Issue108 V6站队 8.8 高频！今天的模考之作，限时完成，还算满意

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In many countries it is now possible to turn on the television and view government at work. Watching these proceedings can help people understand the issues that affect their lives. The more kinds of government proceedings—trials, debates, meetings, etc—that are televised, the more society will benefit.
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Although in many countries it is now possible to televise government proceedings, and the broadcast helps to benefit our society, I would like to take exceptions to the speaker's claim, when he or she claims the more proceedings are televised the more society will benefit. Moreover, there are still other realistic problems we must pay enough to before fully taking the speaker's recommendation.  

Nowadays, the development of communication promises the televising of government operation, which can serve to enhance the level of democracy and then a better society. After all, how widely its citizens involve into the decisions of government and how representative of these decisions are the ultimate criteria to judge the level of democracy. Through the network of TV, citizens can supervise the proceedings--such as trials, debates, meetings, etc, right at home, which allows governments a larger possibility of collecting meaningful suggestions effectively from people who they servers. As a result, with the enhancement in democracy, our society will benefit from the more effective allocation of public resources and more fair judgment on certain issues.

However, by claiming that the more proceedings of government are televised, the more society will benefit, the speaker implies that our society will benefit most when all the government proceedings are broadcasted to the mass, which is actually a naive perception. For the purpose to ensure the safety of the nation and prevent the society from unnecessary panic, myriad information in government should be secluded from the mass. For example, governments, who televise its plan for an arrest of a gang of terrorist, are doomed to fail in the action, and such tragedy will repeat in other fields associated with the safety of a nation as long as they are subject to the television. Moreover, some seemingly urgent situation, which is in fact uncertain, will cause unnecessary panic among citizens, who usually do not assess the information rationally, especially when the information recevied is fragmentary itself.

Recognizing that not all the operation of government can be accessible to its citizens, another problem with the speaker's recommendation is that who should be in charge of such broadcast or who should decide whether a proceeding are fit for television. The answer is definitely neither mass media nor government itself. If we left the task to the mass media, who are notorious for their biased commentary, we actually risk devolving the reform into sheer instigation of the mass. Nor should governments be left with the mission, because they have incentives to envelop the information that might have negative influence on their authority--that is, if we do so we will accomplish little to a more democratic society and even create a new sort of censorship, which should be denounced by people cherishing freedom.

In final analysis, although televising government operation as its merits to enhance the level of democracy and then benefit our society, It is presumptuous for the speaker to claim the more proceedings are televised, the more our society can benefit. For when it comes to the safe of a nation, there is always information unfit for broadcast, let alone other unaddressed problems innate in the practice of this so-called reform.

[ Last edited by staralways on 2005-8-9 at 23:42 ]

mrealUID: 201732

你怎么到处占位子啊，呵呵，弄的我只能拍你的了：P

mrealUID: 201732

Issue 108 V6站队 8.8 高频！今天的模考之作，限时完成，还算满意

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In many countries it is now possible to turn on the television and view government at work. Watching these proceedings can help people understand the issues that affect their lives. The more kinds of government proceedings—trials, debates, meetings, etc—that are televised, the more society will benefit.
------正文------  528 words  43.5 minutes 完成之后贴到word里面改了三个单词
Although in many countries it is now possible to televise government proceedings, and the broadcast helps to benefit our society, I would like to take exceptions to the speaker's claim, when he or she claims the more proceedings are televised the more society will benefit. Moreover, there are still other realistic problems we must pay enough attention to before fully taking the speaker's recommendation.  

Nowadays, the development of communication promises the televising of government operation, which can serve to enhance the level of democracy and then a better society. After all, how widely its citizens involve into the decisions of government and how representative of these decisions are the ultimate criteria to judge the level of democracy. Through the network of TV, citizens can supervise the proceedings--such as trials, debates, meetings, etc, right at home, which allows governments a larger possibility of collecting meaningful suggestions effectively from people who they servers. As a result, with the enhancement in democracy, our society will benefit from the more effective allocation of public resources and more fair judgment on certain issues.

However, by claiming that the more proceedings of government are televised, the more society will benefit, the speaker implies that our society will benefit most when all the government proceedings are broadcasted to the mass, which is actually a naive perception. For the purpose to ensure the safety of the nation and prevent the society from unnecessary panic, myriad information in government should be secluded from the mass. For example, governments, who televise its plan for an arrest of a gang of terrorist, are doomed to fail in the action, and such tragedy will repeat in other fields associated with the safety of a nation as long as they are subject to the television. Moreover, some seemingly urgent situation, which is in fact uncertain, will cause unnecessary panic among citizens, who usually do not assess the information rationally, especially when the information recevied is fragmentary itself. especially这半句是不是考虑再解释一下呢？如果是在电视里全程播放是不是还有可能是fragmentary呢？

Recognizing that not all the operation of government can be accessible to its citizens, another problem with the speaker's recommendation is that who should be in charge of such broadcast or who should decide whether a proceeding are fit for television. The answer is definitely neither mass media nor government itself. If we left the task to the mass media, who are notorious for their biased commentary, we actually risk devolving the reform into sheer instigation of the mass. Nor should governments be left with the mission, because they have incentives to envelop the information that might have negative influence on their authority--that is, if we do so we will accomplish little to a more democratic society and even create a new sort of censorship, which should be denounced by people cherishing freedom.

In final analysis, although televising government operation as its merits to enhance the level of democracy and then benefit our society, It is presumptuous for the speaker to claim the more proceedings are televised, the more our society can benefit. For when it comes to the safe security好点吧 of a nation, there is always information unfit for broadcast, let alone other unaddressed problems innate in the practice of this so-called reform.直接放到中国的实际情况了吗？人家不是都有改革吧，呵呵

[ Last edited by mreal on 2005-8-9 at 19:02 ]

mrealUID: 201732

position：不是越多越好。
1电视监督能够增加民主程度。
2不是所有的政府活动都应该在电视上播放。
3政府或大众媒体都不适合来决定应该播放哪种政府活动。
这样看来3是不是有些脱节？？

除了这点疑问我剩下找的错误都有些吹毛求疵了，呵呵~

mkb57288UID: 2105771

即使24小时播放也不能保证完全，就算是播的完全观众也未必看得完全
后面那个是safety
最后没有想表达中国的情况，我是想说televizing government proceedings 本身是reform

看样子还是有一些表述不清，呵呵

mkb57288UID: 2105771

主要是想表达如果这样的实施过程中的问题解决不了，再好的计划也只是utopia

mrealUID: 201732

Originally posted by mkb57288 at 2005-8-9 21:28
主要是想表达如果这样的实施过程中的问题解决不了，再好的计划也只是utopia

你的假设可以理解，不过应该把你上面的解释加进去，要是我单看你写的3应该理解不到你说的这一层吧~