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200Statistics collected from dentists indicate that three times more men than women faint while visiting the dentist. This evidence suggests that men are more likely to be distressed about having dental work done than women are. Thus, dentists who advertise to attract patients should target the male consumer and emphasize both the effectiveness of their anesthetic techniques and the sensitivity of their staff to nervous or suffering patients.
10:20
In this argument, the arguer points out that men are more possible to be distressed about the dental work than women because a statistics shows that the faint of men is the three times of women. Therefore, dentists should advertise their effective anesthetic techniques and their sensitivity of their patients' suffering/ pains to attract patients of male. Although the argument seems plausible, in fact, there are several fatal faults in the reasoning process. So the conclusion is problematic.

In the first place, the conclusion is based on the assumption that the faint of patients is caused by being afraid of having dental work. The arguer provides no evidence that can prove it is the case. Actually, there are some alternatives; perhaps these male patients are inclined to faint in their lives; it is possible that they are uncomfortable to the conditions of hospital, and so on. If these scenarios are true, they will undermine/weaken the conclusion. So it is unwise for dentists to advertise patients through advertising their anesthetic techniques.

In the second place, the arguer declares that the statistics collected from dentists is doubtful because the statistics may be not reliable, or the representation is insufficient; the arguer provides no proof which can indicate the statistics is accurate and can represent the true conditions. Based on such inaccurate survey, the conclusion is refutable.

Last but not the least, the author suggests they should advertise their anesthetic techniques and their sensitivity, but he or she ignores a most important fact that the patients come to treat their teeth so they firstly consider the affectivity of the treatment but not other matters. If there is a good means to treat their teeth, they would like to bear the transient pains. Consequently, the conclusion is suspectable.

Overall, the argument is well delivered, but not well-reasoned. If the arguer wants to persuade us, he or she has to evaluate all alternatives and causes, like the real cause of patients' faint, the suggestions of patients and so on.
10:47
我要疯了，字数少的可怜啊！555555……body 2，3 根本就没有进行好的论述！怎么办啊！第一段到底怎么弄弄节约点时间啊！大虾们给点意见啊！写那破第一段花了我8minutes，气死我了！真不知道详细论述两个错误好，还是简单论述3个好！

gdhdannyUID: 125843

还要多练啊
三个错误比较合适
另外结尾这种模糊的建议还不如不写，要写就对前面的逻辑错误进行总结，一定要具体，也就是说除前面指出的错误的具体改革措施。比如没有排除他因，就提出要排除那些它因，或者明确指出证明这个问题只有一个主导因素，这样的解释才有效果。

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gdhdanny
谢谢你了！我都要哭了！我要重弄一下这个a了，自己总结一下！