Issue136 第2篇(can we choose?)——作文呼改站队D组

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Issue136  第2篇
------题目------
The absence of choice is a circumstance that is very, very rare.
------提纲------
1、科技进步—>选择多。
1.1以前[e.g. Marco Polo]
1.2现在[e.g. Cloning—>organ transplant]
2、为什么现在还有人抱怨“别无选择”？
2.1没有最满意的，只能相对选最优的[e.g. job hunting]
2.2只有一种是最可行的选择[e.g. Indian Ocean tsunami]

------正文------
Is it a very rare circumstance that we have no choice, as the statement contends? I agree that we confront numerous choices in most conditions, though, in the old era, it is maybe not necessarily the case.

Admittedly, one in old times do not have many choices, due to lacking of modern science and technology. Before the invention of automobile and airplane, humans travel simply by foot, horse-riding or shipping rather than other faster and more convenience choices of transportation. Just imagine, if Marc Polo went by plane, how could it spend him five years to arrive the orient? Still, on economical level, without today's various types of profitable investment, buying shares for example, the majority often save their money in the bank. Yet, with burgeon of technology in every aspect in our society, unlike in the past, people no longer encountered limited choices. In the physic domain, some scientists predict a day when cloning (creating a copy of living matter, such as a cell or organism) could be part of a process that grows entire organs for transplants. In other words, patients might choose to clone their own organ and do not have to utilize other person’s organs for which may take the patient some years waiting.

Nonetheless, even in a advanced environment, there is still a phenomenon that one complaining that he or she has no choice. Is it really so? A further analysis would explain why some people keep claiming 'I have no choice'. One reason is that the gap between reality and expectation prevents humans to discover potential opportunities. For instance, a graduate might be admitted by merely one firm after hundreds of interviews, and he asserts that he has no choice but join that company. To me, however, it could not be the 'I have no choice' case at all. Having no choice for this graduate is a temporary situation; plenty of positions could be awaiting him after his hard-working two or three years later. Still, another choice now is to start his own bossiness. Hence, what really matters is setting a goal based on appropriate evaluation of ourselves, and therefore we can see many choices in front of us.

Another explanation for the 'I have no choice' phenomenon is that sometimes there is only one most feasible way. A good example is the Indian ocean tsunami, seismic sea wave generated by an undersea earthquake, which devastated a great many of people's home in the 2005. At that time, the only and the most feasible method for the reconstruction and the future forecasting alarm between the neighbor nations is cooperating, for only by one country’s endeavor, it is almost impossible to achieve the aim. As it stands, there are circumstances that barely one choice to be adopted from which benefits us most.

In conclusion, it is true that in some cases like old times, humans do not have a lot choice. Nowadays the 'I have no choice' occasion is very rare, though maybe there are some people complain so. In fact, the one who thinks he or she has no choice already made a choice.  

本篇文章部分参考了pooh精华贴中的观点，在此给pooh鞠个躬，嘻嘻~

if_lotusUID: 175616

只好尴尬的自己顶一下了~

fhxyweiUID: 157384

Issue136 第2篇(can we choose?)——作文呼改站队D组

Issue136  第2篇
------题目------
The absence of choice is a circumstance that is very, very rare.
------提纲------
1、科技进步—>选择多。
1.1以前[e.g. Marco Polo]
1.2现在[e.g. Cloning—>organ transplant]
2、为什么现在还有人抱怨“别无选择”？
2.1没有最满意的，只能相对选最优的[e.g. job hunting]
2.2只有一种是最可行的选择[e.g. Indian Ocean tsunami]
[从你的提纲来看是前面说事实，后面分析原因，总的立场是赞成题目的；从你的第2个分论点来看，你是要大篇幅分析人们为什么抱怨没有选择，不知道你是不是围绕你的立场（其实选择很多）展开的，否则，我觉得有点在打擦边球的味道,anyway,先看文章：）]

------正文------
Is it a very rare circumstance that we have no choice, as the statement contends? I agree that we confront numerous choices in most conditions, though, in the old era, it is maybe not necessarily the case. [基本赞同的立场]

Admittedly, one in old times do not have many choices, [时态，还有单复数问题，people in old times didn't have many chocies]due to lacking of modern science and technology. Before the invention of automobile and airplane, humans[human beings] travel simply by foot, horse-riding or shipping rather than other faster and more convenience [convenient]choices of transportation. Just imagine, if Marc Polo went by plane, how could it spend him five years to arrive the orient? [从句和主句中的主语要一致，改一下：if Marc polo travelled by plane, how could he take five years to arrive in the orient? spend……(in)doing sth ]

