argument163 给她看看哈,互改,恩恩,

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Argument163
The following is taken from the editorial section of the local newspaper in Rockingham.
'In order to save a considerable amount of money, Rockingham's century-old town hall should be torn down and replaced by the larger and more energy-efficient building that some citizens have proposed. The old town hall is too small to comfortably accommodate the number of people who are employed by the town. In addition, it is very costly to heat the old hall in winter and cool it in summer. The new, larger building would be more energy efficient, costing less per square foot to heat and cool than the old hall. Furthermore, it would be possible to rent out some of the space in the new building, thereby generating income for the town of Rockingham.'
提纲：
1，        关于供暖和降温的费用，要提供新旧大堂的比较数据，新的每平方的费用低不代表总费用低，可能更高。即使老大堂费用高，也可以通过其他途径解决，如更换设备等。
2，        盖新楼的费用问题，另外也没有证据可以保证一定会有人来租用
3，        推翻老楼可能会带来其他负面问题，如历史文化价值，如旅游资源等
正文：
In this argument, the author proposes to replace the century-old town hall by the larger and more energy-efficient building. Without sufficient evidence, the author grants that the new town hall will surely save a considerable amount of money and even bring in more income for the town. Before taking this proposal, we need to analyze more carefully.

First of all, the author mentions that the new building will be more energy-efficient and as a result save more money. Before coming to this conclusion, we need to be provided detailed information about the efficiency of equipments for heating and cooling in both the old town hall and the new one, including the time needed for heating or cooling and so forth. It is entirely possible that the new building will need more time, since it owns a much more space in all. In addition, though the cost of per square foot to heat and cool for the new building is less than the old one, it does not mean that the total money will be saved. After all, the new one is larger and therefore maybe it will cost more for the whole building. Even if the efficiency of the old town hall is lower, it maybe caused by the poor devices dedicated to heating and cooling. Rather than tearing down the old building, we may refer to high quality of heating and cooling facilities. There is no doubt that it is a more reasonable choice. In short, more scientific comparison for the heating and cooling efficiency should be made between the old building and the new one.

Furthermore, the author fails to consider the cost of setting up the new town hall and also other fees needed for supporting it. Maybe it will cost so much for a new building that the cost saved in the heating and cooling process will be completely surpassed. And it will contrarily increase the overall disbursement of the town. Accordingly, the exact cost of setting up the new building should be revealed and then the author needs to compare it to the cost saved. Additionally, the author provides no evidence to convince us that the space of the new building will be rent out successfully. It is entirely possible that the rental is too high that few people are able to afford it. Or perhaps the environment around the new building is not so pleasure and the public facilities are disappointing, thus people will not surely be interested in it. Consequently, the author cannot be so optimist with the new building since it may cost more money, let alone to bring in more income.

Moreover, the author should not be blind to other important meaning of the old town hall, such as the history and culture value. Maybe this old town hall has a history of more than hundreds of years and even owns some special values. For example, some famous men used to work or live in this old building or some important incidents happened in it. Of course all these may largely increase the value of this old building. Or perhaps the old building is one of the places of interest in this town and it stimulates the production of tourism. Then tearing down the old building will doubtlessly curtail the tourists visiting Rockingham town annually. Thus the author should provide sufficient information of the old town hall before making any proposal, or the overall income of the town may be decreased.

In a sum, the author should provide us more information about the conditions of the old building, including the quality of the heating and cooling facility, as well as the history and culture meanings. What’s more, we should be informed the cost of setting up a new building and the detailed information about it also needed.

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In this argument, the author proposes to replace the century-old town hall by the larger and more energy-efficient building. Without sufficient evidence, the author grants that the new town hall will surely save a considerable amount of money and even bring in more income for the town. Before taking this proposal, we need to analyze more carefully.

First of all, the author mentions that the new building will be more energy-efficient and as a result save more money. Before coming to this conclusion, we need to be provided detailed information about the efficiency of equipments for heating and cooling in both the old town hall and the new one, including the time(跟时间有关系吗？题目只提到费用和单位面积的费用，而不是电的单价呀，这个有些勉强吧？即使效率跟时间有关，那也应该是单位时间的、单位面积的花费，不只是时间) needed for heating or cooling and so forth. It is entirely possible that the new building will need more time, since it owns a much more space in all(时间不一定因为空间大吧？这个理由似乎不充分，新建筑空间大，可能有更多加热和降温设备同时工作，或者这些设备效率更高，未必时间就多). In addition, though the cost of per square foot to heat and cool for the new building is less than the old one, it does not mean that the total money will be saved. After all, the new one is larger and therefore maybe it will cost more for the whole building. Even if the efficiency of the old town hall is lower, it maybe caused by the poor devices dedicated to heating and cooling. Rather than tearing down the old building, we may refer to high quality of heating and cooling facilities. There is no doubt that it is a more reasonable choice. In short, more scientific comparison for the heating and cooling efficiency should be made between the old building and the new one. (最好将费用，效率的反驳分2段，也就是将费用的部分放到下一段，这样条理更清楚。混在一起感觉有些乱...)
补充一个：总的费用可能还包括水费，照明的其他用途的电费等，或许这些用途的总费用新建筑可能更大

Furthermore, the author fails to consider the cost of setting up the new town hall and also other fees needed for supporting it. Maybe it will cost so much for a new building that the cost saved in the heating and cooling process will be completely surpassed. And it will contrarily increase the overall disbursement of the town. Accordingly, the exact cost of setting up the new building should be revealed and then the author needs to compare it to the cost saved. Additionally, the author provides no evidence to convince us that the space of the new building will be rent out successfully. It is entirely possible that the rental is too (是so)high that few people are able to afford it. Or perhaps the environment around the new building is not so pleasure and the public facilities are disappointing, thus people will not surely be interested in it. Consequently, the author cannot be so optimist(是optimistic) with the new building since it may cost more money, let alone to bring in more income.(将费用和出租最好分成2段，我觉得还是每一个攻击点一段，条理清晰，比混在一起要好)
补充：新建筑是否有多余的空间出租？即使租出去了，可能无法保证利润？考虑到租金和开销如维修费用，清洁费用等



Moreover, the author should not be blind to other important meaning of the old town hall, such as the history and culture value. Maybe this old town hall has a history of more than hundreds of years and even owns some special values. For example, some famous men used to work or live in this old building or some important incidents happened in it. Of course all these may largely increase the value of this old building. Or perhaps the old building is one of the places of interest in this town and it stimulates the production of tourism. Then tearing down the old building will doubtlessly curtail the tourists visiting Rockingham town annually. Thus the author should provide sufficient information of the old town hall before making any proposal, or the overall income of the town may be decreased.(这个不错，没想到，学习)

补充：老建筑无法满足本城的工作人员？这个也可以攻击

In a sum, the author should provide us more information about the conditions of the old building, including the quality of the heating and cooling facility, as well as the history and culture meanings. What’s more, we should be informed the cost of setting up a new building and the detailed information about it also needed.

[ Last edited by win-sz on 2005-12-10 at 20:37 ]

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恩恩,谢谢的说

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Originally posted by 果小冻 at 2005-12-10 23:06
恩恩,谢谢的说

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1，新楼不一定比老楼的费用抵。首先，单位面积的费用低不代表总费用低。即使的确比老的省，也比一定要盖新楼，因为可以通过更换新的设备。
2，不一定可以创更多的利润。首先，能否出租，人们是否有这个意愿，地段等都有可能影响他们的决定。其次，利润是否比造房的费用多呢？
3，推翻老楼可能会带来其他负面问题，如历史文化价值，如旅游资源等。同时这个可能带来更多的利润。