Issue150 绝对高频 多拍有拍必回

vieripingUID: 207712

Issue150  35
I agree that Tv and computer connections will have some negative impact on tourism however, it is entirely unnecessary for us to worry that tourism will become obsolete because of Tv and computer as tourism has its own advantage.

Tv and computer will have some negative impact on tourism. It is obvious that when we have see some places on Tv or computer connections, we would not like to go there considering the expense fees and time that we cost. After all, we cannot afford to go to every places by ourselves limited by different factors. Tv and computer connections just provide a universal access to those places. For example: some wild areas are too dangerous for us to go. Programs such as Discovery provide some documentary images and watching such program at home instead of going to some Africa wild areas is a wiser and more pragmatic choice for masses. In short, Tv and computer will have some negative impact on tourism while we are really beneficiaries of them.

However, it is not necessary for us to worry that tourism will become obsolete because of Tv and computer as tourism has its own advantage. First, introductions of resorts on Tv and computer connections may be a good advertisement for tourism. As we often only know some very famous places of interests such as Great Wall or Summer Palace, we may not know some infamous but very interesting places. Tv and computer connections just help us to get familiar with some new places and we are able to choose where to go. It is entirely unnecessary for us to worry that tourism will become obsolete because of Tv and computer. Let me make a metaphor. When DVD was invented, it did have tremendous impact on film industries as people may not go to cinema to watch film. However, film didn't appear because of the advent of DVD. Similarly,  tourism will not become obsolete  because of Tv and computer. Instead, Tv and computer may give a impetus to tourism.

Second, tourism is not merely a process to gather some information but rather a process of hearing and seeing firsthand. When we go travelling, we are able to communicate with natives to know some customs and  habits of them. All these feeling are obtained by ourselves while the experience that we watch from Tv  belong to others. In the essence, what we get from Tv and computer is only simple introduction. we have to explore profound things from our travelling. In addition, the introduction on TV or computer connections may not be right. We need to confirm by our own eyes and ears.

In sum, Tv and computer connections will have some negative impact on tourism however it may also have positive factors. Tv and computer connections give some introductions of many places and we can choose the place we want to go. Meanwhile tourism enable us to know more about native people which cannot get from Tv or computer, it is entirely unnecessary to worry that our tourism will become obsolete because of Tv and computer connections.

czl223UID: 2120177

Issue150 绝对高频 多拍有拍必回

Issue150  35
I agree that Tv都要大写 and computer connections will have some negative impact on tourism加个逗号吧 however, it is entirely unnecessary for us to worry that tourism will become obsolete because of Tv and改一下as well as,  computer as tourism has its own advantage.

Tv and computer will have some negative impact on tourism. It is obvious that when we have see改为seen some places on Tv or computer connections, we would not like to go there considering the expense加个of比较好 fees and time that we cost. After all, we cannot afford to go to every places是place by ourselves limited by different factors有点范. Tv and computer connections just provide a universal access to those places. For example: some wild areas are too dangerous for us to go. Programs such as Discovery这是什么，不懂啊，是节目吗，举例最好举出名的， provide some documentary images and watching such program at home instead of going to some Africa wild areas is a wiser and more pragmatic choice for masses. In short, Tv and computer will have some negative impact on tourism while we are really beneficiaries of them.
论证还是不错的

However, it is not necessary for us to worry that tourism will become obsolete because of Tv and computer as tourism has its own advantage. First, introductions of resorts on Tv and computer connections may be a good advertisement for tourism. As we often only know some very famous places of interests such as Great Wall or Summer Palace, we may not know some infamous but very interesting places. Tv and computer connections just help us to get familiar with some new places and we are able to choose where to go. It is entirely unnecessary for us to worry that tourism will become obsolete because of Tv and computer. 这句和开头的重复了，没必要Let me make a metaphor. When DVD was invented, it did have tremendous impact on film industries as people may not go to cinema to watch film. However, film didn't appear because of the advent of DVD. Similarly,  tourism will not become obsolete  because of Tv and computer. Instead, Tv and computer may give a impetus to tourism.比喻不错，学习一下，但还可以再说清楚点这个比喻的类似点，要不就不是那么有说服力了

Second, tourism is not merely a process to gather some information but rather a process of hearing and seeing firsthand. When we go travelling, we are able to communicate with natives to know some customs and  habits of them. All these feeling are obtained by ourselves while the experience that we watch from Tv  belong to others. In the essence, what we get from Tv and computer is only simple introduction. we have to explore profound things from our travelling. In addition, the introduction on TV or computer connections may not be right. We need to confirm by our own eyes and ears.
这段还是说的和前面一样啊，没有展开，应该再从另一些角度展开，这样才有说服力啊
In sum, Tv and computer connections will have some negative impact on tourism however it may also have positive factors. Tv and computer connections give some introductions of many places and we can choose the place we want to go. Meanwhile tourism enable us to know more about native people which cannot get from Tv or computer, it is entirely unnecessary to worry that our tourism will become obsolete because of Tv and computer connections.结尾不要是简单的重复，不过总结的还是不错的
总的来说，还是不错，就是思路再广些，论证从多个角度来，继续努力！