Issue52 （第一篇）

azaleaUID: 196122

52"Education encourages students to question and criticize, and therefore does little to promote social harmony."

Nov.14 19:20-23:00

提纲：
Intro:what is social harmony?
Point1: Does questioning & criticizing promote social harmony?
Point2: What really disturbs social harmony is not questioning the government in mind but to take destructive action by violence.
Point3: Even though questioning & criticizing, when go to extremes, may disturb social harmony, we cannot attribute all the consequences to education. On the contrary, it is those people who harm the social harmony who lack a sound education.
Point4: Although education encourages students to question and criticize, it also teaches students other qualities like humanism and aesthetics, which complement the ability to reason, question, and criticize in order to make a balanced personality.
Conc:We cannot blame education for the social inharmony.


Nowadays, the term 'social harmony' is often heard. But after pondering about what it really means, the assertion above seems misleading. Harmony, on one hand, refers to compatibility in opinion and action, while on the other hand, congruity of parts with one another and with the whole. Suppose a person is criticizing a government's policy in public, does this disturb social harmony? In a sense, he/she indeed create disputes and protests to the government in the public, but it may do more good than harm if such speech provokes people's awareness of a better operated government and wise policies. On the whole, the purpose of questioning and criticizing is not to create discrepancies among people but to cast light on the place where improvements can be made in order to build a more harmonious society.   

Does questioning & criticizing promote social harmony or actually do the opposite?  I cannot provide a convincing conclusion before examining some well-known cases.  
Martin Luther King, American clergyman and Nobel Prize winner, is one of the principal leaders of the American civil rights movement and a prominent advocate of nonviolent protest. His challenges to segregation and racial discrimination in the 1950s and 1960s helped convince many white Americans to support the cause of civil rights in the United States. He made many public speeches and raised campaigns to criticize and question about racial discrimination. But for his persisting effort, black children and white children would still go to separate schools today. We cannot censure King for his questioning and criticizing, since he did promote social harmony by fighting against discrimination rather than harm it.  Also, you may be reminded of the famous Chinese hydraulicist who first opposed to the proposal of the construction of Sanmen Xia reservoir. He questioned the former Soviet experts about their over-optimistic evaluation of the profit of the reservoir but pointed out that the whole Hanzhong Plain would be flooded if the reservoir were built. However, no one listened to his criticism and the construction was carried out. Ever since, the previous fertile Hanzhong Plain now floods very often, causing serious loses each year. Who should compensate for the suffering people there? They should be rich and happy but now they are poor and cynical. Huang's questioning changed nothing. However, if our leaders took some consideration on his criticism, many tragedies could be avoided. Examples are numerous to prove that questioning & criticizing promotes social harmony in general. In fact, questioning & criticizing is essential for a society's healthy improvements. Nothing is perfect. If no one dares to point out the defects of the society, how can we realize and correct them to make further progress?

On the contrary, sometimes questioning & criticizing do bring about social disturbance. Take the country Chechnya as an example. Some activists in Chechnya criticized Russia's invasion and governance of their country since over a century ago and rebelled from the Russian government to build an independent nation in 1991. Fires never stop ever since the rebellion, causing continuous terrorism events and thousands of death. However, it is not questioning & criticizing itself that really sucks blood, but the violence in the name of justice. The tensity between Russia and Chechnya can only be relaxed through bilateral negotiation instead of explosions and kidnaps.

Even though questioning & criticizing, when go to extremes, may disturb social harmony, we cannot attribute all the consequences to education. In fact, it is those people who lack a sound education that are harming the social harmony. We learn to reason and question rationally in schools. We learn to think twice before we say furious words or take drastic actions. Those people who have extreme views of the government or society probably do not gain their views from education, but rather are influenced by books or their friends or any other sources other than education.   

Although education encourages students to question and criticize, it also teaches students other principles like science, humanism and aesthetics, which complement the ability to reason, question, and criticize in order to make a balanced personality. I do not think those people would be fooled by FLG if they had some basic concepts of science. In addition, education teaches students to be tolerant of different views and considerate of other people, though at the same time they should have a critical thinking.

In conclusion, we cannot blame education for the social inharmony. Education can foster students in an all-around way other than the ability of questioning and criticizing. With tolerance and consideration and a balanced view of the world, they are not likely to disturb social harmony if they are intact from other negative influences. Also, questioning and criticizing alone cannot harm the social harmony substantially, unless it is coupled with violence and radicalism. On the contrary, justified questioning and criticism promotes the social harmony by pointing out the shortcomings and appealing to the people to improve them.   

  
好早以前写的了 一直没贴上来 希望大家狠狠的拍

[ Last edited by azalea on 2005-12-24 at 11:53 ]

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都谬人回我 :(
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Originally posted by azalea at 2005-12-18 22:48
都谬人回我 :(
BM帮帮我啊
我在版上改过的作文也有4、5篇了 都没人改我的 5555555555555

你加入个小组吧，这样大家都会互相修改的，别难过

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52"Education encourages students to question and criticize, and therefore does little to promote social harmony."

