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Issue 177
"The study of an academic discipline alters the way we perceive the world. After studying the discipline, we see the same world as before, but with different eyes."
“对某一学科所作的研究可改变我们看待世界的方式。在研究了该学科之后，我们所看到的仍是和以前相同的世界，但看待问题的方式已全然不同。”

论点：
部分同意这个论断。不同学科背景的看待问题的方式有差异，但还有很多其他因素也会影响人们看待世界的方式。
论据：
1、随着人类社会的发展，科学不断分化。不同的学科逐渐形成了自己的完整体系。这其中包括每种学科的独特体系，都有独特的体系，需要有适合这个学科的思维方式。2、在某个学科领域的学习，会影响人们的思维模式。
3、诚然，学科学习会对人们的思维方式有影响，但还有其他很多因素也会影响人们的世界观。例如，人固有的性格特征，人在发展过程中的环境因素。通过与不同学科的人之间的交流也会改变我们看待问题的方式。
结论：
人们看待世界的方式是复杂的，学科学习会对其有影响，但并不是唯一影响的因素。因此，我们不能断然认为，不同学科的人他们看待世界的方式会完全不同。我们更加期待，不同学科的人之间能够有更多的交流，促进我们的自然科学和人文科学不断取得进步和突破。

     The statement above conceals that people with different academic discipline experiences will see the same world in various ways. Admittedly, studying an discipline do have an influence on people’s view of the world, however, many other factors may also cause individual differences of perceiving the world.

     First of all, every academic subject has its particular research approach and reasoning method to explore the truth of science. Before 16th century, philosophy was the only one academic, which contained all the research problems in the science field. As the development of society, science has been divided into many different branches, such as physics, psychology, chemistry, mathematics and so forth. Each subject focuses on a specific research field, which has been established it own system to discriminate with each other. Furthermore, the research method in each academic studying is based on the research character, which determines the thinking style in the reasoning course is different among various subjects. Just compare the subjects of chemistry and art. The former one emphasis the results of experiments, and any conclusion should be draw based on the phenomenon of an experiment. Whereas on the contrary, in the subject of, which is not necessary to do experiment, it is creation that is emphasized most. Therefore, it is clear to conclude that the think style in chemistry is more accurate while in art is more romantic.

     Based on the difference among various subjects, diversity will exist among people with different academic discipline. Many good examples of this diversity are seen in our daily life. Just image the situation when we talk about a good movie, such as Titanic. Students in the language department will focus on the lines in the movies. People whose major are music will pay more attention on the background music. And the students who are studying Economics may consider the amount of money received from the tickets sales of the movie. Consequently, it is not easy to see that people tend to solve problem in their own manner which is influenced by the discipline they received.

     But on the contrary, people with different academic discipline may share the same view, since academic discipline is not the only factor that alters people’s view of the world. One important factor is culture. A lot of social psychological researches have revealed that eastern and western cultures differ a lot which caused people from different cultures can not understand each other in many aspects. Another possible factor is the environment in which individuals grow up. Psychologists esteem that environment plays an important role in individual’s development, and it determines people’s personality in a large degree. We may use the same example as it has been mentioned above. When we talk about Titanic, girls will tend to be moved by the love story, while boys will give their attention to the actress who in their eyes is so beautiful. This difference is not due to the subject differences, but due to hormone in their body.

     In conclusion, people’s views of the world are very complex. After studying an academic discipline is not necessary to cause this diversity, though it does have an influence on this variety. We hope that people with different academic background will have more chance to communicate with each other, so that our society can make a greater progress in the future.

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写完以后觉得不是很满意，写得有点罗嗦了。
其实可以改成这样的三段：
1、不同专业的人思维方式因为专业本身研究方法的不同而有所差异；
2、但是还有其他很多因素也会影响人们的思维方式的差异；
3、因此不同专业的人也可能从同样的角度看待问题。
论点和结论不变。

这个文章的确不是很难，但是写起来感觉很不好举例子。本来有些话觉得有点多余，但是觉得句子还不错的，所以不忍心删除了……

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等我回来给你拍~
其实写得不错的 除了有点疑似跑题

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The statement above conceals[这个词？用在这里什么意思？隐藏？reveal?] that people with different academic discipline experiences will see the same world in various ways[我觉得题目不是这个意思 题目侧重在时间前后的纵向对比 而不是个学科间横向对比 注意到after...]. Admittedly, studying an[a] discipline do[does] have an influence on people’s view of the world, however, many other factors may also cause individual differences of perceiving the world.[题目也没有否认其他因素对世界看法的影响咯 题目如果说 Only after studying a discpline, our view of the world changes.才是你这样理解]

