"为我所用"小组第七次作业argument140

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TOPIC: ARGUMENT140 - The following appeared in a report of the Committee on Faculty Promotions and Salaries at Elm City University.
"During her seventeen years as a professor of botany, Professor Thomas has proved herself to be well worth her annual salary of $50,000. Her classes are among the largest at the university, demonstrating her popularity among students. Moreover, the money she has brought to the university in research grants has exceeded her salary in each of the last two years. Therefore, in consideration of Professor Thomas' demonstrated teaching and research abilities, we recommend that she receive a $10,000 raise and a promotion to Department Chairperson; without such a raise and promotion, we fear that Professor Thomas will leave Elm City University for another college."

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    The arguer put out many evidence to show the qualification of Professor Thomas to his work. And with the evidence, he judges that Thomas' annual salary does not fit to her competency now and concludes that a 10,000 dollars raise should be made to her salary in order to praise her working abilities and keep her working in Elm City University. From careful scrutiny, it is not difficult to pick up some fatal fallacies from the arguer's discussion.
    Firstly, the arguer fails to illustrate that her lessens are popular among students. The arguer alleges that Thomas's calsses are among the largest at Elm City University. But this can only show that Thomas was a diligent professor rather than show that her lessens are popular among students. One survey should be done to investigate if students are satisfied with those classes given by Professor Thomas.
    Secondly, the amount of money brought by Thomas for research can not prove that her reasearch ability is good. There are many other factors that can help people to make an  even judgement of Thomas' research ability. These factors include the quanlity and quantity of papers from her, the achievements made by her in research and so on. If we only evaluate her research ability by the money brought to the university by her, it is highly possible that we will make an erroneous conclusion.
    Thirdly, the arguer concludes that only a 10,000 dollars raise of salary and the position of Department Chairman can prevent Thomas from leaving Elm City University. The arguer does not compare Thomas' achievement to the other professors in Elm City University. If there are many professors whose teaching and research abilities are all superior to Thomas, what can prove that the salary raise and promotion is deserved to her? Let alone the real teaching and research abilities of Professor Thomas, and let alone whether she deserves the raise and promotion. Whether the salary raise and promotion can prevent her from leaving the university is not a clear issue. Many other factors can influence her will.
    Given the fallacies above, the arguer's conclusion is ineffective. Many more work should be done to support the arguer's conclusion.


[ 本帖最后由 rienzi 于 2008-3-31 17:28 编辑 ]

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The arguer put out many evidence to show the qualification of Professor Thomas to his work. And with the evidence, he judges that Thomas' annual salary does not fit to her competency now and concludes that a 10,000 dollars raise should be made to her salary in order to praise her working abilities and keep her working in Elm City University. From careful scrutiny, it is not difficult to pick up some fatal fallacies from the arguer's discussion.

Firstly, the arguer fails to illustrate that her lessens are popular among students. The arguer alleges that Thomas's calsses(classes) are among the largest at Elm City University. But this can only show that Thomas was a diligent professor rather than show that her lessens(lessons) are popular among students. One survey should be done to investigate if students are satisfied with those classes given by Professor Thomas.

Secondly, the amount of money brought by Thomas for research can not prove that her reasearch (research) ability is good. There are many other factors that can help people to make an even judgement(judgment) of Thomas' research ability. These factors include the quanlity(quality) and quantity of papers from her, the achievements made by her in research and so on. If we only evaluate her research ability by the money brought to the university by her, it is highly possible that we will make an erroneous conclusion.

Thirdly, the arguer concludes that only a 10,000 dollars raise of salary and the position of Department Chairman can prevent Thomas from leaving Elm City University. The arguer does not compare Thomas' achievement to the other professors in Elm City University. If there are many professors whose teaching and research abilities are all superior to Thomas, what can prove that the salary raise and promotion is deserved to her? Let alone the real teaching and research abilities of Professor Thomas, and let alone whether she deserves the raise and promotion. Whether the salary raise and promotion can prevent her from leaving the university is not a clear issue. Many other factors can influence her will.

Given the fallacies above, the arguer's conclusion is ineffective. Many more work should be done to support the arguer's conclusion.