Still, on economical level[？,are you sure这种表达？换一个In the economic field], without today's various types of profitable investment, buying shares for example, the majority often]save their money in the bank. [这句话时虚拟语气，与现在事实相反， 胃语应当改为： the majority would just save their money in bank；不过，又感觉你这句话是再说过去，这样胃语动词应改为 saved，被你的时态搞蒙了],Yet, with burgeon[这个词是萌芽的意思，现在科技才在萌芽状态？] of technology in every aspect in our society, unlike in the past, people no longer encountered limited choices.[下面又是一个例子，呵呵，没看见你的分析，如果不看题目，完全有理由认为，你写的就是科技的进步对我们生活的影响，和选择没有联系起来，其实例子都很好，就缺乏最后分析一下来画龙点睛] In the physic domain, some scientists predict a day when cloning (creating a copy of living matter, such as a cell or organism) could be part of a process that grows entire organs for transplants. [这句话的语法结构没看明白，predict后面要接从句吧？that grows?] In other words, patients might choose to clone their own organ and do not have to utilize other person’s [others']organs for which may take the patient some years waiting. [改一下: In other words, patients might choose to clone their own organs instead of waiting some years to utilize others']
[例子到这里又嘎然而止，最好还要分析一下，不然我还以为你就是说克隆技术是多么多么好呢， 当然我相信你举例是为了说明：我们的选择越来越多：）]

Nonetheless, even in a advanced environment,[这个用法让我“汗”！：）] there is still a phenomenon that one complaining [one often complain ]that he or she has no choice. Is it really so?[Is it true?] A further analysis would explain why some people keep claiming 'I have no choice'. One reason is that the gap between reality and expectation prevents humans to discover ][from discovering]potential opportunities. For instance, a graduate might be admitted by merely one firm after hundreds of interviews, and he asserts that he has no choice but join that company. To me, however, it could not be the 'I have no choice' case at all. Having no choice for this graduate is a temporary situation; plenty of [好像只能修饰不可数名词吧？] positions could be awaiting him after his hard-working two or three years later. [去掉after]Still, another choice now is to start his own bossiness. Hence, what really matters is setting a goal based on appropriate evaluation of ourselves, and therefore we can see many choices in front of us.
这段还可以了

Another explanation for the 'I have no choice' phenomenon is that sometimes there is only one most feasible way. A good example is the Indian ocean tsunami, seismic sea wave generated by an undersea earthquake, which devastated a great many of people's home in the 2005. At that time, the only and the most feasible method for the reconstruction and the future forecasting alarm between the neighbor nations is cooperating, for only by one country’s endeavor, it is almost impossible to achieve the aim. ][这句话又看晕了，比杨鹏难句还难，：）:lolwhat aim on earth?]As it stands, there are circumstances that barely one choice to be adopted from which benefits us most.
[就说了这么一例子，能说明只有一个可行的选择，所以人们抱选没有选择？有待商榷]

In conclusion, it is true that in some cases like old times, humans do not have a lot [of]choice. Nowadays the 'I have no choice' occasion is very rare, though maybe there are some people complain so. In fact, the one who thinks he or she has no choice [has]already made a choice.  


改完了，提出的观点是很好的，譬如：1，One reason is that the gap between reality and expectation prevents humans from discoverin potential opportunities.
2，Another explanation for the 'I have no choice' phenomenon is that sometimes there is only one most feasible way
值得我学习和借鉴。 特别是中间那个观点通过毕业生的例子分析还是蛮到位，能说服人！

但是第一个论点和最后一个，感觉就没有论证，特别是最后一个那个海啸的，论证的用途不是很大，我个人觉得，例子是为论点服务的，堆砌很多不分析效果不会很明显。


本篇文章部分参考了pooh精华贴中的观点，在此给pooh鞠个躬，嘻嘻~

[ Last edited by fhxywei on 2005-6-24 at 17:23 ]

fhxyweiUID: 157384

有机会也帮我拍一下：）

if_lotusUID: 175616

火眼金睛啊!

写完我自己还小修改了一下,觉得语法应该没啥问题,却忽略了时态....以后要注意!

但是第一个论点和最后一个，感觉就没有论证，特别是最后一个那个海啸的，论证的用途不是很大，我个人觉得，例子是为论点服务的，堆砌很多不分析效果不会很明显。

这是我的硬伤了,要好好动动脑筋想想怎么才能论证深入.

你的issue10我帮你看了,这两天我也在写这个题.
加油加油!

mkb57288UID: 2105771

Issue136  第2篇
------题目------
The absence of choice is a circumstance that is very, very rare.
------提纲------
1、科技进步—>选择多。
1.1以前[e.g. Marco Polo]
1.2现在[e.g. Cloning—>organ transplant]
2、为什么现在还有人抱怨“别无选择”？
2.1没有最满意的，只能相对选最优的[e.g. job hunting]
2.2只有一种是最可行的选择[e.g. Indian Ocean tsunami]

------正文------
Is it a very rare circumstance that we have no choice, as the statement contends? I agree that we confront不知道这个词用得合适否 numerous choices in most conditions, though, in the old era, it is maybe not necessarily the case.

Admittedly, one in old times do not have many choices, due to lacking of modern science and technology. Before the invention of automobile and airplane, humans travel simply by foot, horse-riding or shipping rather than other faster and more convenience词性 choices of transportation. Just imagine, if Marc Polo went by plane, how could it spend him five years to arrive the orient? Still, on economical level, without today's various types of profitable investment, buying shares for example, the majority often save their money in the bank. Yet, with burgeon of technology in every aspect in our society, unlike in the past, people no longer encountered limited choices. In the physic domain, some scientists predict a day when cloning (creating a copy of living matter, such as a cell or organism) could be part of a process that grows entire organs for transplants. In other words, patients might choose to clone their own organ and do not have to utilize other person’s organs for which may take the patient some years waiting.