     First of all, every academic subject has its particular research approach and reasoning method[reasoning method这个搭配没见过哦。。专业说法应该不是这个 你想说什么意思？] to explore the truth of science. Before 16th century, philosophy was the only one academic[这个是形容词哦。。学科还是用discipline吧][还有这句话不符合事实哦 astronomy,law,math(esp.geometry 早已有之], which contained all the research problems in the science field. As[With] the development of society, science has been divided[has branched我觉得用主动比较好 这个是自然而然而不是人为的] into many different branches[啊 那这个词换下吧。。], such as physics, psychology, chemistry, mathematics and so forth. Each subject focuses on a specific research field, which has been established it own system to discriminate[我觉得用不定式不太好 因为to do一般表目的 而科学分支不是为了彼此区别才形成 改成which discriminate吧] with each other. Furthermore, the research method in each academic studying is based on the [research character这个表达意思不明确哦 你指什么], which determines the thinking style in the reasoning course[process较好] is different among various subjects. Just compare the subjects of chemistry and art. The former one emphasis[这个是名词 用emphasizes] the results of experiments, and any conclusion should be draw[-n] based on the phenomenon[-a复数较好] of an experiment. Whereas on the contrary[这2个意思重复了 取其一], in the subject of [art不要打漏单词哦], which is not necessary to do experiment[where experiment is not needed], it is creation that [is emphasized most改成matters most吧 2个is连用不大通]. Therefore, it is clear to conclude that the think[-ing] style in chemistry is more accurate while in art is[is可以去掉 读起来有节奏感的:P] more romantic.

     Based on the difference among various subjects, diversity will exist among people with different academic discipline[ background是不是好些？]. Many good examples of this diversity are seen in our daily life. Just image[?搭配不当哦 imagine?] the situation when we talk about a good movie, such as Titanic. Students in the language department will focus on the lines in the movies. People whose major are[is] music will pay more attention on[to] the background music[the music element吧 不仅仅是背景音乐]. And the students who are studying Economics[小写] may consider [the amount of money received from the tickets sales of the movie改成income of ticket office?票房收入是不是这么说我也不肯定 不过原来的表达有点罗嗦] . Consequently, it is not[??not??是不是应该去掉？] easy to see that people tend to solve problem[-s] in their own manner which is influenced by the discipline they received[这里表达也不准确 studied就好了].

     But on the contrary[这2个词意思又重复哦 取其一！], people with different academic discipline may share the same view, since academic discipline is not the only factor that alters people’s view of the world. One important factor is culture. A lot of social psychological researches have revealed that eastern and western cultures differ a lot which caused [the phenomenon that?原来句子有语法错误的] people from different cultures can not understand each other in many aspects. Another possible factor is the environment in which individuals grow up. Psychologists esteem[啊 这个词用得不多 赞！] that environment plays an important role in individual’s development, and it determines people’s personality in[to吧 记得是] a large degree. We may use the same example as it[去掉it as是关系代词指代it了] has been mentioned above. When we talk about Titanic, girls will tend to be moved by the love story, while boys will give their attention to the actress who in their eyes is so beautiful[觉得有点不通 不知道怎么改好]. This difference is not due to the subject differences, but due to hormone in their body.

     In conclusion, people’s views of the world are very complex. After[去掉after不然没主语] studying an academic discipline is not necessary to cause this diversity, though it does have an influence on this variety. We hope that people with different academic background will have more chance to communicate with each other, so that our society can make a greater progress in the future.[觉得结尾离中心较远。。有点突兀]

我个人认为第一段最后一句就定下了全文跑题的基调 shirley别怪我这么说哦 :P
我觉得论证中举例不是很准确而且广度不够哦 这么多例子何必总举Titanic？
觉得举Chicago都要好些:)

看得出组长比较忙哦 不少拼写语法错误:P xixi我看得比较仔细啦~

我总体也不知道如何评价了 因为我觉得是跑题了 请大家给点意见吧