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批驳较为有利，注意以下结尾应该和前文的批驳相互照应。

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原帖由 rienzi 于 2008-3-31 17:27 发表
TOPIC: ARGUMENT140 - The following appeared in a report of the Committee on Faculty Promotions and Salaries at Elm City University.

"The arguer put out many evidences to show the qualification of Professor Thomas to his work. And with the evidences, he judges that Thomas' annual salary does not fit to her competency now and concludes that a 10,000 dollars raise should be made to her salary in order to not only praise her working abilities but also to keep her working in Elm City University.

From careful scrutiny, it is not difficult to pick up some fatal fallacies from the arguer's discussion.

Firstly, the arguer fails to illustrate that her lessens are popular among students. The arguer alleges that Thomas's calsses are among the largest at Elm City University. But this can only show that Thomas was a diligent professor rather than her popularity among students. it will be more persuasive if a relative survey done to investigate if students are satisfied with those classes given by Professor Thomas.

Secondly, the amount of money brought by Thomas for research can not prove that her reasearch ability is good. There are many other factors that can help people to make an even judgement of Thomas' research ability. These factors include the quanlity and quantity of papers created/published by her, the achievements made by her in research and so on. If we only evaluate her research ability by the amount of money brought to the university by her, it is highly possible that we will make an erroneous conclusion.

Thirdly, the arguer concludes that only a 10,000 dollars raise of salary and the position of Department Chairman can prevent Thomas from leaving Elm City University. The arguer does not compare Thomas' achievement to the other professors in Elm City University. If there are many professors whose teaching and research abilities are far superior to Thomas, (Obviously 10000dollar raise for him and the promotion advise is not worthy at all.only the comparision result can prove that... )what can prove that the salary raise and promotion is deserved to her? Let alone the real teaching and research abilities of Professor Thomas, and let alone whether she deserves the raise and promotion. Whether the salary raise and promotion can prevent her from leaving the university is not a clear issue. Many other factors can influence her will. Given the fallacies above, the arguer's conclusion is ineffective. Many more work should be done to support the arguer's conclusion.

我觉得最后一个还不如用是否加薪会留住这个教授的心，可能教授觉得其他因素才是更让他留下来的原因，比如和业界的合作，学校国际化的程度啊等等来论证更清楚点。虽然你的观点没错。但是你这样写的语言方面就觉得不精炼了。个人意见。

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The arguer put out many evidences to show the qualification of Professor Thomas to his work. And with the evidence, he judges that Thomas' annual salary does not fit (to) her competency now and concludes that a 10,000 dollars raise should be made to her salary in order to praise her working abilities and keep her working in Elm City University. From careful scrutiny, it is not difficult to pick up some fatal fallacies from the arguer's discussion.
    Firstly, the arguer fails to illustrate that her lessens are popular among students. The arguer alleges that Thomas's calsses are among the largest at Elm City University. But this can only show that Thomas was a diligent (不一定是勤奋吧）professor rather than show that her lessens are popular among students. One survey should be done to investigate if students are satisfied with those classes given by Professor Thomas.
    Secondly, the amount of money brought by Thomas for research can not prove that her reasearch ability is good. There are many other factors that can help people to make an  even judgement of Thomas' research ability. These factors include the quanlity and quantity of papers from her, the achievements made by her in research and so on. If we only evaluate her research ability by the money brought to the university by her, it is highly possible that we will make an erroneous conclusion.
    Thirdly, the arguer concludes that only a 10,000 dollars raise of salary and the position of Department Chairman can prevent Thomas from leaving Elm City University. The arguer does not compare Thomas' achievement to the other professors in Elm City University. If there are many professors whose teaching and research abilities are all superior to Thomas, what can prove that the salary raise and promotion is deserved to her? Let alone the real teaching and research abilities of Professor Thomas, and let alone whether she deserves the raise and promotion.有点重复了 Whether the salary raise and promotion can prevent her from leaving the university is not a clear issue. Many other factors can influence her will.
    Given the fallacies above, the arguer's conclusion is ineffective. Many more work should be done to support the arguer's conclusion.结尾最好再加点建议