2007年8月25日，Capric作文一篇

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WRITING TASK 2  剑桥2  P106 (General Training)

Some governments say how many children a family can have in their country. They may control the number of children someone has through taxes.

It is sometimes necessary and right for a government to control the population in this way.

Do you agree or disagree?

Give reasons for your answer.

The contraversial issue, population control taken by some countries’ administratives, prompt the world’s attention upon reducing the birth rate deliberately hence resulting in low population growth. Tax disincentives are even used to punish large families with more than one child. Those measures, in my opinion, are relatively feasible and sustainable under certain circumstances.

The best known population-control policy, introduce by Chinese government in 1979, is “one-child policy”, which means permitting only one child per family. Though many overseas newspapers or periodicals criticized it as a brutal act at that time, it has been proved to be an effective way to decrease the fast growing population nationwide, at least retard it in a moderate speed.

Depending too much on self-control is another tough story. People who live in rural areas are found especially difficult to adminstrate, so family planning becomes a firm hand in dealing with these troubles. As the earth is turning into a hungered planet, there should be a public awareness about the population control instead of birth indulgement.

To sum up, population control has been proved to be successful according to the datas shown in government’s report, and it should be affiliated with other useful methods to work together to cope with population-related problems.


写不出来硬撑，这个问题很麻烦。

[ 本帖最后由 capric 于 2007-8-25 22:51 编辑 ]

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字数，，，，，

你计时了没有 ？

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The contraversial issue, population control taken by some countries’ administratives, prompt the world’s attention upon reducing the birth rate deliberately hence resulting in low population growth rate.（减少出生率和低人口增长似乎区别不大，或许你后边可以说缓解了人口问题的压力） Tax disincentives are even used to punish large families with more than one child. Those measures, in my opinion, are relatively feasible and sustainable under certain circumstances.

The best（太绝对了，换成最有效的比较好吧，most effective） known population-control policy, introduced by Chinese government in 1979, is “one-child policy”, which means permitting only one child per family. Though many overseas newspapers or periodicals criticized it as a brutal act at that time, it has been proved to be an effective way to decrease the fast growing population nationwide, at least retard it in a moderate speed.（不错，思路挺清晰的！）

Depending too much on self-control is another tough story. People who live in rural areas are found especially difficult to be adminstrated, so family planning becomes a firm hand in dealing with these troubles. As the earth is turning into a hungered planet, there should be a public awareness about the population control instead of birth indulgement.

To sum up, population control has been proved to be successful according to the datas shown in government’s report, and it should be affiliated with other useful methods to work together to cope with population-related problems.

1.字数好像差的比较多，需要注意一下，很明显的~
2.另外，第一段和第二段你都是在分析背景和采取措施的效果，第三段说了一下农村实行人口政策的难度，但是，最关键的问题，也就是实行人口政策的利与弊，你却加以回避了，感觉论证上不够严密。
3.值得鼓励的是，感觉全文流畅性很好，句子与句子之间的衔接和句式的变化都做的比较好！

[ 本帖最后由 夜空的彼方 于 2007-8-25 23:29 编辑 ]

capricUID: 2331822

sigh，这个问题诌不出来啊。
用时2小时，字数不够。

谢谢夜空，也就是在你的带动下，偶才有继续奋斗的动力~~~
在论证时尽量做到严密、透彻。
偶将更加努力，沿着。。。大道奔向前。