several aspects. First, the proper function of elementary school, in my view, is to impart fundamental knowledge and basic study skills, therefore help all students build up their personal study system which will facilitate their future study. In this sense, a universal course will ensure an equal quality of this fundamental knowledge and skills. Since, no mater where the student is, he or she will receive the same course.

Secondly, a universal course will prepare the students in all parts of the nation for their higher education. Because the programs and curricula that universities and colleges provided will be universal ones, by which I mean students wherever they come will study the same things. Thus if the elementary schools executive national curriculum that provide same prerequisite course, inform the students same background knowledge and common sense will undoubtedly help the students understand the courses and communicate with others who are from different places. In short, receiving a universal course will best prepare them for their future higher education.

Finally, a universal course will also benefit the country. Executing the universal course will facilitate the performance evaluation. Since all students no matter where they are receive same course thereby same knowledge, it is much easier to set up a universal examination to evaluate the study of students, therefore provide equal opportunities to enter universities and colleges for every student.

On the other hand, the local course will have benefits, too. Firstly, different regions may have their unique customs, ethics and traditions, as well as their specific arts. Thus permit local courses will facilitate those heritages be passed on by generations, in turn will benefit the ethical diverse of the whole nation.

Secondly, every place has some specific advantages, allowing schools in different parts to determine some academic courses based on these advantages will benefit the students there. For example, a Now York school could set some business-related courses since New York is the business and commercial heart of the world, it has the unique advantages to provide such business-related course as visiting New York Stock Exchange or Federal Reserve which are other places have no chance to offer. These courses will be a bonus of the students in New York.

To sum up, I believe the best approach for a nation to set their elementary school courses is to integrate the universal curriculum, which provide the fundamental knowledge and wholesome personal study system, and the local courses, which offer specific ethical and domestic knowledge.

hustzwj 的issue136提了点拙劣的看法https://bbs.gter.net/forum.php?mo ... p;page=1#pid1763790

[ Last edited by staralways on 2005-8-21 at 01:01 ]

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我看看

iceoolongUID: 180112

考完托福回来看的第一篇，先占个座

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The assertion prefers a national curriculum over the domestic curriculum before the students enter college. I agree with this assertion insofar as a universal curriculum would benefit both the country and different regions. However, I posit that different parts of the nation should have some freedom to set particular courses that they think would be appropriate.

On the one handon one hand, I agree that a national basic curriculum would benefit both individuals and the country in several aspects. First, the proper function of elementary school, in my view, is to impart fundamental knowledge and basic study skills, therefore help all students build up their personal study system which will facilitate their future study. In this sense, a universal course will ensure an equal quality of this fundamental knowledge and skills. Since, no mater where the student is, he or she will receive the same course.

Secondly, a universal course will prepare the students in all parts of the nation for their higher education. Because the programs and curricula that universities and colleges provided will be universal ones, by which I mean students wherever they come will study the same things. Thus if the elementary schools executive national curriculum that provide same prerequisite course, inform the students same background knowledge and common sense will undoubtedly help the students understand the courses and communicate with others who are from different places. 这句话是不是漏词了，没太看懂，还有same前面是不是应该加the？In short, receiving a universal course will best prepare them for their future higher education.

Finally, a universal course will also benefit the country. Executing the universal course will facilitate the performance evaluation. Since all students no matter where they are receive same course thereby same knowledge是要用定语从句吗？还是应该用让步的？读的很别扭（前面也有几个），same前面没有the, it is much easier to set up a universal examination to evaluate the study of students, therefore provide equal opportunities to enter universities and colleges for every student（therefore是连词，后面怎么没有主语）.

On the other hand, the local course will have benefits, too. Firstly, different regions may have their unique customs, ethics and traditions, as well as their specific arts. Thus permit local courses will facilitate those heritages be passed on by generations,in turn will benefit the ethical diverse of the whole nation句子有问题，permitting or permition of, facilitate的用法我不太了解，只是觉得不对，diversity多样性.

Secondly, every place（换个说法） has some specific advantages, allowing schools in different parts to determine some academic courses based on these advantages will benefit the students there. For example, a Now York school could set some business-related courses since New York is the business and commercial heart of the world, it has the unique advantages to provide such business-related course as visiting New York Stock Exchange or Federal Reserve which are 去掉other places have no chance to offer. These courses will be a bonus of the students in New York.

To sum up, I believe the best approach for a nation to set their elementary school courses is to integrate the universal curriculum, which provide the fundamental knowledge and wholesome personal study system, and the local courses, which offer specific ethical and domestic knowledge.
结构比较清楚，不过有几个问题：用词应该考虑多样化一些，universial是不是可以用general或者别的；定语从句的使用以及句子总会出现一些语法错误，注意一下（刚考完T不应该这样啊）

ttzoeUID: 202809

哦，刚才忘了说，是on the one hand,不是on one hand（如果我没记错的话，呵呵）

iceoolongUID: 180112

是on one hand,呵呵，我觉得尽量少出错，是不是拿不准的最好就不要用，感觉拿不准可以提前查好了，这样考试就不会慌了
另外therefore的用法没有问题，我看到了，看来是我有问题：）
我的水平比较差……大家一起加油

[ Last edited by iceoolong on 2005-8-23 at 17:04 ]