Nov.14 19:20-23:00

提纲：
Intro:what is social harmony?
Point1: Does questioning & criticizing promote social harmony?
Point2: What really disturbs social harmony is not questioning the government in mind but to take destructive action by violence.
Point3: Even though questioning & criticizing, when go to extremes, may disturb social harmony, we cannot attribute all the consequences to education. On the contrary, it is those people who harm the social harmony who lack a sound education.
Point4: Although education encourages students to question and criticize, it also teaches students other qualities like humanism and aesthetics, which complement the ability to reason, question, and criticize in order to make a balanced personality.
Conc:We cannot blame education for the social inharmony.
[提纲中楼主从harmony入手分析，然后抓住question&criticize着手分析其利弊，最后指出教育除了q&c外，还有其他很多作用，结构很清晰，而且看得出来楼主是经过自己的思考的，赞。但是楼主的金和三门峡的例子举的过于冗长，可以考虑适当压缩一下]


Nowadays, the term 'social harmony' is often heard[mentioned怎么样]. But[这个but是不是太突然，与企业比较强烈，换成yet怎么样] after pondering about what it really means, the assertion above seems misleading. Harmony, on one hand, refers to compatibility in opinion and action, while on the other hand, congruity of parts with one another and with the whole.[好！] Suppose a person is criticizing a government's policy in public, does this disturb social harmony? In a sense, he/she indeed create disputes and protests to the government in the public, but it may do more good than harm if such speech provokes people's awareness of a better operated government and wise policies. On the whole, the purpose of questioning and criticizing is not to create discrepancies among people but to cast light on the place where improvements can be made in order to build a more harmonious society.

Does questioning & criticizing promote social harmony or actually do the opposite?  I cannot provide a convincing conclusion before examining some well-known cases.  
Martin Luther King, American clergyman and Nobel Prize winner, is one of the principal leaders of the American civil rights movement and a prominent advocate of nonviolent protest. His challenges to segregation and racial discrimination in the 1950s and 1960s helped convince many white Americans to support the cause of civil rights in the United States. He made many public speeches and raised campaigns to criticize and question about racial discrimination. But for his persisting effort, black children and white children would still go to separate schools today. We cannot censure King for his questioning and criticizing, since he did promote social harmony by fighting against discrimination rather than harm it.  Also, you may be reminded of the famous Chinese hydraulicist who first opposed to the proposal of the construction of Sanmen Xia reservoir. He questioned the former Soviet experts about their over-optimistic evaluation of the profit of the reservoir but pointed out that the whole Hanzhong Plain would be flooded if the reservoir were built. However, no one listened to his criticism and the construction was carried out. Ever since, the previous fertile Hanzhong Plain now floods very often, causing serious loses each year. Who should compensate for the suffering people there? They should be rich and happy but now they are poor and cynical. Huang's questioning changed nothing. However, if our leaders took some consideration on his criticism, many tragedies could be avoided. Examples are numerous to prove that questioning & criticizing promotes social harmony in general. In fact, questioning & criticizing is essential for a society's healthy improvements. Nothing is perfect. If no one dares to point out the defects of the society, how can we realize and correct them to make further progress? [这两个例子楼主举的太详细了，建议压缩]

On the contrary, sometimes questioning & criticizing do bring about social disturbance. Take the country Chechnya as an example. Some activists in Chechnya criticized Russia's invasion and governance of their country since over a century ago and rebelled from the Russian government to build an independent nation in 1991. Fires never stop ever since the rebellion, causing continuous terrorism events and thousands of death. However, it is not questioning & criticizing itself that really sucks blood, but the violence in the name of justice. The tensity between Russia and Chechnya can only be relaxed through bilateral negotiation instead of explosions and kidnaps.

Even though questioning & criticizing, when go to extremes, may disturb social harmony, we cannot attribute all the consequences to education. In fact, it is those people who lack a sound education that are harming the social harmony. We learn to reason and question rationally in schools. We learn to think twice before we say furious words or take drastic actions. Those people who have extreme views of the government or society probably do not gain their views from education, but rather are influenced by books or their friends or any other sources other than[other than意思是除了。。还，相当于besides,表示除了后者之外的同类事物，这里应该用rather than吧] education.   

Although education encourages students to question and criticize, it also teaches students other principles like science, humanism and aesthetics, which complement the ability to reason, question, and criticize in order to make a balanced personality. I do not think those people would be fooled by FLG [请教一下，这个缩略语是什么意思啊]if they had some basic concepts of science. In addition, education teaches students to be tolerant of different views and considerate of other people, though[这里的though也用得不太恰当啊，though是表示转折的] at the same time they should have a critical thinking.