Nonetheless, even in a advanced environment, there is still a phenomenon改成occassions是不是更合适 that one complaining that he or she has no choice. Is it really so? 有点儿冗余A further analysis would explain why some people keep claiming 'I have no choice'. One reason is that the gap between reality and expectation prevents humans to discover potential opportunities. For instance, a graduate might be admitted by merely one firm after hundreds of interviews, and he asserts that he has no choice but join that company. To me, however, it could not be the 'I have no choice' case at all. Having no choice for this graduate is a temporary situation; plenty of positions could be awaiting him after his hard-working two or three years later. Still, another choice now is to start his own bossiness. Hence, what really matters is setting a goal based on appropriate evaluation of ourselves, and therefore we can see many choices in front of us.

Another explanation for the 'I have no choice' phenomenon is that sometimes there is only one most feasible way. A good example is the Indian ocean tsunami, seismic sea wave generated by an undersea earthquake, which devastated a great many of people's home in the 2005. At that time, the only and the most feasible method for the reconstruction and the future forecasting alarm between the neighbor nations is cooperating, for only by one country’s endeavor, it is almost impossible to achieve the aim. As it stands, there are circumstances that barely one choice to be adopted from which benefits us most.

In conclusion, it is true that in some cases like old times, humans do not have a lot choice. Nowadays the 'I have no choice' occasion is very rare, though maybe there are some people complain so. In fact, the one who thinks he or she has no choice already made a choice.其实no choice意思就是 only choice 为此觉得最后这句话和B3有点儿值得商榷我爱寄托

if_lotusUID: 175616

最后一句话的意思是说：
那些认为自己别无选择的人已经做了选择，即，其实是有选择的，在众多选择中做了判断，选择其一。和B3是呼应的。

呵呵，有点绕，我也不知道这样说是不是表达清楚了~~

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Issue136  第2篇
------题目------
The absence of choice is a circumstance that is very, very rare.
------提纲------
1、科技进步—>选择多。
1.1以前[e.g. Marco Polo]
1.2现在[e.g. Cloning—>organ transplant]
2、为什么现在还有人抱怨“别无选择”？
2.1没有最满意的，只能相对选最优的[e.g. job hunting]
2.2只有一种是最可行的选择[e.g. Indian Ocean tsunami]

------正文------
Is it a very rare circumstance that we have no choice, as the statement contends? I agree that we confront numerous choices in most conditions, though, in the old era, it is maybe not necessarily the case.

Admittedly, one in old times do not have many choices, due to lacking of modern science and technology. Before the invention of automobile and airplane, humans travel simply by foot, horse-riding or shipping rather than other faster and more convenience choices of transportation. Just imagine, if Marc Polo went by plane, how could it spend him five years to arrive the orient Far East? Still, on economical level, without today's various types of profitable investment -s, buying shares for example, the majority often save their money in the bank. Yet, with burgeon of technology in every aspect in our society, unlike in the past, people no longer encountered limited choices. In the physic domain, some scientists predict a day when cloning (creating a copy of living matter, such as a cell or organism) could be part of a process that grows entire organs for transplants. In other words, patients might choose to clone their own organ and do not have to utilize other person’s organs for which may take the patient some years waiting.

Nonetheless, even in a an advanced environment, there is still a phenomenon that one complaining that he or she has no choice. Is it really so? A further analysis would explain why some people keep claiming 'I have no choice'. One reason is that the gap between reality and expectation prevents humans to discover potential opportunities. For instance, a graduate might be admitted by merely one firm after hundreds of interviews, and he asserts that he has no choice but join that company. To me, Actually， however, it could not be the 'I have no choice' case at all. Having no choice for this graduate is a temporary situation; plenty of positions could be awaiting him after his hard-working two or three years later. Still, another choice now is to start his own bossiness. Hence, what really matters is to set setting a goal based on appropriate evaluation of ourselves, and therefore we can see many choices in front of us.

Another explanation for the 'I have no choice' phenomenon is that sometimes there is only one most feasible way. A good example is the Indian ocean tsunami, seismic sea wave generated by an undersea earthquake, which devastated a great many of people's home in the 2005. At that time, the only and the most feasible method for the reconstruction and the future forecasting alarm between the neighbor nations is cooperating, for only by one country’s endeavor, it is almost impossible to achieve the aim. As it stands, there are circumstances that barely one choice to be adopted from which benefits us most.
感觉有点跑

In conclusion, it is true that in some cases like old times, humans do not have a lot choice -s. Nowadays the 'I have no choice' occasion the occasion of "I have no choice" is very rare, though maybe there are some people complain so. In fact, the one who thinks he or she has no choice already made a choice.  这句话没有在body里找到对应的论述