In conclusion, we cannot blame education for the social inharmony. Education can foster students in an all-around way other than the ability of questioning and criticizing. With tolerance and consideration and a balanced view of the world, they are not likely to disturb social harmony if they are intact from other negative influences. Also, questioning and criticizing alone cannot harm the social harmony substantially, unless it is coupled with violence and radicalism. On the contrary, justified questioning and criticism promotes the social harmony by pointing out the shortcomings and appealing to the people to improve them.

lorraineyeUID: 2157370

Nowadays, the term 'social harmony' is often heard. But after pondering about what it really means, the assertion above seems misleading. Harmony, on one hand, refers to compatibility in opinion and action, while on the other hand, congruity of parts with one another and with the whole. Suppose a person is criticizing a government's policy in public, does this disturb social harmony? In a sense, he/she indeed create disputes and protests to the government in the public, but it may do more good than harm if such speech provokes people's awareness of a better operated government and wise policies. On the whole, the purpose of questioning and criticizing is not to create discrepancies among people but to cast light on the place where improvements can be made in order to build a more harmonious society.  （个人认为简洁明了的首段还是更有利一些。把观点提出以后把后面的举例和论述放到新的一段当中会更好。另外加些现实性的例子即使是一笔带过也会更有说服力）

Does questioning & criticizing promote social harmony or actually do the opposite?  I cannot provide a convincing conclusion before examining some well-known cases.  
Martin Luther King, American clergyman and Nobel Prize winner, is one of the principal leaders of the American civil rights movement and a prominent advocate of nonviolent protest. His challenges to segregation and racial discrimination in the 1950s and 1960s helped convince many white Americans to support the cause of civil rights in the United States. He made many public speeches and raised campaigns to criticize and question about racial discrimination. But for his persisting effort, black children and white children would still go to separate schools today. We cannot censure King for his questioning and criticizing, since he did promote social harmony by fighting against discrimination rather than harm it.  Also, you may be reminded of the famous Chinese hydraulicist who first opposed to the proposal of the construction of Sanmen Xia reservoir. He questioned the former Soviet experts about their over-optimistic evaluation of the profit of the reservoir but pointed out that the whole Hanzhong Plain would be flooded if the reservoir were built. However, no one listened to his criticism and the construction was carried out. Ever since, the previous fertile Hanzhong Plain now floods very often, causing serious loses each year. Who should compensate for the suffering people there? They should be rich and happy but now they are poor and cynical. Huang's questioning changed nothing. However, if our leaders took some consideration on his criticism, many tragedies could be avoided. Examples are numerous to prove that questioning & criticizing promotes social harmony in general. In fact, questioning & criticizing is essential for a society's healthy improvements. Nothing is perfect. If no one dares to point out the defects of the society, how can we realize and correct them to make further progress? （正反两个例子有说服力，但是这段显得太长，是否可以分为两段做正反论述？）

On the contrary, sometimes questioning & criticizing do bring about social disturbance（这个来个让步的标志词如何？）. Take the country Chechnya as an example. Some activists in Chechnya criticized Russia's invasion and governance of their country since over a century ago and rebelled from the Russian government to build an independent nation in 1991. Fires never stop ever since the rebellion, causing continuous terrorism events and thousands of death. However, it is not questioning & criticizing itself that really sucks blood, but the violence in the name of justice. The tensity between Russia and Chechnya can only be relaxed through bilateral negotiation instead of explosions and kidnaps.

Even though questioning & criticizing, when go to extremes, may disturb social harmony, we cannot attribute all the consequences to education（这里教育才第一次被提出来，感觉前面几段完全是在论述另一个题目，而如果第一段就概述一下以下分别要阐述的问题的话应该会更有整体感。） In fact, it is those people who lack a sound education that are harming the social harmony. We learn to reason and question rationally in schools. We learn to think twice before we say furious words or take drastic actions. Those people who have extreme views of the government or society probably do not gain their views from education, but rather are influenced by books or their friends or any other sources other than education.   

Although education encourages students to question and criticize, it also teaches students other principles like science, humanism and aesthetics, which complement the ability to reason, question, and criticize in order to make a balanced personality. I do not think those people would be fooled by FLG（不明白） if they had some basic concepts of science. In addition, education teaches（主语是education，用teach做谓语是不是不太合适） students to be tolerant of different views and considerate of other people, though at the same time they should have a critical thinking.

In conclusion, we cannot blame education for the social inharmony. Education can（这个can不要的话语气更肯定一些吧） foster students in an all-around way other than the ability of questioning and criticizing. With tolerance and consideration and a balanced view of the world, they are not likely to disturb social harmony if they are intact from other negative influences. Also, questioning and criticizing alone cannot harm the social harmony substantially, unless it is coupled with violence and radicalism. On the contrary, justified questioning and criticism promotes the social harmony by pointing out the shortcomings and appealing to the people to improve them.